Understudy
Chance of a Lifetime27 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I wonder how many understudies have contemplated something like that. It must be so frustrating having the star so perfect. But, Len got his just rewards in the end. You can't deliberately plan a murder, cut the hangman's rope and get away with it. Well done, Liz, this was a really gripping horror story. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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I wonder how many understudies have contemplated something like that. It must be so frustrating having the star so perfect. But, Len got his just rewards in the end. You can't deliberately plan a murder, cut the hangman's rope and get away with it. Well done, Liz, this was a really gripping horror story. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Thanks for the virtual (maybe) vote Sandra--contest over, didn't win, never do. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Tate A. Davis
This was incredibly gripping and so so vivid. I could see this being quite the riveting audition piece. Great use of monologue. Would be interested to see how this would pair with some external sounds - e.g. police sirens, or the crowd murmuring to really sell the tragedy. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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This was incredibly gripping and so so vivid. I could see this being quite the riveting audition piece. Great use of monologue. Would be interested to see how this would pair with some external sounds - e.g. police sirens, or the crowd murmuring to really sell the tragedy. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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What a lovely ssssssurpise, Tate. Stop by anytime! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from judiverse
I hope Lenny gets just what he deserves. This was premeditated murder, no doubt about it, as he describes his careful planning. You did a great job with characterization and details. The police will no doubt be able to tell that the safety belt has been tampered with. I can understand the understudy's frustration at never getting to go on, but that's the theater. It is ironic that the performance was canceled. Police will soon discover the motive and means. And he was right there on the scene. Great horror writing entry, and best of luck. judi
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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I hope Lenny gets just what he deserves. This was premeditated murder, no doubt about it, as he describes his careful planning. You did a great job with characterization and details. The police will no doubt be able to tell that the safety belt has been tampered with. I can understand the understudy's frustration at never getting to go on, but that's the theater. It is ironic that the performance was canceled. Police will soon discover the motive and means. And he was right there on the scene. Great horror writing entry, and best of luck. judi
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Thanks, Judy. If not for the contest calling for a story, I would have construed this as a monologue script, with Lenny alone on the empty stage--after having committed the crime (not seen by us) and after the (imaginary) audience has been dismissed--relating to us what he'd done. It would end with his turning his head toward the (seen? unseen? to us) policemen as he says his last line then walking off stage toward them. Cheers. LIZ
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You're welcome. I agree it would have worked really well for a script. Maybe you can still do that. judi
Comment from Margaret Bednar
To be the star of the show, the top billing, isn't all it's cracked up to be! Whatever happened to the saying "There are no small parts, only small actors"? :) Truly well told!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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To be the star of the show, the top billing, isn't all it's cracked up to be! Whatever happened to the saying "There are no small parts, only small actors"? :) Truly well told!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Thanks Margaret--I enjoyed writing this. Rather, I channeled the killer and let him tell his dreadful tale, and tried to keep up typing. Cheers. LIZ
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... well, you channeled successfully !
Comment from BethShelby
You did a great job on this horror fiction. Apparently, your character won't get away with his carefully planned crime. You've mad the villain out to be a jealous understudy waiting for his turn only to have his performance canceled. Good entry. I hope you win.
Beth
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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You did a great job on this horror fiction. Apparently, your character won't get away with his carefully planned crime. You've mad the villain out to be a jealous understudy waiting for his turn only to have his performance canceled. Good entry. I hope you win.
Beth
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Thanks Beth--I enjoyed writing this. Rather, I channeled the killer and let him tell his dreadful tale, and tried to keep up typing. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a well written horror story that should do well in the Horror Writing contest. I was glued from the beginning to the end. I was happy the police were waiting in the wings!
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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This is a well written horror story that should do well in the Horror Writing contest. I was glued from the beginning to the end. I was happy the police were waiting in the wings!
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Thanks Rebecca--I enjoyed writing this. Rather, I channeled the killer and let him tell his dreadful tale, and tried to keep up typing. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from roof35
I give you high marks for being extremely creepy. Your picture pairs well as it is not funny but creepy, too. Your writing is good and your story told well.
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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I give you high marks for being extremely creepy. Your picture pairs well as it is not funny but creepy, too. Your writing is good and your story told well.
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Thanks for stopping by! I enjoyed writing this. Rather, I channeled the killer and let him tell his dreadful tale, and tried to keep up typing. Cheers. LIZ