Slippin' the Pink Slip
Dressing-down with a twist27 total reviews
Comment from utilized time
Nice story interesting enough to know some of the nursing bets have to do with needles although I would have bet a little higher next time hahaha entertaining for me to hear the end result. You don't always get a positive ending as in this case but good enough to keep me reading until the end. Great job
Good punctuation
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Nice story interesting enough to know some of the nursing bets have to do with needles although I would have bet a little higher next time hahaha entertaining for me to hear the end result. You don't always get a positive ending as in this case but good enough to keep me reading until the end. Great job
Good punctuation
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. I had great fun writing this script! Per the footnote, it was based on a true story. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Anya Trofimova
This is a great script! Your characters are engaging and believable and I love the humorous plot twist at the end. It works so well because you manage to keep the serious, tense atmosphere through the rest of the play. Very well done!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This is a great script! Your characters are engaging and believable and I love the humorous plot twist at the end. It works so well because you manage to keep the serious, tense atmosphere through the rest of the play. Very well done!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you Anya. I had so much fun with this one. So glad you liked the finale! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from LisaMay
Hahaha... what a turn of events. What a skilled medical worker! I like the twist from zero to hero, and i enjoyed the interchange between mother and daughter regarding twats and snatch-chat.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Hahaha... what a turn of events. What a skilled medical worker! I like the twist from zero to hero, and i enjoyed the interchange between mother and daughter regarding twats and snatch-chat.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Glad you enjoyed dancing the twist. This is based on a true event re the IV bar bet--in real life the boss pretended not to have heard about it; he did call her into the office but instead of firing her, as she expected, he gave her the tote bag! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from BethShelby
This is so cool. I love it. I have to share this with my daughter. She is an IV nurse and she is kind of proud of the fact she can get an IV into people when no one else can. Great job.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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This is so cool. I love it. I have to share this with my daughter. She is an IV nurse and she is kind of proud of the fact she can get an IV into people when no one else can. Great job.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Ditto my daughter! (Used to be.) This is based on a real incident--not necessarily involving her!--though in real-life the boss never said a word about it, lest he have to discipline a superb nurse. He called her in to his office--not to fire her, as she feared, just to give her the tote bag. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
What an unusual piece of writing! That hospital would be missing out if they fired a nurse who could get two IV lines in on the first try while she was dead drunk! ha ha Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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What an unusual piece of writing! That hospital would be missing out if they fired a nurse who could get two IV lines in on the first try while she was dead drunk! ha ha Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thanks Rebecca. This was inspired by real-life; same event as described but the boss pretended not to know what she'd done because he did not want to have to confront her, for the reason you say; he may have felt obliged to let her go--the last thing he wanted! In fact, it was he who called her into the office, not to fire her, as she feared, but to give her the gift bag. Cheers. LIZ
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Wonderful!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Very funny and I freaking love this script, pardon my french. The end is a la Shakespeare: all well is well, when it ends well. So happy she did not lose her job, oh contrary she got it back, no repercussion or detachment. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Very funny and I freaking love this script, pardon my french. The end is a la Shakespeare: all well is well, when it ends well. So happy she did not lose her job, oh contrary she got it back, no repercussion or detachment. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Thank you Iza! So pleased you got a kick out of this. It was inspired by the incident described--though in real life the boss knew she was so good a nurse that he pretended he hadn't heard about what she'd done. It was he who intercepted her, not to berate her as she'd feared, but simply to give her the tote bag.
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "(Charlene proceeds down the corridor and knocks on Jack's door. He opens it and beckons her to sit)
CHARLENE: Well, I see bad news travels fast. Lauren just gave me a going away gift. (she gestures at the tote bag as Jack looks puzzled)
JACK: Oh that...that's neither here nor there. Lauren was just holding that aside for you--there was an promotional event yesterday on the day shift and they gave out those swag bags. Lauren doesn't know anything about this.
CHARLENE: Well, sir, I'm not going to deny it--I know you saw the photo I posted, with the caption--yes, I was drunk; yes I had the needles from my shift in my top pocket; yes, I foolishly figured I'd take challenge--he bet me fifty bucks that I couldn't get a line in him, that his veins are so bad--he said last time there were two nurses and three lab techs, and finally, after fifteen tries among them they gave up and had to--
JACK: You mean to tell me, that this guy tells you nobody's ever been able to get an IV in him even after fifteen attempts and here you, dead drunk, get one in both arms on the first shot?
That's un-effin-believable! Girl--you rule!", because I was not expecting that and also because it was humorous!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Luke 8:17 New International Version (NIV)
17 For there is nothing hidden that will not be disclosed, and nothing concealed that will not be known or brought out into the open.
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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My favorite part was, "(Charlene proceeds down the corridor and knocks on Jack's door. He opens it and beckons her to sit)
CHARLENE: Well, I see bad news travels fast. Lauren just gave me a going away gift. (she gestures at the tote bag as Jack looks puzzled)
JACK: Oh that...that's neither here nor there. Lauren was just holding that aside for you--there was an promotional event yesterday on the day shift and they gave out those swag bags. Lauren doesn't know anything about this.
CHARLENE: Well, sir, I'm not going to deny it--I know you saw the photo I posted, with the caption--yes, I was drunk; yes I had the needles from my shift in my top pocket; yes, I foolishly figured I'd take challenge--he bet me fifty bucks that I couldn't get a line in him, that his veins are so bad--he said last time there were two nurses and three lab techs, and finally, after fifteen tries among them they gave up and had to--
JACK: You mean to tell me, that this guy tells you nobody's ever been able to get an IV in him even after fifteen attempts and here you, dead drunk, get one in both arms on the first shot?
That's un-effin-believable! Girl--you rule!", because I was not expecting that and also because it was humorous!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Luke 8:17 New International Version (NIV)
17 For there is nothing hidden that will not be disclosed, and nothing concealed that will not be known or brought out into the open.
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Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Thank you for another visit, Fonda! That was quick--first review so far. So glad you liked this--I always like to do a twist in the finale. I'm amused that you found the piece inspirational--my guess is that Lord was trying to distract you from the vulgar words! Cheers. Cheers. LIZ