Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written chapter. The two are at Helen's apartment looking for the key document, it seems Madamme du Randt just take the chance to disappearfor some reason.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018

Thanks, Sandra. I appreciate your continued interest and support. All the best, Tony.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Tony,

Loved the Gotham City references! Your story continues to move along at a fast pace. I can't help but wonder about the Mafia and their reach - will your characters be able to save themselves?

I will keep reading to find out,

~MP~

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018

They certainly seem to be in deep water at the moment. I hope they can swim fast enough to avoid the sharks!

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Hi, Robert. his is coming along very smoothly, I think.

I like your sprinkling of humor in this chapter, like here; "She gave me a look with more implied meaning than a well-constructed haiku."

And: "giving a good impression of the last sardine being squashed into a can. "

Just curious. Do you have an end game for this story in mind? Reason I ask is if you plan on getting it published some day, there are word count restriction guidelines publishers want. I believe in the case of fiction it is l90 to 240 thousand words. (Of course if you are James Patterson or some other big time author, it doesn't matter. LOL.

Perhaps it is just me, but I have a feeling you are bringing the mafia into your story in order to stretch it out. Perhaps I am wrong of course. (Writer's intuition)

And: What does this mean? "Come over here. It looks as though Poison Ivy has done a bunk."

Good write, Robert. Bob

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018

Thanks for your review and helpful comments. I have a fairly good idea of where this is going and anticipate the finished book will be in the 60,000 to 80,000 word range. The term ?doing a bunk? is a mainly British idiom meaning to leave suddenly without telling anyone. On-course bookmakers at the racetrack were someti prone to it! I appreciate your continued support and the six stars.

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

I love the humor in this chapter. You are back to your old technique, which I enjoy so much. I like the subtle references, like Jeanne's Gallic shrug. And, of course, all the Batman references.
This is my favorite of your chapters. With the disappearance of Jeanne, the plot thickens. Fascinating reading.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

Thanks, Debbie. Good to hear you enjoyed this episode. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

Wow the story is getting more and more exciting. Is Madamme Durand a friend or a foe? Charles is proving to be a smart company for Helen. Can a brewing romance be far behind? I will wait for the next post. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

Very many thanks for taking the time to review these two chapters, Nassus. I appreciate your interest and your comments. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from giraffmang

Exceptional

Your batman explanations gave me a kick. lol

Another great instalment, developing the plot further with each stroke.

She gave me a look with more implied meaning than a well-constructed haiku - clever, lol

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

Thanks, G. Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the extra star. All the best, Tony

Comment from royowen

Excellent

An excellent episode Tony. Things are hotting up, Charles is behaving like he's enjoying being pursued, as if he's in an almost espionage thriller. Using all these super hero metaphors to add to the thrills of the mystery. Well done, good scribing, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

Thanks for the review, Roy. I appreciate your comments. Best wishes Tony

reply by royowen on 01-Nov-2018

Most welcome

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Wasn't into Batman much myself. I liked the comical inclusions though putting humour into an otherwise serious situation. All a great read, again.One spag... lad (might)be, if he knew
Then a good expression ..."giving a good impression of the last sardine being squashed into a can."

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

Thanks, Sankey. Glad it went over OK. I wasn't sure if I'd overdone it. I appreciate the spag pick-up. Fixed now. All the best, Tony

reply by Sankey on 01-Nov-2018

Hi Tony I know you will be interested as you read some of my stuff about our Aussie trips.my wife's old Tootsie55 account is being opened up again. A lot of you expressed interest in more info on our travels I mentioned in my book she has written extensively on our travels with limitations of course due to our disability. Look out for it real soon. I did not know you back then so not sure you saw her stuff before

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

Thanks. I?ll keep an eye out.

reply by Sankey on 01-Nov-2018

probably not much funny money on them but you will recognize a lot of our destinations.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

No kidding magazines publishers aren't that generous. The journal must be most interesting.

Ha, so funny Charles didnt think of it before. LOL

I think it utterly appropriate for Helen to mix metaphors given she's only half English. Holmes would be the counterpart of American Batman.

Well I must read the contents of that journal now.

Exceptional writing, Tony.

Gloria






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 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

I've no doubt that at least some excerpts from the journal will find their way into the story - as long as Helen hasn't lost the blasted thing. I haven't had a chance to read it yet!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Enjoyed all your Batman references, Tony. I recognized the well known enemies from Joker to Poison Ivy! Yes, that Mme Durand is seeming more suspicious all the time. I loved the reference to the "gallic shrug" as the French are so famous for the expressive shrug.

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 Comment Written 31-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

Glad you enjoyed the Batman references. I wondered if I'd gone overboard with them a bit. Yes, the Gallic shrug! Something that the Spanish are quite good at, too! All the best, Tony