Angel of Ireland ~ The Twins
Cal and Tomas30 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I'm so glad Caleb was ok. Your description of your setting is vivid. You have used strong metaphors. There are several uses of foreshadowing. The opening quote, the fact they are twins and the father's cautions. This line unbeknownst to Tomas is very understated, almost tongue-in-cheek: "It's like a miracle." This makes the whole message even stronger: ". The parson couldn't see the angel" This is a lovely story.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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I'm so glad Caleb was ok. Your description of your setting is vivid. You have used strong metaphors. There are several uses of foreshadowing. The opening quote, the fact they are twins and the father's cautions. This line unbeknownst to Tomas is very understated, almost tongue-in-cheek: "It's like a miracle." This makes the whole message even stronger: ". The parson couldn't see the angel" This is a lovely story.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the kind review, their lives. I'm so glad you enjoyed my newest angel of Ireland. Sending you my best today as always, Sally XOs....
Comment from BethShelby
What a nice story. Twins are fun and it is wonderful whtn they love each other so much that they never won't to be separated. I have my own set of twins but might only tolerate each other.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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What a nice story. Twins are fun and it is wonderful whtn they love each other so much that they never won't to be separated. I have my own set of twins but might only tolerate each other.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Beth, for the wonderful review of my work. I'm so glad you like my newest angel story.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally XOs....
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story with us. As a mother of boys I completely understand.
A troubled boy would test Cal and his brother, trying to server their bond. (sever???)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you for sharing this story with us. As a mother of boys I completely understand.
A troubled boy would test Cal and his brother, trying to server their bond. (sever???)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the wonderful review and kind compliments. Thank you also for the the typo, it helped me catch it early on. Sending you my best today as always
Sally XOs......
Comment from damommy
What a wonderful story. You managed to tell create something magical out of a childhood accident. My sons aren't twins (three years apart) and they are middle-aged now, but they were always that way with each other. I was hooked form the first word of this story. You have a way of pulling the reader right into the story.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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What a wonderful story. You managed to tell create something magical out of a childhood accident. My sons aren't twins (three years apart) and they are middle-aged now, but they were always that way with each other. I was hooked form the first word of this story. You have a way of pulling the reader right into the story.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind comments, dear Yvonne. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally XOs.....
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great story that kept my attention from beginning to end. Wonderful title too!
Noticed an extra word: our
Oh, all right," said Tomas. "Try not to kill yourself. I rather not tell our our father of your premature death."
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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This is a great story that kept my attention from beginning to end. Wonderful title too!
Noticed an extra word: our
Oh, all right," said Tomas. "Try not to kill yourself. I rather not tell our our father of your premature death."
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous stars, dear Rebecca. Thanks for catching my spags, as I use voice over text along with a blind assist keyboard to write. It's a miracle not to have something. LOL!! I appreciate your compliments and encouragement.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs.......
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You're always welcome. Your stories are spectacular.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What an amazing story! What happened to the bully? I hope he learned a lesson, too. Your grandson was a lucky lad, God must really be looking down on them. I'm so pleased everything ended happily for the twins. A lovely story, Sally. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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What an amazing story! What happened to the bully? I hope he learned a lesson, too. Your grandson was a lucky lad, God must really be looking down on them. I'm so pleased everything ended happily for the twins. A lovely story, Sally. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind compliments, dear Sandra. I appreciate it so much. It's always so good to see you.
In the story, the bully walks away, refusing Tomas' cries for help. I didn't want to give his bad actions any more attention.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally XOs......
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like and have enjoyed the story spiritually expressed, all about your twin grandsons, the free flow of thoughts, realistic and contributory dialogues; catchy beginning and a resolved and happy ending. ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I like and have enjoyed the story spiritually expressed, all about your twin grandsons, the free flow of thoughts, realistic and contributory dialogues; catchy beginning and a resolved and happy ending. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for the excellent for you and kind compliments. It is so appreciated. Sending my best today as always, Sally xo
Comment from Cindy Decker
Hi, Sally!
I had a friend who was of Irish heritage with coal black hair and deep blue eyes (I erroneously thought Irish people all had red hair and freckles. He told me many stories of Ireland and I became enthralled with a country that still believes in banshees, fairies and the like.
Your work kept me reading; I liked the suspense of the boy climbing the tree; there is always something bad that comes of a boy climbing a tree. What a wonderful concept writing about a boy who can see an angel, when no one else can.
I wonderful folklore story, Sally. I really enjoyed it.
Blessings for a wonderful week.
Cindy
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Hi, Sally!
I had a friend who was of Irish heritage with coal black hair and deep blue eyes (I erroneously thought Irish people all had red hair and freckles. He told me many stories of Ireland and I became enthralled with a country that still believes in banshees, fairies and the like.
Your work kept me reading; I liked the suspense of the boy climbing the tree; there is always something bad that comes of a boy climbing a tree. What a wonderful concept writing about a boy who can see an angel, when no one else can.
I wonderful folklore story, Sally. I really enjoyed it.
Blessings for a wonderful week.
Cindy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the lovely review and generous six star rating, dear Cindy. I am so honored by this. I'm so sorry to be so late to thank you. I've been real sick with a kidney infection. I'm doing much better today and up to writing. I appreciate you so much!! Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs......
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Sally I hope you feel better.🌈
Blessings.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Very nice story about the angel of Ireland and the twins. It sounded almost like a fabel, until I read that the story is based on the twin grandsons' life-adventures and the unseparately bond between them. Yes, I have heard also stories of how twins can be miles apart, but are able to know what the other one is doing or thinking. Miraculous!
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Very nice story about the angel of Ireland and the twins. It sounded almost like a fabel, until I read that the story is based on the twin grandsons' life-adventures and the unseparately bond between them. Yes, I have heard also stories of how twins can be miles apart, but are able to know what the other one is doing or thinking. Miraculous!
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Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind comments. It is so appreciated. So good to see you today, Marjon. Sending my best day as always, Sally XOs.....
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You are welcome, Sally. Take care.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Sally.
Rarely do I ever review a Fan's (or other FanStorians' posts) longer verses or stories, but your title piqued my interest. So I started to read, and then read some more. I then read your notes and so I know a bit about the real story.
Great presentation for my read today.
Mark
P.S. you might want to add a space before your squiggle in your title; it appears to me to be missing. I am not sure if there is actually one after it either.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Sally.
Rarely do I ever review a Fan's (or other FanStorians' posts) longer verses or stories, but your title piqued my interest. So I started to read, and then read some more. I then read your notes and so I know a bit about the real story.
Great presentation for my read today.
Mark
P.S. you might want to add a space before your squiggle in your title; it appears to me to be missing. I am not sure if there is actually one after it either.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the lovely review and generous stars, dear Mark. I am honored. I'm glad you enjoyed this. I took your advice about the title, but barely made it. Whew! Edit only allows so many characters. It does look good. :)
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo