Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

(suggestion: re swallow sadness--omit "down"). Gripping story with a bonus poem! Your descriptions of war are chilling and vivid--I fear you write from experience; if not, extra kudos. Cheers. LIZ

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 Comment Written 10-May-2020

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reply by the author on 13-May-2020

Hi Liz, Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. Also, for your suggestion. We will leave down in there, though, 'cause that's Bill's "Smoky Mountain" talk. Appreciate the help! Glad you enjoyed the read. Chapter 29 is in the works and coming soon. Wishing you all the best. Take care and God bless. Cheers! :)
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 14-May-2020

Understood! I often make intentional usage errors and include redundancies in dialog. Indeed, last month I released a parody nonsense pompous rambling run-on monstrosity consisting of nothing but blatant errors in grammar, usage, repetitions, and utter illogic. I titled it BEYOND ALL HOPE OF REPAIR: Sentenced to Death. I 'fessed up in the footnotes hoping to forestall pages of corrections by diligent reviewers. I was astounded that three people took the piece seriously and lauded the atrocity! Guess they forgot to check the footnotes! Even so, the title and the punchline should have been hints enough. Cheers. LIZ