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Comment from kiwisteveh
The simple rhyming couplet you employ here is perhaps a beginner's impression of what poetry should be, and it may well come across as too basic for some folk. However, you do manage a reasonable synopsis of faith (and its loss) in your life, and end with a solid message of religious faith.
I suspect you may be outclassed in poetic skill when this contest comes to the judges eye, but welcome to the poetry pond and congratulations for diving in the deep end with this contest entry.
I have just been googling the mysterious worm castles, but I am still not sure if the info I found bears any relation to what you intended here!
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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The simple rhyming couplet you employ here is perhaps a beginner's impression of what poetry should be, and it may well come across as too basic for some folk. However, you do manage a reasonable synopsis of faith (and its loss) in your life, and end with a solid message of religious faith.
I suspect you may be outclassed in poetic skill when this contest comes to the judges eye, but welcome to the poetry pond and congratulations for diving in the deep end with this contest entry.
I have just been googling the mysterious worm castles, but I am still not sure if the info I found bears any relation to what you intended here!
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thanks.
Comment from Miranda Langston
this is an absolutely fantastic entry for the Faith Poetry contest. i love the picture you chose to accompany your poem and i really think that this could win
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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this is an absolutely fantastic entry for the Faith Poetry contest. i love the picture you chose to accompany your poem and i really think that this could win
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from ChristoSan
It is simply beautiful. The way he wrote his story life is somehow fit the rhythm. Then the ending just explains it all. Such an inspiration.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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It is simply beautiful. The way he wrote his story life is somehow fit the rhythm. Then the ending just explains it all. Such an inspiration.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from BeasPeas
Faith does carry us through many trials of life. Things will turn out okay. We can't see what's ahead, but take everything one step at a time. Good luck in the contest with this nice poem. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Faith does carry us through many trials of life. Things will turn out okay. We can't see what's ahead, but take everything one step at a time. Good luck in the contest with this nice poem. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much Marilyn. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Raul1
This is a feel good poem. I think that you're talking about Heaven and the people who get to go there. Only the good people go there. This poem I like a lot, because it feels positive. Nice poem! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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This is a feel good poem. I think that you're talking about Heaven and the people who get to go there. Only the good people go there. This poem I like a lot, because it feels positive. Nice poem! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
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You're welcome.
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice presentation for your poem,some times we all need a reality check for us to realize just what is important in our lives so glad you woke up and realized it was your wife she must love you dearly.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Nice presentation for your poem,some times we all need a reality check for us to realize just what is important in our lives so glad you woke up and realized it was your wife she must love you dearly.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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She does, shes kept me alive through tw health scares. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Earl,I can understand that she did. This is a wonderful poem,that just says it all, it's written with a great sense of humour, still addressing the more serious issues. How refreshing is that. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Hi Earl,I can understand that she did. This is a wonderful poem,that just says it all, it's written with a great sense of humour, still addressing the more serious issues. How refreshing is that. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much Ulla. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, in its brevity, this poem is profound with wisdom-filled message. As your poem eloquently states, we should not walk in fear as we face daily challenges in life.
I noticed just a few minor grammar nits for your consideration. Please feel to ignore if the suggestions do not suit your poetic voice or intent.
When I was seven,
I believed I'd go to heaven[.]
As I got older,
I became bolder,
Not believing I'd reach thirty[.]
My deeds became dirty[,]
[And] Life became such a hassle
My beliefs turned towards worm castles
After a health scare,[.]
At my mortality[,] I did stare,
I kept my wife dear
When she said remember it's faith[,and] not fear[.]
Your doubts should be stored,
And rejoice that Christ is lord.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Wow, in its brevity, this poem is profound with wisdom-filled message. As your poem eloquently states, we should not walk in fear as we face daily challenges in life.
I noticed just a few minor grammar nits for your consideration. Please feel to ignore if the suggestions do not suit your poetic voice or intent.
When I was seven,
I believed I'd go to heaven[.]
As I got older,
I became bolder,
Not believing I'd reach thirty[.]
My deeds became dirty[,]
[And] Life became such a hassle
My beliefs turned towards worm castles
After a health scare,[.]
At my mortality[,] I did stare,
I kept my wife dear
When she said remember it's faith[,and] not fear[.]
Your doubts should be stored,
And rejoice that Christ is lord.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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I appreciate the pointers but the commas were intentional I will add that and in, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Loredana
I would give you six too if I had them. Ran out of them, sorry. Beautiful and strong poem. I like the choice of words you made and the rhyming scheme you chose to give rhythm.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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I would give you six too if I had them. Ran out of them, sorry. Beautiful and strong poem. I like the choice of words you made and the rhyming scheme you chose to give rhythm.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sanku
This is very good. we tend to remember God only when mortality stares at you .
When young the world seems to be very easy to conquer Living teaches us otherwise.
Faith .we should hold tight to it.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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This is very good. we tend to remember God only when mortality stares at you .
When young the world seems to be very easy to conquer Living teaches us otherwise.
Faith .we should hold tight to it.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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You are absolutely correct about faith. Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.