Love Long Distance
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "No Poppies, Please! - Chapter 4"A Wartime Romance
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Comment from Sasha
I was pleased to see this in my message box. You have done another wonderful job with this. Knowing that at some point their opinion of the war will change and cause true problems between then is heartbreaking. I feel their love for each other and know it is true. I was one of the ones that changed her opinion of the war but never felt the need to take it out on the soldiers when they returned. I anxiously look forward to the next instalment.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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I was pleased to see this in my message box. You have done another wonderful job with this. Knowing that at some point their opinion of the war will change and cause true problems between then is heartbreaking. I feel their love for each other and know it is true. I was one of the ones that changed her opinion of the war but never felt the need to take it out on the soldiers when they returned. I anxiously look forward to the next instalment.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Hi Sasha! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. Glad it pleased you and you could "feel the love." Yes, the drama will increase and problems will arise. We really appreciate you following along. Chapter 5 is already in the works and coming soon!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
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You are welcome. Knowing the difference of opinions that arise about the war make reading this difficult, but I promise to continue on with this.
Comment from nomi338
You have no idea how reading these two letter affect me. I was a young Air Force recruit going through basic training at Lackland Air Force Base in 1960, wishing that I could have received just one letter from someone, anyone, but sadly I did not. Bill, you are one lucky individual. I have no doubt that going through the rigors of training is made somewhat easier, knowing that there is someone who cares whether you live or die. Someone who would want to die if you should die. This is just a beautiful, romantic post.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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You have no idea how reading these two letter affect me. I was a young Air Force recruit going through basic training at Lackland Air Force Base in 1960, wishing that I could have received just one letter from someone, anyone, but sadly I did not. Bill, you are one lucky individual. I have no doubt that going through the rigors of training is made somewhat easier, knowing that there is someone who cares whether you live or die. Someone who would want to die if you should die. This is just a beautiful, romantic post.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Wow! Thank you SO MUCH for the AWESOME 6-star rating and review. A SALUTE! Your comments here really mean a lot. Would you be willing to let us use them as a blurb on the back of our book when it is finished? So moving and heartfelt! Sad that you had no one to correspond with back then. Hope that changed after basic training. Glad you find this chapter beautiful and romantic. If you haven't done so already, we encourage you to read the earlier chapters and also come back for Chapter 5. It is in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
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You are always welcome to use my comments as long as they are positive. I don't usually engage in negativity. I also wrote a poem that was inspired by the cited poetic influence for your poem. My poem is found in my portfolio it is titled "In Fields Of Clover". Of course I will read all of the chapters as I am already hooked.
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Thank you again. We'll be sure to check out your poem. As we get closer to the publishing of the novel, we will contact you and you can review what we use. The words were felt, not just read. Again, we really appreciate it! So glad you will be continuing along with us as we write and share this novel. Bless you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This was a great part. The details of the car accident were so real, I had one just the same. I like how you talk of everyday things when you write to Bill, it's what helps them through the wars. Then we have Bill letter, he still hadn't heard from you, but his letter told you of this nightmare dream. I had to smile at the ending. No worries, darling, I'm just going to disarm a bomb, but don't put poppies on my grave!!! LOL, now that was a cheerful ending!!! LOL. Well done, loved this part. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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This was a great part. The details of the car accident were so real, I had one just the same. I like how you talk of everyday things when you write to Bill, it's what helps them through the wars. Then we have Bill letter, he still hadn't heard from you, but his letter told you of this nightmare dream. I had to smile at the ending. No worries, darling, I'm just going to disarm a bomb, but don't put poppies on my grave!!! LOL, now that was a cheerful ending!!! LOL. Well done, loved this part. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Hi Sandra! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. We hope you weren't injured badly with your car accident! Your review is awesome! We really appreciate you pointing out what you like about each letter and also your comment about the ending. So glad you loved it! :)) Chapter 5 is in the works and coming soon!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Bill & Cathy,
Nice piece in continuation having lucid and perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lively imagery at some places, barring two glitches:
1, "He don't know..." Please see the paragraph just above "Hugs and Kisses! God Bless." I think it should have been " He doesn't know..." But the flow is so good that it becomes negligible.
2, Please see 2nd Paragraph. No mother can be so careless about her daughter's DESIRE. On the contrary, it would have been better if you had written 'she didn't mail the letter at that time intentionally so that you may remain free from TENSION.' It's my opinion which may differ due to different culture and environment.
Anyways, Worth appreciating. I'm eagerly waiting for Chapter 5. Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Hello Bill & Cathy,
Nice piece in continuation having lucid and perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lively imagery at some places, barring two glitches:
1, "He don't know..." Please see the paragraph just above "Hugs and Kisses! God Bless." I think it should have been " He doesn't know..." But the flow is so good that it becomes negligible.
2, Please see 2nd Paragraph. No mother can be so careless about her daughter's DESIRE. On the contrary, it would have been better if you had written 'she didn't mail the letter at that time intentionally so that you may remain free from TENSION.' It's my opinion which may differ due to different culture and environment.
Anyways, Worth appreciating. I'm eagerly waiting for Chapter 5. Best of Luck!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you SO MUCH for the 6-star rating and AWESOME review. A SALUTE! Really appreciated your suggestions. #1 - "don't" was intentionally done that way, but it has been changed to avoid confusion. #2 - Really great suggestion! It has been revised! Glad you will be back for Chapter 6. It's in the works already and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
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Bill & Cathy, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Alex Rosel
I like reading these excerpts; they are so true to life. I've only read a couple, and I'm not sure where the story is going to take the reader. Is there any foreshadowing in these letters? Do you plan on employing any straight narrative? These questions aren't founded on criticism, I'm just wondering.
Have you read The Guernsey Literary and Potato Peel Pie Society by Mary Ann Shaffer and Annie Barrows? If not, I can recommend it. It might open a window on some possibilities you may not have considered.
Here's wishing you all the best with this going forward :)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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I like reading these excerpts; they are so true to life. I've only read a couple, and I'm not sure where the story is going to take the reader. Is there any foreshadowing in these letters? Do you plan on employing any straight narrative? These questions aren't founded on criticism, I'm just wondering.
Have you read The Guernsey Literary and Potato Peel Pie Society by Mary Ann Shaffer and Annie Barrows? If not, I can recommend it. It might open a window on some possibilities you may not have considered.
Here's wishing you all the best with this going forward :)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. Yes, familiar with The Guernsey Literary and Potato Peel Society. Saw the movie, but haven't yet read the book. Thank you also for the suggestion. As the story moves on, more drama introduced. We're just getting started, so stay tuned. Glad you like what you are reading so far!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from djsaxon
Great intent. but initially it is hard to differentiate between the flip flop communications. The Elizabeth Taylor stuff is unnecessary floss. What war is the is guy in? Sorry buys, but this needs work. DJ
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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Great intent. but initially it is hard to differentiate between the flip flop communications. The Elizabeth Taylor stuff is unnecessary floss. What war is the is guy in? Sorry buys, but this needs work. DJ
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading this and for the 5 star rating. Checking the earlier chapters would answer your questions about what war and why Cathy talks about "floss" as you call it in her letters. The year on the letters should give you a clue too. Flip flop communication? Is that what you call two people writing to each other sharing about their lives? Guess this just isn't your type of novel.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from JudyE
McCrae's poem is one my mother learnt in school. She was born in 1910. It's also often recited on ANZAC Day (Australian New Zealand Army Corps) Day in Australia. As regards your story - what a different world it was then with no mobile phones and letters criss-crossing across the land.
One small spag:
I'm a so blessed by your love--you mean the world to me! - delete 'a'
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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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McCrae's poem is one my mother learnt in school. She was born in 1910. It's also often recited on ANZAC Day (Australian New Zealand Army Corps) Day in Australia. As regards your story - what a different world it was then with no mobile phones and letters criss-crossing across the land.
One small spag:
I'm a so blessed by your love--you mean the world to me! - delete 'a'
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Hi Judy!
Thanks for stopping by to read and review Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. The small spag has been fixed. We really appreciate the help! Yes, life was so very different before mobile phones. Thank you also for sharing about your mom and where the poem referenced in the notes is recited. We hope you continue to follow along with our book. Chapter 5 is coming soon!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy