Perennials of War
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Comment from judiverse
I'm so glad for the happy ending! Clever bit about Romeo dragging Shana's clothes out as she was packing. Jeff pleads Anderson's case pretty well, but I'd have liked to see a confrontation between Shana and her father at the end. She needs to get things straightened out with him and let him know that she's taking charge of her own life. The resolution and the proposal come so quickly, and it's a bit of a surprise that Benjamin is willing to accept her choice so readily. Just something to think about as you do your editing. Congratulations on completing your great undertaking. Try to get Shana more involved (as when Patricia threatens her). judi
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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I'm so glad for the happy ending! Clever bit about Romeo dragging Shana's clothes out as she was packing. Jeff pleads Anderson's case pretty well, but I'd have liked to see a confrontation between Shana and her father at the end. She needs to get things straightened out with him and let him know that she's taking charge of her own life. The resolution and the proposal come so quickly, and it's a bit of a surprise that Benjamin is willing to accept her choice so readily. Just something to think about as you do your editing. Congratulations on completing your great undertaking. Try to get Shana more involved (as when Patricia threatens her). judi
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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In last weeks post I mentioned that Drew would be contacting Benjamin, so that opened the door for a discussion. It's not in Shana's nature to stand up to her dad. It would be against the Jewish tradition. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome. We need to have some reason for Benjamin's change of heart, and I'm suggesting that we should see Shana dealing with things more directly. judi
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Ten sixes!!! That was brilliant! I loved when Romeo took out Shana's clothes, lol! I loved the whole story, Barbara, and I'm sorry it's over, I'll miss the dogs, I miss Drew and his wonderful family, and Shana. Even her father and mother came up trumps in the end! Wonderful my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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Ten sixes!!! That was brilliant! I loved when Romeo took out Shana's clothes, lol! I loved the whole story, Barbara, and I'm sorry it's over, I'll miss the dogs, I miss Drew and his wonderful family, and Shana. Even her father and mother came up trumps in the end! Wonderful my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
Thank you for this delightful example of your writing. I'm just sorry I missed the other parts. Your dialogue and description of the characters' surroundings is very good. I could see, in my mind's eye, the characters and everything you were writing about. The only thing I was a little confused about was the title of the chapter. But I trust that it was explained in a part that I missed. Congratulations on the start of your new novel.
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Thank you for this delightful example of your writing. I'm just sorry I missed the other parts. Your dialogue and description of the characters' surroundings is very good. I could see, in my mind's eye, the characters and everything you were writing about. The only thing I was a little confused about was the title of the chapter. But I trust that it was explained in a part that I missed. Congratulations on the start of your new novel.
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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The bases of the story is WWII stolen artwork. In trying to recover it, they found love. It super quick summary. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Tootsie55
THIS WAS GREAT! Needs a sequel! Let me know when it comes out in E-book. I want Louise to read it I think she will enjoy it. If you wanna "shout" Aussie term.. for donate or give me an autographed hard copy I will pay the postage as I know the International postage is awful. Well done! I was still looking for more but I also feel like you left it at the right spot. NO SPAGS!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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THIS WAS GREAT! Needs a sequel! Let me know when it comes out in E-book. I want Louise to read it I think she will enjoy it. If you wanna "shout" Aussie term.. for donate or give me an autographed hard copy I will pay the postage as I know the International postage is awful. Well done! I was still looking for more but I also feel like you left it at the right spot. NO SPAGS!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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It will take a few years. I am working on getting Texas Dreamcatcher out this summer. Thank you for the kind review.
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Have I read that one Is it another novel or still working on. Make sure we keep in touch. sankey48@yahoo.com.au
Comment from c_lucas
Your ending surprised me. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery. A superb book with romantic overtures.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Your ending surprised me. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery. A superb book with romantic overtures.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
What a fitting and lovely ending to this fabulous story, Beautfully written and brilliantly composed Barbara, I'm going to let the stars do my talking for me! Well done, blessjngs, Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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What a fitting and lovely ending to this fabulous story, Beautfully written and brilliantly composed Barbara, I'm going to let the stars do my talking for me! Well done, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Great series Barbara,