The Sliding Board Caper
True story38 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Your dad sounds like a fun guy, making your outing even better by being silly, and who doesn't like silliness? I sure do. I do see that bump in the slide. Wish I could take a ride myself! :)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2019
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Your dad sounds like a fun guy, making your outing even better by being silly, and who doesn't like silliness? I sure do. I do see that bump in the slide. Wish I could take a ride myself! :)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Phyllis. The slide wasn't nearly as high as I remembered it. lol. This is one of my favorite memories of my dad.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Yvonne. The Sevenelle form is interesting. I like yours and it looks like fun. Topic is playful. Rhyming and flow are excellent. A dad taking a kid to the playground wasn't done too often back in my day. Good for your dad. Marilyn
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2019
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Hi Yvonne. The Sevenelle form is interesting. I like yours and it looks like fun. Topic is playful. Rhyming and flow are excellent. A dad taking a kid to the playground wasn't done too often back in my day. Good for your dad. Marilyn
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2019
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He was a lot of fun. He used to do handstands in the front yard. I never could manage one. Thanks, Marilyn.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute story in a poem you have penned using the Sevenelle format for the potlatch event. This was a cute story you have told about a time with you and your dad. Thanks for sharing it. Very cute words and very nice imagery with the picture you chose. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2019
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This is a very cute story in a poem you have penned using the Sevenelle format for the potlatch event. This was a cute story you have told about a time with you and your dad. Thanks for sharing it. Very cute words and very nice imagery with the picture you chose. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Teri. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent and how humorous this must have been, if I may ask the second last line "he had an apple in mouth" would this flow better if it read the same as the first stanza " he had an apple in his mouth", this is a wonderful read, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Excellent and how humorous this must have been, if I may ask the second last line "he had an apple in mouth" would this flow better if it read the same as the first stanza " he had an apple in his mouth", this is a wonderful read, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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It should have been that way. I goofed. Thank you for catching it.
Comment from Hitcher
ha ha, yes us fathers do on occasion get caught out and allow our children to see us in a different light. We can't always be the fearless strong heroes they see us as, ha ha. But that is also good for them to see : ))
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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ha ha, yes us fathers do on occasion get caught out and allow our children to see us in a different light. We can't always be the fearless strong heroes they see us as, ha ha. But that is also good for them to see : ))
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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I thought it was sooo funny. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne. This is a really funny poem. Being a true story makes it even funnier. It's well written under the rules of the format. I laughed at "he flew north, the fruit flew south" twice. Z
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Hello Yvonne. This is a really funny poem. Being a true story makes it even funnier. It's well written under the rules of the format. I laughed at "he flew north, the fruit flew south" twice. Z
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Robert. I'm happy you enjoyed it. It's one of my favorite memories.
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You're welcome
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece is very well-written and delightful, describing memorable scene
featuring father and daughter. The sevenelle is an appealing form; you
have done quite well with it. Nostalgia at its best
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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This piece is very well-written and delightful, describing memorable scene
featuring father and daughter. The sevenelle is an appealing form; you
have done quite well with it. Nostalgia at its best
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Janetsue
This is a super posting holding a lot of enjoyment for the reader. I was right there on the slide with you and your daddy. It is so wonderful when we can tap into a long ago memory and come up with something lovely like this. :-) Spangle
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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This is a super posting holding a lot of enjoyment for the reader. I was right there on the slide with you and your daddy. It is so wonderful when we can tap into a long ago memory and come up with something lovely like this. :-) Spangle
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you for a lovely review.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words were sweet, interesting and creative. The theme
of this poem made the reader smile. Thank you for the author's notes
it helped explain the event! The artwork is perfect and compliments
this poem well.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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The author's words were sweet, interesting and creative. The theme
of this poem made the reader smile. Thank you for the author's notes
it helped explain the event! The artwork is perfect and compliments
this poem well.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Joan E.
That is quite a sliding board and a story to go with it! I am glad the Club's prompt brought back this memory and you shared it in the less common Sevenelle form. I enjoyed the rhymes and could visualize the "sight" even without the picture. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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That is quite a sliding board and a story to go with it! I am glad the Club's prompt brought back this memory and you shared it in the less common Sevenelle form. I enjoyed the rhymes and could visualize the "sight" even without the picture. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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I'm so glad you could. Thank you for a great review.
