Comment from amada

Excellent

This is a dramatic and intriguing sonnet about the lady called Jade. Your sonnet follows all the rules while maintaining the reader's attention. A truly well deserved sonnet to win the contest.

 Comment Written 21-May-2020

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reply by the author on 22-May-2020

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from royowen

Excellent

The first love I ever had was beautiful, I was eighteen, she, nearly sixteen, after 9 months together she dumped me, it was devastating. 7 years later we renewed the relationship, about the same time, she dumped me again. Glad she did.
You've captured that time brilliantly and beautifully. This is a super sonnet entry. You read well, good luck, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 21-May-2020

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reply by the author on 22-May-2020

Roy, it is always a plus when a poem surfaces a memory from the reader's own life. It happens to me often - maybe because, like you, I have lived a long life!

Many thanks for the great review.

Steve

reply by royowen on 22-May-2020

That?s so true

Comment from roof35

Excellent

I could find no fault with the structure, rhyming or flow of the words. It was easy to tell you are a professional writer. I cannot say I enjoyed reading this sad, sad tale.

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 Comment Written 21-May-2020

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reply by the author on 22-May-2020

Thanks for that.

Nope it's not exactly rainbows and flowers, is it? But then, if all poetry was rainbows and flowers, wouldn't life be boring? Sometimes life can be downright ugly and the poem reflects that. Glad you caught the sadness - some readers missed that.

I simply hope the message resonates.

Steve