seagrass plenitude (haiku)
The trail to my beach is bordered by seagrass...38 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
I love all the S sounds that resonate with the imagery portrayed so it SOUNDS like wind in the leaves. Love the imagery of 'wings' too. The only critique I have is to suggest using BLADES instead of leaves, since it's grass and not trees.
sun shines on tall grass
as its blades stand in splendor--
wind hushes its wings...
Lovely work and presentation too! I enjoyed this.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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I love all the S sounds that resonate with the imagery portrayed so it SOUNDS like wind in the leaves. Love the imagery of 'wings' too. The only critique I have is to suggest using BLADES instead of leaves, since it's grass and not trees.
sun shines on tall grass
as its blades stand in splendor--
wind hushes its wings...
Lovely work and presentation too! I enjoyed this.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for reading this haiku, and for your help; already taken.
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:-)))
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your haiku contest entry is descriptive even without a picture. Your words pair perfectly with your great art choice. I enjoyed reading your poem, amada. Good job with the syllable count per line. I like the personification of the wind.
Thank you for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Your haiku contest entry is descriptive even without a picture. Your words pair perfectly with your great art choice. I enjoyed reading your poem, amada. Good job with the syllable count per line. I like the personification of the wind.
Thank you for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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I truly appreciate your support. Thank you, Jan.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, I wish I had six stars for it. This is a magnificent haiku, with stunning imagery and visuals, and a great artistic presentation and artwork.
Good luck in the contest.
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Oh, I wish I had six stars for it. This is a magnificent haiku, with stunning imagery and visuals, and a great artistic presentation and artwork.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from mermaids
This is the first poem I have read about seagrass and your words create a clear image. I like your last line, it is as if the wind is respecting the seagrass. Excellent haiku form that paints a picture of nature.
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This is the first poem I have read about seagrass and your words create a clear image. I like your last line, it is as if the wind is respecting the seagrass. Excellent haiku form that paints a picture of nature.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for "getting" the satori line. Blessings to you as well.
Comment from LisaMay
I like the feeling of serenity this poem achieves, but am a little unsure of how to read it... slightly ambiguous. Possibly the splendor of the tall grass has momentarily silenced the wind in awe?... before the wind's wings beat again.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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I like the feeling of serenity this poem achieves, but am a little unsure of how to read it... slightly ambiguous. Possibly the splendor of the tall grass has momentarily silenced the wind in awe?... before the wind's wings beat again.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Something like that, dear poet.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I've never thought of grass having wings before, but your haiku is inventive and difference and I loved your fine presentation, very atmospheric, love Dolly x
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I've never thought of grass having wings before, but your haiku is inventive and difference and I loved your fine presentation, very atmospheric, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your comments, Dolly.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is a poem whose words about nature are as beautiful as the nature picture you chose. It meets the definition of a haiku, but also leaves an impression of peace. Very well done. Best to you as you write more!
Tina
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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This is a poem whose words about nature are as beautiful as the nature picture you chose. It meets the definition of a haiku, but also leaves an impression of peace. Very well done. Best to you as you write more!
Tina
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Tina, for your gracious comments.
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You are so welcome:)
Comment from harmony13
The words of this poem are just lovely! The author's words are calming,
serene and creative. The artwork compliments the theme and words of
this poem well. Have a great weekend!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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The words of this poem are just lovely! The author's words are calming,
serene and creative. The artwork compliments the theme and words of
this poem well. Have a great weekend!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reading and commenting in my posted haiku today.
Comment from Colin John
Hi Amanda, this is a lovely Haiku poem and deserves credit as the words chosen do work really well and the last line for me works the best as it concludes a fine poem on nature. Cheers Colin
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Hi Amanda, this is a lovely Haiku poem and deserves credit as the words chosen do work really well and the last line for me works the best as it concludes a fine poem on nature. Cheers Colin
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much Colin, for your cheers and your super review.
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No problem Amanda.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Amada, this is a lovely, well composed haiku. Perfect enjambment in lines one and two and good use of metaphor in your satori. Perfect layout with a lovely picture. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Hello Amada, this is a lovely, well composed haiku. Perfect enjambment in lines one and two and good use of metaphor in your satori. Perfect layout with a lovely picture. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Dorothy...