Chip's Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Timeless"FanStory Collection
66 total reviews
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest. Oh yes indeed, no matter what we build in this life, apart from the eternal, time will destroy, excellent artwork Chip, great choice of genres, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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This is an excellent entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest. Oh yes indeed, no matter what we build in this life, apart from the eternal, time will destroy, excellent artwork Chip, great choice of genres, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thanks, as always, Roy!
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Most welcome
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Meeting the criteria of a contest as well as producing a viable and interesting poem, is indeed a challenge that you have met, nicely.
I appreciate the deepness of your collection of words.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Meeting the criteria of a contest as well as producing a viable and interesting poem, is indeed a challenge that you have met, nicely.
I appreciate the deepness of your collection of words.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Raffaelina!
Comment from Sophia Delgado
This is awesome! I love the way you incorporated "sands of time" figuratively and literally, using the image of a sandcastle--innocent and playful--and comparing it to the deeper and darker concept of time sifting away. The syllable-per-line scheme doesn't feel forced. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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This is awesome! I love the way you incorporated "sands of time" figuratively and literally, using the image of a sandcastle--innocent and playful--and comparing it to the deeper and darker concept of time sifting away. The syllable-per-line scheme doesn't feel forced. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Sophia!
Comment from rspoet
Hello Chip,
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest.
Ah, time, I doubt she will ever slow to become someone's mistress,
however briefly.
But perhaps you can speed up to an equal pace;
it's all relative, you know.
Excellent poem with the nice time/mine rhyme.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Hello Chip,
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest.
Ah, time, I doubt she will ever slow to become someone's mistress,
however briefly.
But perhaps you can speed up to an equal pace;
it's all relative, you know.
Excellent poem with the nice time/mine rhyme.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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I appreciate the read/review, Robert!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Chip Kuzborski,
Lovely piece of Poetry meeting the desired norms, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Enchanting and Musical flow; Moreover, worth reciting in one breath.
Superb!
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Best of Luck!!
[ Undoubtedly, it deserves to be honored with 5 + 1 STARS. ]
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Hello Chip Kuzborski,
Lovely piece of Poetry meeting the desired norms, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Enchanting and Musical flow; Moreover, worth reciting in one breath.
Superb!
&
Best of Luck!!
[ Undoubtedly, it deserves to be honored with 5 + 1 STARS. ]
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, RP!
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Chip Kuzborski, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Gloria ....
I do like the idea of using the sands of time to build castles--most creative, and the fact of their brevity is illustrated with the final line.
Great job with your fiveseventyfive, Chip. Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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I do like the idea of using the sands of time to build castles--most creative, and the fact of their brevity is illustrated with the final line.
Great job with your fiveseventyfive, Chip. Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Gloria!
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A truly terrific work of poetry!!! It's usually difficult to get excited iver any three line poem, but Timeless is not just any poem. A message. Rhyme. 5-7-5. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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A truly terrific work of poetry!!! It's usually difficult to get excited iver any three line poem, but Timeless is not just any poem. A message. Rhyme. 5-7-5. Congratulations.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Lance, I appreciate the kind review and generous rating- thank you!
Comment from Ben Colder
I was thinking how this would make a good Valentine card for the occasions. Love the photo, brings back memories of the days at the beach.
Best to you
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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I was thinking how this would make a good Valentine card for the occasions. Love the photo, brings back memories of the days at the beach.
Best to you
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Ben, I appreciate it!
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Hi Chip
I really liked this 5-7-5 entry - mostly because I can relate to the message and also because I love rhymes. When you have the restricted syllable added into the mic it makes it even more appealing. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Hi Chip
I really liked this 5-7-5 entry - mostly because I can relate to the message and also because I love rhymes. When you have the restricted syllable added into the mic it makes it even more appealing. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Fonda!
Comment from Diana L Crawford
You have such a "way with words"! The image you create of relating time to a sand castle brilliant because time is as fleeting as a sand castle's life! I enjoyed very much!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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You have such a "way with words"! The image you create of relating time to a sand castle brilliant because time is as fleeting as a sand castle's life! I enjoyed very much!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Diana!
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Pleasure is all mine!
