Free Verse Collection
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Comment from Irish Rain
Just beautiful.
I love the ending especially.
Describes exactly how memories
of others resonate...'bereft of sound.'
Lovely.
This is a beautiful free verse,
Blessings...
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Just beautiful.
I love the ending especially.
Describes exactly how memories
of others resonate...'bereft of sound.'
Lovely.
This is a beautiful free verse,
Blessings...
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Very many thanks for your review, Judy, and for your comments about the poem's ending. Great encouragement! Al the best, Tony
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It's a very artistic poem, you're most welcome!
Comment from Carla Trinklein
Beautiful imagery! I lived in Arizona for a few years in my youth. You've described sunset in a canyon perfectly, and in so doing taken me back in time 25 years. Thank you!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Beautiful imagery! I lived in Arizona for a few years in my youth. You've described sunset in a canyon perfectly, and in so doing taken me back in time 25 years. Thank you!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Thank yo so much for this review, Carla. I'm glad my poem brought back some happy memories for you. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A soothing piece, the sound of water and music is a magical combination and I have a Debussy album where I find this kind of magic, and also in the words of your well written free verse! But I ask myself where is the rhyme after your schooling with Pantygynt? Just kidding, He he he, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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A soothing piece, the sound of water and music is a magical combination and I have a Debussy album where I find this kind of magic, and also in the words of your well written free verse! But I ask myself where is the rhyme after your schooling with Pantygynt? Just kidding, He he he, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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We've been looking at near rhyme and cross rhyme in recent sessions with Jim. Counting assonance and consonance as types of near rhyme, this poem has a few examples.
e.g.
waterfall/swirl/stirred/deux
leaves/breeze
calms/embalmed
gold/rose/glow/sallow
echoes/those/shadows
sound/drowned
My aim with these was to create a soothing combination of sounds, sometimes called euphony.
What do you think?
Alan Larkin and WB Yeats use the idea quite a bit in some of their poems.
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You have had success Tony and I think I commented on a previous post of yours that although it was a free write, there was a tune and melody to your words, it is all working! I loved the idea and Jim is a great teacher, love Dolly x
Comment from QC Poet
Veryi interesting uses of musical words and terms into a poem making for a good read and concept themed poem. Thank you for Sharing your Gifts and insight and Good Luck in the contest if entered.
Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Veryi interesting uses of musical words and terms into a poem making for a good read and concept themed poem. Thank you for Sharing your Gifts and insight and Good Luck in the contest if entered.
Blessings to you.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Very many thanks for your review and kinds words, gmartinez. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem about the music of nature that is so peaceful that we can fall asleep with peace in our minds and hearts to bring fragments of the past into our dreams.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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A very well-written free verse poem about the music of nature that is so peaceful that we can fall asleep with peace in our minds and hearts to bring fragments of the past into our dreams.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Very many thanks for your review and kinds words, Sandra. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi TF,
This is breathtakingly gorgeous, eloquent verse, my friend. You have me almost speechless--a rarity. Ha ha ha! The image you've selected complements your work effectively and imparts that calming sense of impending evening relaxation conveyed in your second stanza (my favorite). Thank you so much for sharing your work with us. Jan
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Hi TF,
This is breathtakingly gorgeous, eloquent verse, my friend. You have me almost speechless--a rarity. Ha ha ha! The image you've selected complements your work effectively and imparts that calming sense of impending evening relaxation conveyed in your second stanza (my favorite). Thank you so much for sharing your work with us. Jan
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Very many thanks for your review and kinds words, Jan. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Aussie
You and your big words! I had to think a bit about the ones you used, never heard of some. The theme was great and I could hear tinkling water. A very intelligent poem my friend, I like it very much. XXK.
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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You and your big words! I had to think a bit about the ones you used, never heard of some. The theme was great and I could hear tinkling water. A very intelligent poem my friend, I like it very much. XXK.
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Very many thanks for your review and kinds words, Aussie. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from meeshu
a very smoothly flowing poem with excellent rhythm and cadence. you can hear the soft music in nature coming through the words. well done, Tony..................meeshu
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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a very smoothly flowing poem with excellent rhythm and cadence. you can hear the soft music in nature coming through the words. well done, Tony..................meeshu
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Very many thanks for your review and kinds words, Meeshu. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony