A Nightly Occurrence
As long as you aren't offended by their nudity...32 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Yvette,
What are the chances you were a Brownie when you were small? The story of the Brownie is one of the first ones that truly enchanted me -- that I can remember fully to this day.
The little girl who wants to play all day, but she hears about these magical creatures who come in at night and do all the work. She's mesmerized. Goes through the forest asking all the woodland creatures who the Brownies are. No one can answer. Till she comes to the wise old owl (of course!). He tells her to go stand by the side of the lake. Turn three times, say some magic words and then look in - she will see the image of the Brownie. Of course, she sees herself. Realization dawns and she rushes home and cleans the house - surprises her mom and everyone lives HAE. (Be good girls and lovely Brownies. Now eat your snacks and go home.)
Nice post. Thanks for the memories! hahaha
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Yvette,
What are the chances you were a Brownie when you were small? The story of the Brownie is one of the first ones that truly enchanted me -- that I can remember fully to this day.
The little girl who wants to play all day, but she hears about these magical creatures who come in at night and do all the work. She's mesmerized. Goes through the forest asking all the woodland creatures who the Brownies are. No one can answer. Till she comes to the wise old owl (of course!). He tells her to go stand by the side of the lake. Turn three times, say some magic words and then look in - she will see the image of the Brownie. Of course, she sees herself. Realization dawns and she rushes home and cleans the house - surprises her mom and everyone lives HAE. (Be good girls and lovely Brownies. Now eat your snacks and go home.)
Nice post. Thanks for the memories! hahaha
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Oh my goodness -- I remember that one!! You know, I can even tell you the teacher's name that told it: Mrs. Posey.... okay, so that's just scary that i remember that far back....funny the things that get 'stuck' and won't go down the drain of forgetfulness, huh? :) :) Thanx for the review, ma'am -- take care! ;) ;)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a great contribution to the Club Challenge, Yvette! High five for picking a creature off the beaten path! I enjoyed this and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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This is a great contribution to the Club Challenge, Yvette! High five for picking a creature off the beaten path! I enjoyed this and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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They are fun to just imagine much less write about... and I'm glad you enjoyed them, Angel! ;) :) Have a great remainder of the week and think of us poor folks sitting in teacher meetings ...... ugh!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Alex Rosel
I liked this. It's entertaining :)
I must get around to writing my own piece in response to the "Flash Fiction" challenge.
Here are a couple of points you might like to consider:
"Because" - Arindle scratched his lower abdomen, causing other parts to jiggle - "You've got pants. -- Spag? I'm not sure if there's a difference between American English and British English but, for the latter, where a single sentence of dialogue is split by a tag, or in this case a narrative interrupt, then the continuation is started with a lowercase letter. So, it'd be you've got pants.
Also, the narrative interrupt should be delineated with em dashes. I'm guessing you know this, and the fault lies with the FanStory text editor. One way I've found of entering em dashes is to click on the "Advanced editor" option, and to copy and paste in the em dash from an external word processor such as notepad++ or MS Word.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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I liked this. It's entertaining :)
I must get around to writing my own piece in response to the "Flash Fiction" challenge.
Here are a couple of points you might like to consider:
"Because" - Arindle scratched his lower abdomen, causing other parts to jiggle - "You've got pants. -- Spag? I'm not sure if there's a difference between American English and British English but, for the latter, where a single sentence of dialogue is split by a tag, or in this case a narrative interrupt, then the continuation is started with a lowercase letter. So, it'd be you've got pants.
Also, the narrative interrupt should be delineated with em dashes. I'm guessing you know this, and the fault lies with the FanStory text editor. One way I've found of entering em dashes is to click on the "Advanced editor" option, and to copy and paste in the em dash from an external word processor such as notepad++ or MS Word.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Thanx so much for the review, Alex -- think we're all fixed up with that punctuation issue -- thanks for the heads up!! ;) ;) You be sure to have a wonderful remainder of the week!! ;) ;) Take care and I look forward to your write on this one! ;) Yvette
Comment from JudyE
I've never heard of these creatures but I'd love to have one. Any idea what I have to do to procure one of these wonderful beings? I'd be happy to feed it whatever it wished in return for some help with household chores. lol
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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I've never heard of these creatures but I'd love to have one. Any idea what I have to do to procure one of these wonderful beings? I'd be happy to feed it whatever it wished in return for some help with household chores. lol
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Well, when I find out, I'll let you know cuz none of them have ever found my house yet and the last son leaves for college in a few weeks! ;) ;) LOL! ;) Good to hear from you, Lady Judy -- take care!! ;);) Yvette
Comment from kahpot
Wow! this character described your story and notes, seems like an image from childhood, ( do but do not respond, do not praise, definitely do not welcome) amazing how some characters bring memories to some, an excellent short read, your notes were very helpful and needed for understanding, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Wow! this character described your story and notes, seems like an image from childhood, ( do but do not respond, do not praise, definitely do not welcome) amazing how some characters bring memories to some, an excellent short read, your notes were very helpful and needed for understanding, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Hooray! ;) ;) So, glad you enjoyed meeting Brownies, in general, and Arindle and Drombel in particular --- and I love mythology because it does bring back old memories more often than not because of that spark of childhood imagination from which it just seems to spring forth!! ;) :) Thanx for the review and take care! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from damommy
How do I get these little folks to come to my house? I will leave them good things to eat, and I'll never complain. Very interesting author notes. I kept remembering when I was a Brownie in Girl Scouts. lol
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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How do I get these little folks to come to my house? I will leave them good things to eat, and I'll never complain. Very interesting author notes. I kept remembering when I was a Brownie in Girl Scouts. lol
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Well, when I find out, I'll let you know cuz none of them have ever found my house yet and the last son leaves for college in a few weeks! ;) ;) LOL! ;) Glad you enjoyed this one, Yvonne, and, even though I know about these little guys now, my first thought will always be to those days as a brownie in the Scouts!! ;) ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like Rumplestiltskin here, working through the night mending, cleaning and ironing! He he he, this is a fun write and also a bit scary, but useful nonetheless, an unusual post Yvette, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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This sounds like Rumplestiltskin here, working through the night mending, cleaning and ironing! He he he, this is a fun write and also a bit scary, but useful nonetheless, an unusual post Yvette, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Well, ya gotta go where the club challenge says to go... and I did! ;) ;) Couldn't have been more 'up my alley this time', yeah? :) ;) Thanx for the review, Dolly -- take care! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from barkingdog
This verbal exchange captured the personalities of the two brownies. How clever an entry this is. I really enjoyed the 'notes' section.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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This verbal exchange captured the personalities of the two brownies. How clever an entry this is. I really enjoyed the 'notes' section.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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No contest this time, but I'm so excited that you enjoyed little Arindle and Drombel -- this is just a 'club' write where we just get a new challenge every couple of weeks... keeps the variety out there without having to worry about competing! ;) ;) Thanx for stopping in on this one....be sure to drop by any time!! Yvette
Comment from royowen
What an excellent little story Yvette. Yup continue, most charmingly to play out your writing from the unusual, dabbling in the mystical land of mysterious creature, who cannot be understood from a human perspective. The plot plays out with Arindle outdoing Drombel in the rewards department. Just loved this scribal offering my friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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What an excellent little story Yvette. Yup continue, most charmingly to play out your writing from the unusual, dabbling in the mystical land of mysterious creature, who cannot be understood from a human perspective. The plot plays out with Arindle outdoing Drombel in the rewards department. Just loved this scribal offering my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Glad you enjoyed my little Brownie guys... they were fun! ;) ;) And you are so right that i do so love to take all of those mythological creatures and re-introduced them to this over-tech'ed world!! ;) :) Take care, Sir Roy!! ;);) Yvette
Comment from Debbie Pope
I'm wondering about this one. It's very well written. It's engaging. It's very informative (I didn't know that about Brownies). Your characters remind me of Dobbie, one of my favorite characters of all time. You make your little brownies very likable. I just don't understand the last line and how Arindle is enjoyed "our" bread and honey. Is Drom entitled or not? I think I am overlooking something.
I know that your mythical creatures are better than anyone else's. You are in your element in this club.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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I'm wondering about this one. It's very well written. It's engaging. It's very informative (I didn't know that about Brownies). Your characters remind me of Dobbie, one of my favorite characters of all time. You make your little brownies very likable. I just don't understand the last line and how Arindle is enjoyed "our" bread and honey. Is Drom entitled or not? I think I am overlooking something.
I know that your mythical creatures are better than anyone else's. You are in your element in this club.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Of course they're both supposed to have some, but Drom already started on his while poor Arindle was still ironing.... you know, because Drom might burn something that should be covered by pants that he doesn't have...! ;);) Take care, Beautiful B'ham Lady --- my son's there taking the Bar this week! ;);) Yvette :)
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I?m sure he will do fine but it is stressful.