I Skip Among the Stars
A Quatrain with an ALMOST Chain Rhyme33 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Love this beautiful moonlight photo and poem. I am a watcher of the stars and the heavens! It is quite the show God gives us, doesn't He? I enjoyed this!
All my best,
Sally
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Love this beautiful moonlight photo and poem. I am a watcher of the stars and the heavens! It is quite the show God gives us, doesn't He? I enjoyed this!
All my best,
Sally
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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I'm so glad. Thank you.
Comment from dragonpoet
Good imagery and personification of the comet in this poem about its trip through space. It is a beautiful and apt piece of artwork you used to illustrate it. It seems you could of written the poem about the picture.
Keep writing
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Good imagery and personification of the comet in this poem about its trip through space. It is a beautiful and apt piece of artwork you used to illustrate it. It seems you could of written the poem about the picture.
Keep writing
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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I was lucky to find that photo. Thank you so much.
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I can never find photos I like, so I rarely illustrate my poems that aren't from the pix this club. You're so very welcome.
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
Lol! I'm pretty sure the sandman's been there all along! ;) But he sure gave you lovely material for your talented pen! ;) ;) This is such a wonderful write, damommy - I absolutely love it! Your rhythm and flow are grand, of course, but your phrasings and word choice are 'out of this world'! Lol! Seriously, though, they really are almost magical! The moon is just mesmerizing now - thank you for sharing such a bright start to the day! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Lol! I'm pretty sure the sandman's been there all along! ;) But he sure gave you lovely material for your talented pen! ;) ;) This is such a wonderful write, damommy - I absolutely love it! Your rhythm and flow are grand, of course, but your phrasings and word choice are 'out of this world'! Lol! Seriously, though, they really are almost magical! The moon is just mesmerizing now - thank you for sharing such a bright start to the day! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you for this fantastic review. Very much appreciated.
Comment from CD Richards
This is a terrific poem, with wonderful imagery and expression. Unless I'm mistaken, the first line of the last stanza has 12 syllables, where all of the others have 10, so it's hexameter, not pentameter. This caused me to stumble when reading. If I could make a suggestion:
I wave as Old Man Moon smiles sleepily
Of course, it's up to you :)
A very nice piece of work, I enjoyed, as the night sky is one of my favourite subjects.
Cheers, Craig
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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This is a terrific poem, with wonderful imagery and expression. Unless I'm mistaken, the first line of the last stanza has 12 syllables, where all of the others have 10, so it's hexameter, not pentameter. This caused me to stumble when reading. If I could make a suggestion:
I wave as Old Man Moon smiles sleepily
Of course, it's up to you :)
A very nice piece of work, I enjoyed, as the night sky is one of my favourite subjects.
Cheers, Craig
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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I'll look at that. Thank you so much.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
What an enjoyable quatrain poem Yvonne, excellent meter with beautiful flow and what a lovely subject...the Hunter's Moon..an absolute treat to read.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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What an enjoyable quatrain poem Yvonne, excellent meter with beautiful flow and what a lovely subject...the Hunter's Moon..an absolute treat to read.
Mitchell
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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I'm glad you like it. Thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for telling me about the Hunter's Moon. The moon looked quite gorgeous last night. Hope I get to see it tomorrow night. (too cloudy most of the time!)
Loved the poem, Yvonne! I like all the senses you depicted in your tour of the night skies, seeing and hearing while waving and feeling the onset of sleep!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you for telling me about the Hunter's Moon. The moon looked quite gorgeous last night. Hope I get to see it tomorrow night. (too cloudy most of the time!)
Loved the poem, Yvonne! I like all the senses you depicted in your tour of the night skies, seeing and hearing while waving and feeling the onset of sleep!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you, Helen. I appreciate that.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"I Skip Among the Stars", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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"I Skip Among the Stars", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you. Much appreciated.
Comment from ChibiElf
It is a lovely poem, but I believe you missed the challenge.
You listed the requirements of a chain poem- Stanza one is supposed to be abab (you have aaba), stanza two is supposed to be abba (you have ccdc), stanza three is supposed to be aabb (you have eefe), I'm not sure what stanza four was supposed to be you have gggg
I apologize if I misunderstood or made an error in there.
Excellent use of language and very enjoyable to read. The 4-star rating is due to technical issues.
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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It is a lovely poem, but I believe you missed the challenge.
You listed the requirements of a chain poem- Stanza one is supposed to be abab (you have aaba), stanza two is supposed to be abba (you have ccdc), stanza three is supposed to be aabb (you have eefe), I'm not sure what stanza four was supposed to be you have gggg
I apologize if I misunderstood or made an error in there.
Excellent use of language and very enjoyable to read. The 4-star rating is due to technical issues.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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I'll take a look. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from meeshu
This is a pleasure to read. Your writing is smooth and the images are colorful. Very well penned, MM. this is an interesting rhyme scheme and really out did your self with language...................meeshu
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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This is a pleasure to read. Your writing is smooth and the images are colorful. Very well penned, MM. this is an interesting rhyme scheme and really out did your self with language...................meeshu
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from LIJ Red
The chained quatrain rules and specs made my head swim, but then I just stepped out to see if we had stars tonight, and we do. Anyway you cut it, this is a readable rhyming poem about a celestial subject. Excellent
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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The chained quatrain rules and specs made my head swim, but then I just stepped out to see if we had stars tonight, and we do. Anyway you cut it, this is a readable rhyming poem about a celestial subject. Excellent
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you. Much appreciated.
