Love Long Distance
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "God Willing - Chapter 3"A Wartime Romance
36 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Cathy I enjoyed the letter writing from you and Bill. As a reader however, I got a little bored with it nearer to the end as it felt like there was no depth to what I was reading. In regular books the scenes and characterizations seem to be fuller and more colorful. This particular story line too has been told before and I'm assuming that it is yours and Bill's love story which has charm and old fashion joy. It's hard to know what to write as a critique because of course the story isn't finished. I for one would love to see some kind of action that is fresh and new for you both. I keep up with both of your writings and wish for yal success and continued excitement in your story. I hope that helps cause both of you are exceptional writers. Take care. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Hi Cathy I enjoyed the letter writing from you and Bill. As a reader however, I got a little bored with it nearer to the end as it felt like there was no depth to what I was reading. In regular books the scenes and characterizations seem to be fuller and more colorful. This particular story line too has been told before and I'm assuming that it is yours and Bill's love story which has charm and old fashion joy. It's hard to know what to write as a critique because of course the story isn't finished. I for one would love to see some kind of action that is fresh and new for you both. I keep up with both of your writings and wish for yal success and continued excitement in your story. I hope that helps cause both of you are exceptional writers. Take care. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 24-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Hi Kiwi-
So good to hear from you! Hope you are doing well. Thank you for reading and reviewing Chapter 3 of Love Long Distance. Totally understand what you say here. These first three chapter are meant to show the love relationship and situation of being apart. Next chapter will start to pick up. Your words are kind and sweet. We are honored to be called exceptional writers, especially from an AWESOME writer like you! xoxo
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Bill & Cathy,
Nice piece in continuation depicting its theme in a natural way.
Lucid, and perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Smooth, spontaneous, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely imagery at several places.
Extra Marks for Bill's Letters!
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Hello Bill & Cathy,
Nice piece in continuation depicting its theme in a natural way.
Lucid, and perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Smooth, spontaneous, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely imagery at several places.
Extra Marks for Bill's Letters!
Comment Written 24-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thank you SO MUCH for the AWESOME 6-star rating and review. We are so glad you are following along with this story. Your comments are awesome and we SALUTE you! Stay tuned - next one is in the works.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
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Bill & Cathy, Most Welcome!
Your works are ACTUALLY as EXCEPTIONAL as your stylish SALUTE!
with best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Ulla
Hi to both of you. This is very sweet and I like how you keep on telling each other how much you love each other. But the reality of what is to happen has not yet sunk in nor to the reader. I think what is needed is a feel of the impending danger, the fear that a life can very likely be lost here. It's well written, I can't flaw it, but it needs that wee extra 'umph'. Does that make sense? All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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Hi to both of you. This is very sweet and I like how you keep on telling each other how much you love each other. But the reality of what is to happen has not yet sunk in nor to the reader. I think what is needed is a feel of the impending danger, the fear that a life can very likely be lost here. It's well written, I can't flaw it, but it needs that wee extra 'umph'. Does that make sense? All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-May-2019
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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Hi Ulla! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 3 of Love Long Distance. We appreciate your comments and agree. The first three chapters are for setting the scene(s) and sharing the strong relationship between Bill and Cathy. We have already discussed and are in the process of writing what will come next. Chapter 4 will bring in some of those realities and there will be plenty of 'umph' throughout this novel, "You Betcha!" Stay tuned! All the best to you, too! :)))
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from forestport12
Read your Bio. I went on a similar journey as you with regard to being published. Self-publishing doesn't have the stigma it once did. I thought you did a good job with the letter. Letters in a novel are a good break to insert in moments. Often they are like dialogue where you can suck the reader into the moment. I assume as time goes on the words in his letters will have some powerful moments. So good. keep the anticipation going. Stan Aka. Forestport
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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Read your Bio. I went on a similar journey as you with regard to being published. Self-publishing doesn't have the stigma it once did. I thought you did a good job with the letter. Letters in a novel are a good break to insert in moments. Often they are like dialogue where you can suck the reader into the moment. I assume as time goes on the words in his letters will have some powerful moments. So good. keep the anticipation going. Stan Aka. Forestport
Comment Written 23-May-2019
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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Hi Stan! We're so glad you stopped by to read and review Chapter 3 of Love Long Distance. Thank you so much! Thank you also for sharing your thoughts here. There will be plenty of powerful moments throughout this novel and we'll be introducing a few in Chapter 4. Stay tuned!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Jan Anderegg
Having now read the first two chapters, I come back to read through this once again, and review. I am really enjoying your book. It is going to be very interesting watching these two characters develop throughout the book, and share in their experiences. Long distance relationships can be difficult, and that's without the uncertainty of war thrown in.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Jan
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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Having now read the first two chapters, I come back to read through this once again, and review. I am really enjoying your book. It is going to be very interesting watching these two characters develop throughout the book, and share in their experiences. Long distance relationships can be difficult, and that's without the uncertainty of war thrown in.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Jan
Comment Written 23-May-2019
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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We're so happy you are enjoying Love Long Distance! Thank you for following along and thank you for this review. We really like and appreciate your comments. Yes, there can be difficulties and we'll begin to share a few in Chapter 4. Stay tuned!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Lori S.
Great piece! Such a simpler time and you've highlighted some of the memories that people just don't have anymore. Or at least they don't seem to value them. A coca-cola and a fight on the radio. That was a big night once, and now it would hardly rate as even doing something. Sad to have lost that innocence. And to express love so heartfelt and in loving language. It's a gift. Great job! I look forward to catching up with the story.
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Great piece! Such a simpler time and you've highlighted some of the memories that people just don't have anymore. Or at least they don't seem to value them. A coca-cola and a fight on the radio. That was a big night once, and now it would hardly rate as even doing something. Sad to have lost that innocence. And to express love so heartfelt and in loving language. It's a gift. Great job! I look forward to catching up with the story.
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Thank you so much! Your comments are great and we SALUTE you for stopping by to read and review Chapter 3 of Love Long Distance. So glad you enjoyed the read and will be following along. Chapter 4 is in the works now and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Let me reiterate, Cathy, that your cover design is AWESOME!
Your story flows well with great attention to detail. The way you tie in historical events/facts with your story adds to the enjoyment for readers. How easy it would be to say we listened to a fight from 1964 or even not mention it. But the details surrounding it as read in your story make readers feel as if they are there at your table hearing it with you and your mother. Pass the popcorn, please.
The details about the t-shirt bring it alive, too. Readers understand it isn't just a plain ol' shirt. With your details, it has much more significance to the overall story.
Other details, such as those about the teddy bear, give readers much insight to the characters.
The letters from Bill show the intense training and determination of soldiers, but also, a side of his character that keeps him motivated. It is easy for readers to see how much he loves you.
Your collaboration, with Bill, on this novel works well. Both characters are being developed as individuals and as a couple very much in love during the turbulent 60's.
I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Thank you Cathy, & Bill, for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Let me reiterate, Cathy, that your cover design is AWESOME!
Your story flows well with great attention to detail. The way you tie in historical events/facts with your story adds to the enjoyment for readers. How easy it would be to say we listened to a fight from 1964 or even not mention it. But the details surrounding it as read in your story make readers feel as if they are there at your table hearing it with you and your mother. Pass the popcorn, please.
The details about the t-shirt bring it alive, too. Readers understand it isn't just a plain ol' shirt. With your details, it has much more significance to the overall story.
Other details, such as those about the teddy bear, give readers much insight to the characters.
The letters from Bill show the intense training and determination of soldiers, but also, a side of his character that keeps him motivated. It is easy for readers to see how much he loves you.
Your collaboration, with Bill, on this novel works well. Both characters are being developed as individuals and as a couple very much in love during the turbulent 60's.
I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Thank you Cathy, & Bill, for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 21-May-2019
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Hi Jan! Thank you SO MUCH for your kind words and for your STELLAR 6-star rating! We are HONORED and SALUTE YOU! You know what? You're really AWESOME too! This review is so detailed and it means a great deal to both of us. We're happy you are enjoying this novel. The next chapter will be coming soon!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Sasha
This is another terrific and well written chapter. Sorry I took so long to get to it but I had to go to the doctor and have my stitches removed. I love the letters they send each other and their love comes across as sincere and true. Knowing there are hard times for them ahead is difficult to deal with but as I have said several time, the 60's were a difficult and tumultuous time for many of us. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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This is another terrific and well written chapter. Sorry I took so long to get to it but I had to go to the doctor and have my stitches removed. I love the letters they send each other and their love comes across as sincere and true. Knowing there are hard times for them ahead is difficult to deal with but as I have said several time, the 60's were a difficult and tumultuous time for many of us. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 21-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Thank you for coming back to read and review Chapter 3 of Love Long Distance. Awesome review here. Stitches? Hope you are okay! Chapter 4 will be coming soon. We really appreciate your support!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
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Nothing serious, just a simply in office surgery to remove a small bump.
Comment from Sally Law
Still so sweet and romantic you two. So well done. I had a time with the text though even with my sight assist equipment which was frustrating because I love this story. It took me about 25 minutes to read! Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing this sweet treasure with all of us.
Always my best to you both,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Still so sweet and romantic you two. So well done. I had a time with the text though even with my sight assist equipment which was frustrating because I love this story. It took me about 25 minutes to read! Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing this sweet treasure with all of us.
Always my best to you both,
Sally xo
Comment Written 21-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Hi Sally! Awww, so very kind of you! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. Sorry it was so hard to read for you. We have since increased the size of the font. Thank you so much for your support. We are glad you enjoyed it! Chapter 4 coming soon!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy xo
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Oh, thank you. I?ll go back today and read it again. xo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are doing a wonderful job writing and sharing these letters with up. Many people have gone through with similar separations due to the Military. I know my parents did with the Korean War and I have gone through long deployments with my husband.
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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You are doing a wonderful job writing and sharing these letters with up. Many people have gone through with similar separations due to the Military. I know my parents did with the Korean War and I have gone through long deployments with my husband.
Comment Written 21-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Hi Barbara! Thanks so much for stopping by to read and review Chapter 3 of Love Long Distance. So glad you are enjoying it! Knowing that you and many others can relate to this story means a great deal to us. We really appreciate your support! Please be sure to come back and read Chapter 4 when it's posted. It is in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy