Lettre d' Amour
Eights 'n Sixes28 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
Susan, This is a very nicely written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Susan, This is a very nicely written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Dear Teri! How was your Christmas and did you spoil Greyson? :-)) Thanks for the kind review, best wishes in the New year!
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice work up for your poem it seems to say it all for how she is feeling. Nice work and good luck in the contest. Best wishes.
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Nice work up for your poem it seems to say it all for how she is feeling. Nice work and good luck in the contest. Best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Hello there! Thank you for such a kind review! I do appreciate it! Happy New Year :-)
Comment from Bill Schott
This romance poem, Lettre d' Amour, presented in iambic heptameter and ABCB quatrains, describes in eloquent wording the contents of a well-worded letter to one who is held in high regard.
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This romance poem, Lettre d' Amour, presented in iambic heptameter and ABCB quatrains, describes in eloquent wording the contents of a well-worded letter to one who is held in high regard.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Hi Bill, thank you for stopping by. Best wishes to you and your family in the New Year! :-)
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written Susan. The language is superb, the rhyme and flow near perfect, and the theme excellent. This form is normally called ballad form, in tetrametric/trimetric stanzas, in 8686. Abcb rhyme. Many old hymn were written in this style, (amazing grace being one) it dates back a lot further than 1987. HNY, Blessings, Roy
Suggestion Avowal('s) testament.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Beautifully written Susan. The language is superb, the rhyme and flow near perfect, and the theme excellent. This form is normally called ballad form, in tetrametric/trimetric stanzas, in 8686. Abcb rhyme. Many old hymn were written in this style, (amazing grace being one) it dates back a lot further than 1987. HNY, Blessings, Roy
Suggestion Avowal('s) testament.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Hi Roy, I made a mistake when I typed the author notes :-( I have it corrected now.
Where are you getting caught on the flow? just curious. I hope you had a wonderful Christmas and happy New year to you!!
Thank you for taking the time to read and leave me such a kind review! :-)
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Your flow is good Susan, no problems
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:-) ok good.
Comment from tfawcus
This is a poem that flows well in classic 8/6/8/6 ballad meter, with an abab rhyme scheme. I think your author note may need amending!
You make most effective use of internal rhyme and assonance throughout the poem, as in lines such as:
"sweet lover's plea soon beckons me,"
and
"Though gilded quill deep passions spill ..."
You might consider the grammar glitch that 'quill...spill' brings to mind. Should it not either be 'quills spill" or 'quill spills'?
I had difficulty with the meaning of these two lines:
"By happenstance nor flit romance
should twin flames merge as one."
I think that you are saying that the flame that ignites, annealing two people together eternally, neither happens by chance nor in brief encounters.
The overall effect of your poem is quite lovely when read aloud. The iambic rhythm is perfect, except in the first line, '...guiding my days,' where the emphasis on 'guiding' is trochaic. This trochaic inversion has the effect of emphasising the word 'guiding', as you may have intended. It is a device that is quite frequently used in verse, especially at the beginning of a new line.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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This is a poem that flows well in classic 8/6/8/6 ballad meter, with an abab rhyme scheme. I think your author note may need amending!
You make most effective use of internal rhyme and assonance throughout the poem, as in lines such as:
"sweet lover's plea soon beckons me,"
and
"Though gilded quill deep passions spill ..."
You might consider the grammar glitch that 'quill...spill' brings to mind. Should it not either be 'quills spill" or 'quill spills'?
I had difficulty with the meaning of these two lines:
"By happenstance nor flit romance
should twin flames merge as one."
I think that you are saying that the flame that ignites, annealing two people together eternally, neither happens by chance nor in brief encounters.
The overall effect of your poem is quite lovely when read aloud. The iambic rhythm is perfect, except in the first line, '...guiding my days,' where the emphasis on 'guiding' is trochaic. This trochaic inversion has the effect of emphasising the word 'guiding', as you may have intended. It is a device that is quite frequently used in verse, especially at the beginning of a new line.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Hi Tony!! I hope you had a wonderful Christmas..and best wishes for the New year!
Thank you for leaving me such a wonderful review too.
I'm just a little confuse on some things...This is a form by Richard W. Jenkins 8/6...
Also, I think this is probably a dumb question...but what does quill and spill bring to mind?
Yes, the first line is off ( not Iambic) but this form doesn't require it,only that if flows..
more in pm...
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ah Tony! I checked my author notes and I did type the form wrong!
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:-( Tony! typo...THROUGH gilded quill deep passions spill...ughhh
Comment from susand3022
Good evening Susanjohn, Happy New Year! Your poem, Letter d'Amore, was recommended to me by a friend. I have to say, she was right, it's a beautiful love poem, you didn't disappoint! Your rhyme and meter were spot on and it was just a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Good evening Susanjohn, Happy New Year! Your poem, Letter d'Amore, was recommended to me by a friend. I have to say, she was right, it's a beautiful love poem, you didn't disappoint! Your rhyme and meter were spot on and it was just a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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AHHHHH this is putting such a smile on my face!!! I am simply honored! Thank you for telling me and leaving such a lovely review. I truly appreciate it. Happy New year to you...and your friend!!! :-)))
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great contest entry, Susan. It is filled with super rhymes and a great message. Your lines flow smoothly. The message is clear, too. I like the art you chose to pair with your well-chosen words. This surely will be a contender. Great job and best wishes. Jan
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This is a great contest entry, Susan. It is filled with super rhymes and a great message. Your lines flow smoothly. The message is clear, too. I like the art you chose to pair with your well-chosen words. This surely will be a contender. Great job and best wishes. Jan
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
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Hi Jan! I sure have missed all my friends here. Thank you for leaving such a lovely review. I really do appreciate it. Happy New year to you!
Comment from moonsunrise
What a beautifully written Eights 'n Sixes poem. I have never heard of this. I will have to try writing one in the future.
Ah! to receive a "lettre d'amour" from a loved one! The visual you chose is so breathtaking simple but lovely.
Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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What a beautifully written Eights 'n Sixes poem. I have never heard of this. I will have to try writing one in the future.
Ah! to receive a "lettre d'amour" from a loved one! The visual you chose is so breathtaking simple but lovely.
Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Richard W. jenkins is a member here. Please do try this form and let him know..he would love that! :-) Thank you for reading and leaving such a kind review! I do appreciate it. Happy New Year to you!
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Your welcome. I will try this one day.