Our Friend Michael Cahill
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Comment from Treischel
Yes! I like the interlinking rhyme of the second line carrying to the first line of the next stanza. It makes it much like Rubaiyat, or Terza Rima. Still not crazy about the word refrain concept. I liked the "spells" the best. You did a wonderful tribute to Michael, portraying his helpful nature. I liked how you incorporated first and last lines
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Yes! I like the interlinking rhyme of the second line carrying to the first line of the next stanza. It makes it much like Rubaiyat, or Terza Rima. Still not crazy about the word refrain concept. I liked the "spells" the best. You did a wonderful tribute to Michael, portraying his helpful nature. I liked how you incorporated first and last lines
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Yes. I knew I was borrowing the idea. One reviewer said it was like a necklace. I thought that a good simile. I agree with you I don't like it much and would probably not use it again, but I did try to make a silk purse out of that sow's ear. Thanks for the honest review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt tribute to honor Michael Cahill's life and the honor to have known him is precious to many of us here on FanStory and it is a sad day that we will remember for a long time.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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A very well-written heartfelt tribute to honor Michael Cahill's life and the honor to have known him is precious to many of us here on FanStory and it is a sad day that we will remember for a long time.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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He will be sorely missed many thanks for reviewing.
Comment from kiwijenny
What a great poem in honor of a friend. I hope Tom gathers these up for Michael's family. No one can tell me how he died. Do you know how? I like his gentle spirit..I mean liked. I too wish RIP meant return if possible.
God bless
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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What a great poem in honor of a friend. I hope Tom gathers these up for Michael's family. No one can tell me how he died. Do you know how? I like his gentle spirit..I mean liked. I too wish RIP meant return if possible.
God bless
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Someone said it was a stroke but I really don't know. The book was damommy's idea. I might prompt her to give Tom a nudge on what you mentioned of passing the poems on. Thanks for this lovely review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a beautiful tribute to Michael and your memories of him are warm and endearing. I didn't know Michael well, although I did read many of his poems. This is a beautiful poem in a form I have not seen before, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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This is a beautiful tribute to Michael and your memories of him are warm and endearing. I didn't know Michael well, although I did read many of his poems. This is a beautiful poem in a form I have not seen before, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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I am glad you liked this. I have read several of these dahquains recently and was not very happy with most of them. I didnot feel the repeats worked very well. I wondered if chaining the poem as I did might help that aspect. I was quite surprised how like free verse it sounded when read aloud to the punctuation rather than to the rhyme. Thank you so much for the review.
Comment from damommy
I'm so glad you got it 'sorted' and were able to get this posted. It's just the thing Michael would have liked. I never called him Mikey, either, although he once told me he liked 'Mikey.'
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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I'm so glad you got it 'sorted' and were able to get this posted. It's just the thing Michael would have liked. I never called him Mikey, either, although he once told me he liked 'Mikey.'
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you. Felt this form needed a little extra something. One reviewer said it worked 'like a necklace' I liked the idea of that. I am particularly pleased that you thought he would have liked it.
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I'm sure he would.
Comment from Joy Graham
This is a lovely tribute to our friend, Michael Cahill :) He reached out to so many of us. Interesting to know he didn't like being called Mikey. I always prefer to use full names or initials. I keep reading how folks say he never said anything nasty. He came to my defence once with a scathing message for the fanstorian. He told me in pm that he had to wait a day to calm down a bit or his comment to the person would have been way worse and would have gotten him into trouble. I was speechless and appreciative. It was like having a big brother looking out for me.
So many wonderful tributes coming out. They are all so beautiful. Makes me proud to get to hang out with this writing community.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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This is a lovely tribute to our friend, Michael Cahill :) He reached out to so many of us. Interesting to know he didn't like being called Mikey. I always prefer to use full names or initials. I keep reading how folks say he never said anything nasty. He came to my defence once with a scathing message for the fanstorian. He told me in pm that he had to wait a day to calm down a bit or his comment to the person would have been way worse and would have gotten him into trouble. I was speechless and appreciative. It was like having a big brother looking out for me.
So many wonderful tributes coming out. They are all so beautiful. Makes me proud to get to hang out with this writing community.
Joy xx
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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He was a great guy, a good poet, author and friend. I had no idea he didn't like that nickname contraction until he told me either.
Comment from Joanna S. Blue
I was very interested in this form and read the poem many times. I like how it seems to connect like a necklace. Michael Cahill's wisdom comes through. I really
liked the part about keeping your cool, being gentle. The poem is a stirring
tribute and a "manual" for writers. Thank you.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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I was very interested in this form and read the poem many times. I like how it seems to connect like a necklace. Michael Cahill's wisdom comes through. I really
liked the part about keeping your cool, being gentle. The poem is a stirring
tribute and a "manual" for writers. Thank you.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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I am pleased that you liked the form of this one, especially that necklace simile, because that was what I was going for, with you I achieved my aim. Thank you
Comment from Scarbrems
I've got to stop reading these, my tissues are too sodden. Another great tribute to a dear man. Wish I'd known he didn't like being called Mikey, I only did it because everyone else seemed to. Damn. You've expressed this well, as gently as his words clearly were to you.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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I've got to stop reading these, my tissues are too sodden. Another great tribute to a dear man. Wish I'd known he didn't like being called Mikey, I only did it because everyone else seemed to. Damn. You've expressed this well, as gently as his words clearly were to you.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Me too until he told me. Thanks for reviewing this. I am glad you think this poem of mine does the business.
Comment from Sugarray77
Great job on this Jim. I really enjoyed your verse and think the Dahquain form is perfect for your memorial offering to Michael. Well written and well said.
Melissa
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Great job on this Jim. I really enjoyed your verse and think the Dahquain form is perfect for your memorial offering to Michael. Well written and well said.
Melissa
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thanks for reviewing this. I am glad you think this poem of mine does the business. I wasn't sure myself. Repetition can appear awkward and my adaptation of the form was aimed at making it sound less stilted than it can do.
Comment from Miss Sherry
A beautiful tribute to a poet I was not blessed to know, but I feel his shining light on this site from all of you who loved him. Some people are just special, though they are the most simple of us all. They do not know hate or ego or hurting, just humility and grace. I will keep his family in my prayers. I believe that one day in heaven I shall meet him and love him as all of you do.
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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A beautiful tribute to a poet I was not blessed to know, but I feel his shining light on this site from all of you who loved him. Some people are just special, though they are the most simple of us all. They do not know hate or ego or hurting, just humility and grace. I will keep his family in my prayers. I believe that one day in heaven I shall meet him and love him as all of you do.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you for this review. It seems this form has achieved what I had hoped it might.
