Comment from juliaSjames

Exceptional

Excellent chapter, Tony. In the best tradition of the great spy novelists. Now that Helen has the letter what is she up to?

You do a fine job of letting the reader see Alain from the POV of jealous Charles.

And you threw in an iconic view of Paris.

Most enjoyable read.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019

Thanks for your continued encouragement, Julia, and for the sixth star. Glad you are still enjoying the various twists and turns in the story.
My time for writing and reviewing is pleasantly curtailed at present by the homecoming of a daughter and granddaughter. Hence my delayed response.
All the best, Tony

reply by juliaSjames on 27-Jul-2019

Enjoy Tony. I'm on my way to spend time with family including my 3 grandkids!

Comment from Gunner Lil

Excellent

Excellent.
An easy read with great information.
Enjoy the conflict and intrigue.
In the 8th paragraph from the end, (2CV)
I would change that to, grey Citroen, and
later (Citroen) to, The 2CV was a museum
piece.
Great job!!
Thank you.

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 Comment Written 21-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019

Thanks for your encouragement, Gunner Lil. Glad you are enjoying the story. I appreciate your comment about Citroen/2CV. You're absolutely right. I've changed the order, as suggested.
All the best, Tony

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

So I wonder what game Helen is playing now.

I hesitate to even mention this but mention it I will. I feel sure it's acceptable. In the following 'I shrank back into the doorway of the museum, where I could still observe while scanning leaflets promoting the latest exhibition.' - the 'I could still observe' is bugging me. Is 'observe' a transitive verb or can it be either?

Best wishes
Judy

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 Comment Written 21-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019

Thanks for your continued encouragement, Judy. I'm pretty sure that 'observe' can be used either transitively or intransitively. However, I'll look again at that paragraph. I did trim it when editing and might have overdone the cutting back.
My time for writing and reviewing is pleasantly curtailed at present by the homecoming of a daughter and granddaughter. I'm up in Brisbane with them at the moment. Hence my delayed response.
All the best, Tony

reply by JudyE on 27-Jul-2019

What better way to have your writing curtailed? Enjoy your time away. :)

Comment from Pantygynt

Exceptional

Ooh la-la. La belle Helene! Qui est-elle, vraiment?

when you come to think of it that is the fundamental question of this book. At least it seems so to me. She started out as an attractive woman and the attraction between her and Charles seemed believably mutual, but the machinations that have developed over the subsequent chapters (never mind the red herrings) have deepened the mystery.

i enjoyed this chapter very much.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019

Thanks for your continued encouragement, Jim, and for the sixth star. This relationship between Helen and Charles has become a more central focus than I'd originally intended.
My time for writing and reviewing is pleasantly curtailed at present by the homecoming of a daughter and granddaughter. I'm up in Brisbane with them at the moment. Hence my delayed response.
I've read and enjoyed your latest - I think it's going well - but I haven't got around to reviewing it yet.
All the best, Tony