Jagged
3 line poem29 total reviews
Comment from susand3022
Ahhhh... I remember those days... :) Now, as my edges are no longer rough, and my lines much smoother, they're no longer as pliable and won't fit so well with others all the time. LOL
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
  |
Ahhhh... I remember those days... :) Now, as my edges are no longer rough, and my lines much smoother, they're no longer as pliable and won't fit so well with others all the time. LOL
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
-
I have no edges. My wife has polished them all away... well, maybe a few small ones. lol G
Comment from estory
I think this was one of the best of these three line entries. You had the perfect balance, a bit of an unusual image in that jagged form, but matching up perfectly with the complimentary piece in the last line. It's a real interesting, avant guarde take on the haiku form. But it works. There's some great philosophy behind it in that even what looks course and difficult when compared with the social norm, can become a beautiful thing when matched with a soul mate. estory
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
 |
I think this was one of the best of these three line entries. You had the perfect balance, a bit of an unusual image in that jagged form, but matching up perfectly with the complimentary piece in the last line. It's a real interesting, avant guarde take on the haiku form. But it works. There's some great philosophy behind it in that even what looks course and difficult when compared with the social norm, can become a beautiful thing when matched with a soul mate. estory
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
-
Many thanks for the great response once again. G
Comment from May 1
Wow, that is so beautifully said and so powerful. I love how simple and yet complex it is. All in all, I think this is a wonderful poem and a great contest entry.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
|
Wow, that is so beautifully said and so powerful. I love how simple and yet complex it is. All in all, I think this is a wonderful poem and a great contest entry.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
-
Many thanks.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I remember when
Our lives were jagged edges
Yet perfectly matched
A neat poem of love or even just deep friendship. Jagged could mean attitudes or conformation. Truly love the double meaning
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
|
I remember when
Our lives were jagged edges
Yet perfectly matched
A neat poem of love or even just deep friendship. Jagged could mean attitudes or conformation. Truly love the double meaning
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
-
Much appreciated. G
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good presentation
and topic, G.
-The syllable count is good.
-Effective use of one
continuous thought.
-Good image with "jagged edges."
-I like the idea of something
being left to the imagination-
-yes, there were those edges,
but maybe things were better then.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
|
-Good presentation
and topic, G.
-The syllable count is good.
-Effective use of one
continuous thought.
-Good image with "jagged edges."
-I like the idea of something
being left to the imagination-
-yes, there were those edges,
but maybe things were better then.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
-
Much appreciated, as always. G
-
You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
I like the idea of jagged edges fitting perfectly together, and of course that is true G, when one breaks a glass, the edges can fit, just needs the right glue, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
|
I like the idea of jagged edges fitting perfectly together, and of course that is true G, when one breaks a glass, the edges can fit, just needs the right glue, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
-
Many thanks roy. Hope you well. G
-
Pleasure G
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think most loving couples start off like that, until they really get to know each other. Then, just like a jigsaw you find the perfect fit. Well done, Gareth, and good luck in the contest. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
|
I think most loving couples start off like that, until they really get to know each other. Then, just like a jigsaw you find the perfect fit. Well done, Gareth, and good luck in the contest. Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
-
Cheers, Sandra. G
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"Our lives were jagged edges" - good description of the imperfections in people and their existences.
"Yet perfectly matched" - demonstrates how, although the two parties involved were full of issues, together they complemented one another where the other lacked.
"I remember when" - shows they overcame the shortcomings, are more rounded, and better people because of finding each other.
Isn't that what everyone hopes to find when they discover their special someone?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
|
"Our lives were jagged edges" - good description of the imperfections in people and their existences.
"Yet perfectly matched" - demonstrates how, although the two parties involved were full of issues, together they complemented one another where the other lacked.
"I remember when" - shows they overcame the shortcomings, are more rounded, and better people because of finding each other.
Isn't that what everyone hopes to find when they discover their special someone?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
-
Much appreciated, Brett. G
Comment from Sallyo
And now they're rounded edges and match only where they happen to touch? Interesting concept in this three-liner. I'm assuming there's a line count but no word/syllable requirement.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
|
And now they're rounded edges and match only where they happen to touch? Interesting concept in this three-liner. I'm assuming there's a line count but no word/syllable requirement.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
-
Many thanks. G