The Young Medlar
A cautionary tale.32 total reviews
Comment from Mistydawn
What a sultry poem from a plant's POV, but tastefully done. I can also see how it could be a metaphor for a man and woman. Maybe I just have a dirty mind, lol. It's very well-written, interesting start to finish. Your notes are very useful.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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What a sultry poem from a plant's POV, but tastefully done. I can also see how it could be a metaphor for a man and woman. Maybe I just have a dirty mind, lol. It's very well-written, interesting start to finish. Your notes are very useful.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Many thanks for your very kind review of this one, Dawn. I'm glad it didn't cause offence! All good wishes, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your poem. It caused me to smile. I miss my first graders so much. This is the time of year we teach the parts of the flowers and how animals need plants and plants need animals to survive. The kids all get a kick when we discuss reproduction as part of this need. Thank you for sharing.
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I enjoyed reading your poem. It caused me to smile. I miss my first graders so much. This is the time of year we teach the parts of the flowers and how animals need plants and plants need animals to survive. The kids all get a kick when we discuss reproduction as part of this need. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Many thanks for your kind review of this one, Barbara. I'm glad you enjoyed it! All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What can I say, Tony? This is such a brilliant play on words, it's funny as well as being educational. How wonderful to be both male and female, no chance of either slipping off for a bit of external romance!! LOL. I love how you had the female side curtsying, and the male bursting with lust, LOL, this poem is so much fun to read, I loved it. Your author's notes were equally charming! :)) Well done, my friend, there is more to you than meets this girls eye!! :)) Sandra xx
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What can I say, Tony? This is such a brilliant play on words, it's funny as well as being educational. How wonderful to be both male and female, no chance of either slipping off for a bit of external romance!! LOL. I love how you had the female side curtsying, and the male bursting with lust, LOL, this poem is so much fun to read, I loved it. Your author's notes were equally charming! :)) Well done, my friend, there is more to you than meets this girls eye!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Many thanks, Helen, for your lovely review of this one and the six stars. I'm glad it brought a smile! All good wishes, Tony
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LOL!! You always call me Helen! Do you think I'm a bit like your 'heroine' in your book? LOL!! I don't mind, honestly, I think it gives me an air of mystery, 'Who is that intelligent lady Tony knows? LOL You are most welcome and you deserved the 6, my friend. :)) xx
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Here's the long explanation! My mother-in-law was a lifetime friend of Keith Michel's sister, Helen, who lived here in Adelaide. We used to see a great deal of her over the years. I guess my brain got programmed!
Nothing to do with the heroine of my novel. On advice from my wife, I've changed her name to Tamsin. I'm not sure about it, but that's what it is. A happy wife is a happy life. I've also changed the title to "Into the Lion's Den" and reduced the emphasis on the French letter subplot. It's about 25% leaner now. I've put it away for the time being and will have another go at it in a month or so, hopefully with fresh eyes.
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I can understand that, I'm always getting names wrong for similar reasons. Try getting your head around having close friends called, Ray, Ron, and Roy! I've never heard the name Tamsin, Tasmin, but not Tamsin. How unusual. Yes, it's best to keep your wife happy! lol. You've certainly been busy editing, it's the worst part, of writing. I'll be buying a copy, so let us know when it's on the market. Good luck! xxx
Comment from Shirley McLain
Your poem is beautiful and I enjoyed the read. It brought back memories from my Medlar Trees in North Carolina. What do you do with the fruit? You did a great job and have a blessed day. Shirley
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Your poem is beautiful and I enjoyed the read. It brought back memories from my Medlar Trees in North Carolina. What do you do with the fruit? You did a great job and have a blessed day. Shirley
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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We have picked the 'dog arse fruit' and it is currently bletting on a tray. We shall, with luck, end up with four or five jars of medlar jelly.
Comment from royowen
What a clever poem Tony, I don't have a clue about these things. But it's very clever to use these as provocatively as this. Language rich and adeptly written, it sounds like a poor unsuspecting soul pain a lust filled adventure with black widow spider, well done, in 8686 stanzas and abab rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
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What a clever poem Tony, I don't have a clue about these things. But it's very clever to use these as provocatively as this. Language rich and adeptly written, it sounds like a poor unsuspecting soul pain a lust filled adventure with black widow spider, well done, in 8686 stanzas and abab rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thanks, Roy. I can be a bit obscure at times! All good wishes, Tony.
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a delightful tale of one of the trees that is both male and female. It is very cleverly composed, telling a double tale (perhaps more, but I read two), using innuendo and trickery. Thank you.
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This is a delightful tale of one of the trees that is both male and female. It is very cleverly composed, telling a double tale (perhaps more, but I read two), using innuendo and trickery. Thank you.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thanks, Katherine. Double is about as much as my poor brain can handle. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
A romantic tale of a young medlar is a nice taletelling, I like the free flow of thoughts and enjoyed the word visuals and word imagery; a good lesson portrayed; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. ALCREATOR
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A romantic tale of a young medlar is a nice taletelling, I like the free flow of thoughts and enjoyed the word visuals and word imagery; a good lesson portrayed; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you, Alcreator. I appreciate your support and favourable comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Enzo Lance
This quatrain poem is excellent with strict meter and alternate rhyme of ABAB . Such a nice metaphor to compare the flower bearing plant to areal life scenario. I like every line of the poem is connected to each other to tell us story of tale. Well done.
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This quatrain poem is excellent with strict meter and alternate rhyme of ABAB . Such a nice metaphor to compare the flower bearing plant to areal life scenario. I like every line of the poem is connected to each other to tell us story of tale. Well done.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thanks, Enzo. I appreciate you dropping by to review. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from djsaxon
Impeccable on many levels. As with all your writes, this is a joy to read. Excellent author's notes. Oddly, I was momentarily stumped by 'asystole', given that I have been managing atrio fib for 13 years. Gotta love pacemakers. Cheers - DJ
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Impeccable on many levels. As with all your writes, this is a joy to read. Excellent author's notes. Oddly, I was momentarily stumped by 'asystole', given that I have been managing atrio fib for 13 years. Gotta love pacemakers. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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I appreciate your review and six-star award, DJ.
I have also been managing atrial fibrillation for the past ten years or so, but with medication. So far, so good - and no need for a pacemaker yet.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a magical write about copulation and I adored your metaphors here Tony! The cad leaves his bride pregnant and alone, but he is happy to escape her grasp. Nature has a two way street, and an exchange of vows, but not all parties are satisfied. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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This is a magical write about copulation and I adored your metaphors here Tony! The cad leaves his bride pregnant and alone, but he is happy to escape her grasp. Nature has a two way street, and an exchange of vows, but not all parties are satisfied. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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A bit of a bounder, what? Quite a lot of satisfaction here. She got what she wanted, even if it did produce a dog-arse fruit, and he escaped with two bags of gold dust. Thank you so much for the sixth star. I shall treasure it! All the best, Tony.
p.s. I'm considering a sequel involving the bletting of what the French call cul de chien