The Woodland Marching Band
The animals have a parade.33 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Woodland Marching Band", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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"The Woodland Marching Band", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Duchess. I appreciate your comments more than another star. 8-)
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dammony, my possum. That a wonderful thing to say.
Take care and God bless,
the Duchess
Comment from karenina
Fun poem! I read it to my five year old grandson...(We are having a sleepover!)--and he marched about the house imitating the animals! He said you must be FAMOUS to write such "good stuff!"--Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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Fun poem! I read it to my five year old grandson...(We are having a sleepover!)--and he marched about the house imitating the animals! He said you must be FAMOUS to write such "good stuff!"--Karenina
Comment Written 02-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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Awww, give him a big hug for me. That does my heart good to hear he enjoyed it so much. Thank you for telling me this.
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Kid tested, grandmother approved! (smile)---Karenina
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a delightful write and would amuse my granddaughter who adores animals. Your poem is uplifting and a joy to read, best wishes . . . .love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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This is a delightful write and would amuse my granddaughter who adores animals. Your poem is uplifting and a joy to read, best wishes . . . .love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Dolly. Let me know how your granddaughter likes it. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from lyenochka
So lovely and imaginative and certainly reflective of someone who knows and loves animals well! I wondered why you chose to have these as long lines instead of two shorter lines?
"Parades are few and far between, and some aren't very good." could be:
"Parades are few and far between,
and some aren't very good."
And then you'd have a 8/6/8/6 ballad meter.
Just a thought! Loved it!!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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So lovely and imaginative and certainly reflective of someone who knows and loves animals well! I wondered why you chose to have these as long lines instead of two shorter lines?
"Parades are few and far between, and some aren't very good." could be:
"Parades are few and far between,
and some aren't very good."
And then you'd have a 8/6/8/6 ballad meter.
Just a thought! Loved it!!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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I don't know. I guess I get tired sometimes of writing short lines. You're right, it could have gone that way, but I though the longer lines held attention better. Thanks for the suggestion. I'm happy you like it.
Comment from Dean Kuch
How could I possibly award this wonderfully well written & rhymed poem for children anything other than a six, Yvonne?
I'm just glad I still had one to give you.
A frolicking, fun musical menagerie extravaganza.
Bravo!
~Dean
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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How could I possibly award this wonderfully well written & rhymed poem for children anything other than a six, Yvonne?
I'm just glad I still had one to give you.
A frolicking, fun musical menagerie extravaganza.
Bravo!
~Dean
Comment Written 01-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Dean! I'm so happy you like it that much.
So good to hear from you. It's been a long time.
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My heart had me in the hospital again for a few weeks, Yvonne.
That's why I haven't been around much lately.
It's a great poem--you're more than welcome.
~Dean
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I'm so sorry, Dean, but glad you're back. Take good care of yourself.
I spent a week in hospital back in April. It was no fun.
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No, it sure ain't no picnic, that's for sure.
Hopefully you're all better now too.
Hugs,
~Dean
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I am. Thank you.
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That's great to hear, Yvonne.
Comment from Joan E.
I could not resist reading your poem after seeing the colorful, eye-catching picture! I enjoyed your alternating rhymes in the quatrains and the antics of the different animals. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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I could not resist reading your poem after seeing the colorful, eye-catching picture! I enjoyed your alternating rhymes in the quatrains and the antics of the different animals. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 01-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Joan. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Yvonne. This is such a cute and well done poem for your club. I liked all the animals, but especially the weasel. Good rhyming and flow with great illustration. Marilyn
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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Hi Yvonne. This is such a cute and well done poem for your club. I liked all the animals, but especially the weasel. Good rhyming and flow with great illustration. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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I think I'd be joining the weasel. Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you like it.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Yvonne, any child would love to hear...or read your poem my sweet friend...and I wouldn't mind being in the band myself...I love the story told...and has great rhythm and rhyme...a fun read sweet girl...very well written...and I love your poem...I bet the picture came first...perfect...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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Hi Yvonne, any child would love to hear...or read your poem my sweet friend...and I wouldn't mind being in the band myself...I love the story told...and has great rhythm and rhyme...a fun read sweet girl...very well written...and I love your poem...I bet the picture came first...perfect...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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Nope, the idea came first and then I had to find a picture to fit it. I'm so happy you like it. Thank you.
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LOL...awesome...I love it...and you are so welcome...love xxoo
Comment from juliaSjames
A most enjoyable read for the words, the story line, the animal characters and the marching rhythm.
With the right illustrations this would make a wonderful book.
Nicely done, poet.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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A most enjoyable read for the words, the story line, the animal characters and the marching rhythm.
With the right illustrations this would make a wonderful book.
Nicely done, poet.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the review and the compliment. I appreciate both.
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You're welcome
Comment from Sandra Montanino
This is such a cute little poem about the animals and the marching band. I think you really tapped into what thrills children. And the picture you chose is so appropriate. I can see why you are an accomplished poet at number 26! Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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This is such a cute little poem about the animals and the marching band. I think you really tapped into what thrills children. And the picture you chose is so appropriate. I can see why you are an accomplished poet at number 26! Well done!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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Thank you. What nice comments. I really appreciate that.