I Always Thought
Loop Poetry Contest Submission43 total reviews
Comment from meeshu
this is a wonderful love poem and a longing poem. it is great in its current form, but I'd like to see it without the gimmickry of Loop. a fine work, Idamarty..................meeshu
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this is a wonderful love poem and a longing poem. it is great in its current form, but I'd like to see it without the gimmickry of Loop. a fine work, Idamarty..................meeshu
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
Comment from damommy
What a beautiful loop poem, and rhyming, too. Very touching. There's never enough time before we love a loved one. I wish you lots of luck in the contest. Lovely presentation, too.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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What a beautiful loop poem, and rhyming, too. Very touching. There's never enough time before we love a loved one. I wish you lots of luck in the contest. Lovely presentation, too.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Hi there,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I am so glad you liked it and I appreciate your comments.
Take care and have a great day!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
"I Always Thought" is an excellent title and beginning to your wonderful loop poem. The first line says it all in a nutshell. It's very difficult to write a good loop poem, and this is well done and made to look easy to do. I like the story you tell about two people, you and someone else you loved. I feel for the narrator, who is left alone, after spending a lifetime together, with a loved one. The image you chose is great and fits the piece very well. Thanks for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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"I Always Thought" is an excellent title and beginning to your wonderful loop poem. The first line says it all in a nutshell. It's very difficult to write a good loop poem, and this is well done and made to look easy to do. I like the story you tell about two people, you and someone else you loved. I feel for the narrator, who is left alone, after spending a lifetime together, with a loved one. The image you chose is great and fits the piece very well. Thanks for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Hi there,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing and for all of your positive comments. They are truly appreciated.
Have a great day!
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You're welcome and enjoy your day, as well.
Jesse
Comment from Possummagic
I recently lost my mother and your words speak volumes for how I feel at my loss. I somehow thought she'd always be here. Now I want to pick up the phone or pop in to surprise her and I can't. I think of something I want to know and I should have asked before.... Because now we are out of time. Nicely written. PM
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I recently lost my mother and your words speak volumes for how I feel at my loss. I somehow thought she'd always be here. Now I want to pick up the phone or pop in to surprise her and I can't. I think of something I want to know and I should have asked before.... Because now we are out of time. Nicely written. PM
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Hi there,
So sorry for you loss. I lost my mom in 2007 but it still feels like yesterday. All of the emotions and the feelings of loss never go away. Life does go on but it's never the same.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
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Yes my mother took a chunk of my heart with her when she left. God bless PM
Comment from A. Willow Bends
What a beautiful tribute. This is excellent. For a loop poem, you have far exceeded the format into something that is lovely and bittersweet and shows the strongest of emotion in your words. The flow is there, the essence of love and loss. Exceptional. Absolutely so.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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What a beautiful tribute. This is excellent. For a loop poem, you have far exceeded the format into something that is lovely and bittersweet and shows the strongest of emotion in your words. The flow is there, the essence of love and loss. Exceptional. Absolutely so.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Hi there,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing and for the six stars! They are truly appreciated as are your comments.
Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written loop poem, our lives seem to go like a loop with time that quickly runs out long before we had done all the thins we dreamed to do, but we all will meet when we are going to our final home again.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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A very well-written loop poem, our lives seem to go like a loop with time that quickly runs out long before we had done all the thins we dreamed to do, but we all will meet when we are going to our final home again.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Hi there,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Yes, we have hope for an eternity with our loved ones!
Blessings
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Idamarty!
Your Loop poem is soulful and poignant. I have had your words told to me many times by dear friends who have lost a loved one. That's why it is so important to enjoy and cherish today...these moments, for we never know when our time here is done... Just a beautiful rendering! Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Hello Idamarty!
Your Loop poem is soulful and poignant. I have had your words told to me many times by dear friends who have lost a loved one. That's why it is so important to enjoy and cherish today...these moments, for we never know when our time here is done... Just a beautiful rendering! Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Hi there,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Yes it is very important to enjoy and cherish each day and to say all of the things we need to before it's too late.
Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Boogienights
This is very special..a touching and heartfelt poem, done perfectly for the loop poetry contest. I think about those things now that I'm getting older..all the things my husband and I haven't done yet. Thank God he's still with me. Best of luck in the contest.
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This is very special..a touching and heartfelt poem, done perfectly for the loop poetry contest. I think about those things now that I'm getting older..all the things my husband and I haven't done yet. Thank God he's still with me. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
Comment from Dean Kuch
Your Loop Poem poetry entry is a touching, poignant testimony to love and loss, Idamarty.
Smooth cadence, excellent rhyming and a good cadence and flow, it says what it needs to say without coming across as sounding pretentious.
Alfred Lord Tennyson once wrote, "'tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all." Well, I for one disagree. It is three times more painful having had love in your life only to have it slip forever from your grasp. You cannot miss what you never had.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Your Loop Poem poetry entry is a touching, poignant testimony to love and loss, Idamarty.
Smooth cadence, excellent rhyming and a good cadence and flow, it says what it needs to say without coming across as sounding pretentious.
Alfred Lord Tennyson once wrote, "'tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all." Well, I for one disagree. It is three times more painful having had love in your life only to have it slip forever from your grasp. You cannot miss what you never had.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I completely agree Dean. Loving someone and then losing them is heartbreaking. The heartache never really goes away whereas if you have never loved then you can never lose. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Have a wonderful day.
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You're very welcome.
You do the same. :)
Comment from kiwijenny
I've tried to loop
Loop alley oops
Oops I've misplaced thought
Thought I would
Would .....get me off this roller coaster
Coaster need to put a cup on it
It was good...these loops are hard...you made a great poem and it made sense
God bless
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I've tried to loop
Loop alley oops
Oops I've misplaced thought
Thought I would
Would .....get me off this roller coaster
Coaster need to put a cup on it
It was good...these loops are hard...you made a great poem and it made sense
God bless
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018