Speed Thrills But Accuracy Kills
Sometimes Being Last is a good thing59 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi anon, this is really well written, disregard the meter, notes read. Some nice name-dropping - 'High Noon' - 'Ringo'. And, of course, 'Boot Hill' - The Gunfight at the OK Coral?. I love that film. A good read - regards and good luck - Dorothy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Hi anon, this is really well written, disregard the meter, notes read. Some nice name-dropping - 'High Noon' - 'Ringo'. And, of course, 'Boot Hill' - The Gunfight at the OK Coral?. I love that film. A good read - regards and good luck - Dorothy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Not bad for a last minute entry, Contestant. Actually, it's very, very good.
Good rhymes, good story...at first i thought the character was going to claim cowardice, but there he is, Last man standing!
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Not bad for a last minute entry, Contestant. Actually, it's very, very good.
Good rhymes, good story...at first i thought the character was going to claim cowardice, but there he is, Last man standing!
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
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You are most welcome!
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I remember the movie High Noon. I wonder why gun fighters always fought at high noon. Did they hope the sun would blind the other guy? This is very well done, I saw no errors and wish you well in the contest. Rox
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I remember the movie High Noon. I wonder why gun fighters always fought at high noon. Did they hope the sun would blind the other guy? This is very well done, I saw no errors and wish you well in the contest. Rox
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Because tgey didn't like to get up early. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Tpa
it flows beautifully as I read through it and the punctuation (or purposeful lack of) keeps me at the rhythm that I know the author intended for me. I also pay particular attention to the presentation of it. Since there are usually fewer letters and words than a story or article, I place great importance on the spacing, placement and actual choice of letters and words.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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it flows beautifully as I read through it and the punctuation (or purposeful lack of) keeps me at the rhythm that I know the author intended for me. I also pay particular attention to the presentation of it. Since there are usually fewer letters and words than a story or article, I place great importance on the spacing, placement and actual choice of letters and words.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Coco Jane
A good look at the classic showdown. I like the way the ending is ambiguous.
Consider using a period at the end of each stanza instead of a comma.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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A good look at the classic showdown. I like the way the ending is ambiguous.
Consider using a period at the end of each stanza instead of a comma.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work,
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I won't spend much time on the meter. I'll let someone who knows more than I do go into that. All I can say is that I'm glad I'm not a cowboy because I never would have made it. Great job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I won't spend much time on the meter. I'll let someone who knows more than I do go into that. All I can say is that I'm glad I'm not a cowboy because I never would have made it. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from royowen
That's a true philosophy, it's not who draws first that counts, it's the most accurate that lives to tell the tale. Beautifully written, considering that you only written in 20 minutes, there was a contest to see who could write one in ten minutes or less, but I find if I write quickly, it can still be improved by editing, but well done, good luck, Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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That's a true philosophy, it's not who draws first that counts, it's the most accurate that lives to tell the tale. Beautifully written, considering that you only written in 20 minutes, there was a contest to see who could write one in ten minutes or less, but I find if I write quickly, it can still be improved by editing, but well done, good luck, Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
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Most welcome
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think it's all right if it sounds slightly fast-paced, since that is what gunfights are. I am thinking Boot Hill should be capitalized. Have not seen a real one since one in or near Tucson, Arizona way back around 2003. This sounds like it has at least 3 western movie or historical possible references, with "high noon" and "Ringo" and "Bart" possibly some of the other lines. I like it! Can't think what to fix. Do you want to add any of your favorite western movies in the notes?
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I think it's all right if it sounds slightly fast-paced, since that is what gunfights are. I am thinking Boot Hill should be capitalized. Have not seen a real one since one in or near Tucson, Arizona way back around 2003. This sounds like it has at least 3 western movie or historical possible references, with "high noon" and "Ringo" and "Bart" possibly some of the other lines. I like it! Can't think what to fix. Do you want to add any of your favorite western movies in the notes?
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I fixed Boot Hill. Thank you for sharing the tip.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, though artful in the write, the rhyming rhythm is a bit off in spots, but it does take us to the event - fully compliant with the prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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In my opinion, though artful in the write, the rhyming rhythm is a bit off in spots, but it does take us to the event - fully compliant with the prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest...
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
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You are very welcome indeed.
Comment from w.j.debi
I think this is meant to remind us of the movie "High Noon". It's been some time since I've seen it, but your poem seems to recount the story.
The title tells the truth, it is accuracy that counts in a gunfight. Being first doesn't mean anything--as your last line states, "it's about who stands last."
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I think this is meant to remind us of the movie "High Noon". It's been some time since I've seen it, but your poem seems to recount the story.
The title tells the truth, it is accuracy that counts in a gunfight. Being first doesn't mean anything--as your last line states, "it's about who stands last."
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I was actually thinking of the TV show alias Smith and Jones episode Smiler With a Gun. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.