I See Her
Let the words speak for themselves36 total reviews
Comment from Mark Valentine
Glad I had a six left for this one. Here's what I took away from it - a sense of a woman who has suffered the most dehumanizing violation imaginable, and has managed to find within her the inviolable pearl of humanity that he couldn't touch - and she guards and clings to that pearl with everything she's got, even if the price to pay for that is not letting anyone get close.
It is a powerful poem that becomes all the more poignant with the addition of the last 2 lines.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Glad I had a six left for this one. Here's what I took away from it - a sense of a woman who has suffered the most dehumanizing violation imaginable, and has managed to find within her the inviolable pearl of humanity that he couldn't touch - and she guards and clings to that pearl with everything she's got, even if the price to pay for that is not letting anyone get close.
It is a powerful poem that becomes all the more poignant with the addition of the last 2 lines.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Mark,
Receiving a review from you, especially a six star is quite an honor. I mean this sincerely, for I consider you an extraordinary talent in your own right. Thank you so very much. The reception of this work has left me speechless, truly.
Again thank you
Jimi
Comment from Pantygynt
An interesting poem of self awareness that made fascinating reading. Your use of 'bay' as in 'bay the tears' here. I found strange. The only meaning of the word as a verb that I could find in my OED was to bark or yelp as in 'hounds that bay the moon'.
There is however the expression to keep something at bay and I came to the conclusion thathis was the meaning here. To avoid confusion I would suggest therefore that the line read, 'to keep at bay the tears'.
Just a thought really.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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An interesting poem of self awareness that made fascinating reading. Your use of 'bay' as in 'bay the tears' here. I found strange. The only meaning of the word as a verb that I could find in my OED was to bark or yelp as in 'hounds that bay the moon'.
There is however the expression to keep something at bay and I came to the conclusion thathis was the meaning here. To avoid confusion I would suggest therefore that the line read, 'to keep at bay the tears'.
Just a thought really.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Jim, once again a huge thank you and even a bigger thank you for pointing out the serious mistake. I don?t know what I was thinking. I knew what ?bay? meant, but I haphazardly used it wrong and it would have stayed there until someone brought it to my attention. I thank you so very much for your keen eye and for your wonderful review.
Jimi
Comment from Heather Knight
Wow! The last line caught me unawares. I do hope this is not true.
You've managed to write an incredibly beautiful poem, even though the subject is very sad.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Wow! The last line caught me unawares. I do hope this is not true.
You've managed to write an incredibly beautiful poem, even though the subject is very sad.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Maria Jose Garcia, how you?
Thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. I am honored.
jimi
Comment from Reese Turner
Well, I think you have well documented a subject to which I cannot begin to relate. I suppose such a deep and compelling writing is part of the fight to get back. Know this: that there are also men who suffer through the fear of rape coming to someone the love. As father of three daughters, the fear never subsides...
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Well, I think you have well documented a subject to which I cannot begin to relate. I suppose such a deep and compelling writing is part of the fight to get back. Know this: that there are also men who suffer through the fear of rape coming to someone the love. As father of three daughters, the fear never subsides...
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Reese Turner,
I thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my work. I hear you. I, too, have two daughters and 9 granddaughters. It's not always easy to protect our loved ones, especially when they leave the nest, but all we can do is instill our best in them by teaching them to always, always be aware, to be cautious and to stay strong. again thank you
jlsavell
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Jimi, that was so sad. The emotion that pours from those words like tears from an ancient stone is so heartwrenching. Men have no idea what their moment of power and pleasure they get from rape actually does to the women the debase. If they do, they are even worse than anything I could describe. Your poem is beautiful even in its harshness of the cruel subject matter. So very well expressed, my friend. (I hope this isn't biographical.)
A warm hug. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Jimi, that was so sad. The emotion that pours from those words like tears from an ancient stone is so heartwrenching. Men have no idea what their moment of power and pleasure they get from rape actually does to the women the debase. If they do, they are even worse than anything I could describe. Your poem is beautiful even in its harshness of the cruel subject matter. So very well expressed, my friend. (I hope this isn't biographical.)
A warm hug. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Sandra, I will try this again. We are having severe thunderstorms and it keeps knocking out my internet. I want to thank you for your support of my work. It means a great deal to me. Hopefully I will be more active on the site. Life is just busy, as it is with all of us..a good busy, but busy.
again thank you so very much
jimi
on another note, how is your brother?
Comment from tfawcus
I don't have the six I would dearly like to give this, Jimi. All I can say is that I have read it through several times and have bookcased it, so that I can come back to it again in the future. It is the clearest personal statement on this subject that I have ever seen. I am in awe of the way you have expressed these feelings. There is no demand for sympathy or even empathy. It speaks to me of what it means to be human, and how that is something that no-one can take away from you.
I've taken the liberty of promoting it a little because I believe it is a poem that should be more widely read.
Whilst the last three words may or may not make it autobiographical, I would think about removing them, to give greater strength to the universality of what you are saying.
I hope you'll consider getting this poem published.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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I don't have the six I would dearly like to give this, Jimi. All I can say is that I have read it through several times and have bookcased it, so that I can come back to it again in the future. It is the clearest personal statement on this subject that I have ever seen. I am in awe of the way you have expressed these feelings. There is no demand for sympathy or even empathy. It speaks to me of what it means to be human, and how that is something that no-one can take away from you.
I've taken the liberty of promoting it a little because I believe it is a poem that should be more widely read.
Whilst the last three words may or may not make it autobiographical, I would think about removing them, to give greater strength to the universality of what you are saying.
I hope you'll consider getting this poem published.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Tfawcus, I don?t need six stars. Your incredible and humbling review is enough to know this work?s worth was recognized. I am deeply moved by your generosity and your words. Thank you is simply not enough to express my gratitude.
But thank you ever so much again.,
Jimi
Comment from Aussie
Spag: preference? Hello sunshine! Nice to have you back after such a long, long time? Where have you been honey-child? Your poem/story was touching to say the least. A heart opened and a story told. Was this you? I only ask because the words come from your heart. Much love, Kace.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Spag: preference? Hello sunshine! Nice to have you back after such a long, long time? Where have you been honey-child? Your poem/story was touching to say the least. A heart opened and a story told. Was this you? I only ask because the words come from your heart. Much love, Kace.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Kace,
hello sunshine to you!!!!!!!! It has been such a long time since I have posted anything. It goes without saying, life is busy..a good busy, but busy. How have you been? And listen to you calling me honey child!!! Thank you, once again, dear sweet friend of mine. I appreciate you. I hope to be more active since I have semi retired, but it seems I am busier and have more responsibilities more than ever..life is good and I hope it is just as good for you..
My poetry is usually about me..
again a huge thank you.. I am truly humbled....
jimi
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I am fine. Took a month off to do my painting. Also membership @ $69 US
equates to nearly $100 AU. So I am paying monthly @ $14.53. I know it is more expensive in the long term. I missed my friends and the pull was too strong not to return. Much love, Kace. XX
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Kace, I will send you an email in a few days. I wish I had known.
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Kace, I will send you an email in a few days. I wish I had known.
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Kace, I will send you an email in a few days. I wish I had known.
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Jimi, You are always in my heart, happy wanderer!
Comment from Joan E.
I thought you were talking about yourself from the beginning, and I was gratified to be correct but saddened that you have had to deal with such a violation of your "Dignity, power and grace". I hope that having the courage to write about your experience is an indication of your making progress about feeling "the sunshine". Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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I thought you were talking about yourself from the beginning, and I was gratified to be correct but saddened that you have had to deal with such a violation of your "Dignity, power and grace". I hope that having the courage to write about your experience is an indication of your making progress about feeling "the sunshine". Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Joan E,
THANK YOU ONCE AGAIN DEAR LADY!
Life is good, truly it is. As long as sunshine kisses my cheeks each and every day, I am living. again a huge thank you
jimi
Comment from Ronni
This is raw truth, in its most soul sinking and heart searing depth and
scope, and indeed the words speak even louder, the unutterable, the
unforgiveable and her limbo innocence forever in doubt and fear.
That you endeavor to engage and reach this broken spirit and
forlorn soul, in ways so tenderly and tenaciously revealed, is a
need and solace that perhaps over time can be her one dire
hope and healing eventually achieved. God bless you for your
caring and sharing of this kind of heartach and tragedy that often
goes unnoticed and untouched. Awesome Write!
Love, blessings,always Ronni
P.S. Great to see you post! Keep coming back!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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This is raw truth, in its most soul sinking and heart searing depth and
scope, and indeed the words speak even louder, the unutterable, the
unforgiveable and her limbo innocence forever in doubt and fear.
That you endeavor to engage and reach this broken spirit and
forlorn soul, in ways so tenderly and tenaciously revealed, is a
need and solace that perhaps over time can be her one dire
hope and healing eventually achieved. God bless you for your
caring and sharing of this kind of heartach and tragedy that often
goes unnoticed and untouched. Awesome Write!
Love, blessings,always Ronni
P.S. Great to see you post! Keep coming back!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Ronni, beautiful lady! How are you? I can never express in words how much your wonderful and supportive reviews of my work touches me deeply. I am truly honored. I hope to be more active in the next few month on Fanstory. As with all of us, life is busy, very busy..a good busy, but busy, none the less. hope you are doing well Think of you often . Again a huge thank you!!!!
Love to you also
thank you for always being there for me
jimi
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Thank you dear Jimi, for your
kind thoughts and appreciations! Indeed, we all
do get too busy at times, but
likewise, think of you often
too. I am doing fine dear,
and hope you are too. Stay
in touch when you can, have
a fabulous Easter Holiday!
Love always, Ronni
Comment from Tina Crute
Wow!!! I don't have the best attention span, but I was gobbling up the words and images as fast as I could get them down, so to speak. I love this because I feel for rape victims and others of abuse. I want to know their story. I want them to know Jesus' love and mine. I wonder why she was hurt and not me. I wonder all sorts of things, and you just told me how she feels about the world and herself. This is do powerful. Loved it.I'm sorry if you really were her...a victim of abuse...your last line made me sad.
Great, emotional, moving, simple words, relatable, couldn't stop reading...
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Wow!!! I don't have the best attention span, but I was gobbling up the words and images as fast as I could get them down, so to speak. I love this because I feel for rape victims and others of abuse. I want to know their story. I want them to know Jesus' love and mine. I wonder why she was hurt and not me. I wonder all sorts of things, and you just told me how she feels about the world and herself. This is do powerful. Loved it.I'm sorry if you really were her...a victim of abuse...your last line made me sad.
Great, emotional, moving, simple words, relatable, couldn't stop reading...
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Tina,
You have a huge heart. Thank you ever so much for reading this difficult work and finding it worth six stars. Your caring words encourage and inspire me. Thank you so much.
Jimi
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Its amazing and
you deserved them
for your talent and
your bravery!
In friendship,
Tina☺