Bringing Lunch Home
An Amanda's Pitch poem36 total reviews
Comment from AnnieDawn
I like what I read and encourage you to keep on writing. I stopped when I lost my son and regret it. The hole never fills but the pain eases. After 16 years there are times when I still burst into tears for no apparent reason. I pray you will be able to deal with the loss and I am so sorry for your loss. You sound like a strong person and I will keep you in my prayers.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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I like what I read and encourage you to keep on writing. I stopped when I lost my son and regret it. The hole never fills but the pain eases. After 16 years there are times when I still burst into tears for no apparent reason. I pray you will be able to deal with the loss and I am so sorry for your loss. You sound like a strong person and I will keep you in my prayers.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your prayers. Yes, I'm told the pain never goes away but it does ease a bit. I'm sorry you're still grieving, too. Maybe we can comfort each other through PMs or email.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice poem you have penned in a form I have never heard of before. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you used. Thank you for sharing. Great to see you back for now. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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This is a very nice poem you have penned in a form I have never heard of before. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you used. Thank you for sharing. Great to see you back for now. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Teri, for your love and support.
Comment from Gloria ....
Hi Yvonne, I can't imagine your sorrow, but I fully understand and respect your expressed wishes in the prose portion of this post. Hugs to you.
So good to read another poem from you. And what a delightful verse it is. An Amanda's Pitch poem seems like something worth giving a try and anytime it's about birds you can count me in the cheering section.
I very much enjoyed the pure, simple pleasure enjoyed by these two birds.
Good read and always great to see you. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Hi Yvonne, I can't imagine your sorrow, but I fully understand and respect your expressed wishes in the prose portion of this post. Hugs to you.
So good to read another poem from you. And what a delightful verse it is. An Amanda's Pitch poem seems like something worth giving a try and anytime it's about birds you can count me in the cheering section.
I very much enjoyed the pure, simple pleasure enjoyed by these two birds.
Good read and always great to see you. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much, Gloria. I appreciate your concern and support so very much.
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Yvonne, I am not familiar with this form and find it very interesting with alliterations in each line, the mandatory syllable count, and the set rhyming scheme. Very enjoyable. I will study it a little further and hope to write one as good as this one. :). Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Hello Yvonne, I am not familiar with this form and find it very interesting with alliterations in each line, the mandatory syllable count, and the set rhyming scheme. Very enjoyable. I will study it a little further and hope to write one as good as this one. :). Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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I know you can do better. I'll be looking forward to reading it. Thank you.
Comment from judiverse
My sympathies for your loss. I lost a younger sister a few years ago, and I know how hard it is to get over such a loss. You never forget. I am glad to see you back on FanStory, and I think that's a good thing for you. Your poem is beautifully structured. It's easy to visualize the mockingbird's actions and how he wooed his mate. Lovely repeating line. judi
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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My sympathies for your loss. I lost a younger sister a few years ago, and I know how hard it is to get over such a loss. You never forget. I am glad to see you back on FanStory, and I think that's a good thing for you. Your poem is beautifully structured. It's easy to visualize the mockingbird's actions and how he wooed his mate. Lovely repeating line. judi
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much, Judi, for reviewing and for your loving support. I'm going to try getting back to FS and see if it helps me. With friends like you, I know it will be easier for me. 8-)
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You're welcome. You'll find it easier once you get started writing again. Your poems are so delightful to read. judi
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an excellent job with your challenge poem, Yvonne. Welcome back. Your prose introduction is straight from your heart. I agree with what you wrote 100%. Your poem is beautiful. The words flow smoothly with great rhymes, a great storyline, and super imagery. As I read it, I could see the birds doing everything you mentioned. The ending is so sweet. I love how you observed and shared what nature and God has provided for us to enjoy. Of course those tow mockingbirds were doing just what birds do. But for us to see them and you to so eloquently write it for those who weren't there, it was awesome. Thank you.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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You did an excellent job with your challenge poem, Yvonne. Welcome back. Your prose introduction is straight from your heart. I agree with what you wrote 100%. Your poem is beautiful. The words flow smoothly with great rhymes, a great storyline, and super imagery. As I read it, I could see the birds doing everything you mentioned. The ending is so sweet. I love how you observed and shared what nature and God has provided for us to enjoy. Of course those tow mockingbirds were doing just what birds do. But for us to see them and you to so eloquently write it for those who weren't there, it was awesome. Thank you.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for this lovely review. We'll see how much getting back helps me. I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem. What would I do without your love and support!