Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

Third and final book is off to a good start. Clever way of keeping Mildred in the story. No one seems surprised at her rising from the dead, not even the kids. So now Veronica and Mildred will join the women's suffrage movement. But that's already history, so how can they help? :)

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you so much for the show of shiny stars, my friend!! No, there is nothing they have to change but it's very relevant to what's coming up. Patience!!!! I know you are getting bored LOL .... NO, don't change, you can be as impatient as you want because I'm always getting on at you for leaving me in the dark and not writing the parts fast enough. LOL Payback time!

So, have you started a book yet? I think it would help you. Jot some notes down and see where they take you. Sending you a squidjy hug. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 12-Aug-2018

The reason I can't write is I have no ideas that I like enough. If I had a good book idea, I'd be writing. My mind is a blank.

Comment from aryr

Excellent

My goodness, Sandra what a surprise ending to the chapter, well not really a surprise that Veronica and Mildred time travel but more so where they traveled to. It was interesting and refreshing to have the review of Mildred's appearance. For some reason, in my mind I pictured Ann as being older than ten after the five year span, but still it is great that the two ladies were blessed with such a talented child. She is talented whereas Michael is just being a boy. Great first chapter, I look forward to the many to come. Thanks for sharing.

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Hi, Alie. No, Ann was just a little girl of five in the last book, and Michael was three. Boys will always be boys. Ann, she was always the sensible one, and takes after her mother in that she can see and speak to ghosts. Mildred has shed her gray hair done up in a bun, and is a lot younger as you can tell now. The reason for the whereabouts of Veronica and Mildred will soon become clear. But I'm not telling!! Thank you, my friend for reading my first part, and for the lovely review. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by aryr on 12-Aug-2018

You are so welcome Sandra, it is an enjoyable start. Big hugs.

Comment from Ulla

Exceptional

Hi Sandra, It's great to see you back with book number three. An what a great start to the book as well. So Mildred has come back from the dead to live them. I love that. And now to suffragettes. Great!
Just one small thing. You changed tense in this sentence:The tingling sensation I get when his lips touch mine, always leaves me breathless. = The tingling sensation I got when his lips touched mine, always left me breathless.
Wonderful writing, Sandra. Hugs from a very hot Spain. Ulla xxx

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you so much, Ulla, for the lovely 6 stars and the helpful review. I'll copy and past it to my MS Word to make changes.
It's raining here, but still nicely warm, not stifling hot! Enjoy. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, Sandra. So good to see your writing a new book. Your imagery is outstanding throughout and in sso doing, brings your characters to life.

"she sat at her computer; her eyes squinted, and her tongue stuck out the side of her mouth in earnest concentration. She flicked away a wisp of her auburn curls that kept falling over her eyes before leaning closer to the screen. A hiss escaped her mouth as she sucked in a deep breath." (One can see her very clearly, my friend:

And here again: " I was about to say something else, when Michael came dashing in. His school tie skewwhiff, his blazer tied around his waist like a bit of old rag, and his hair looking like he'd been dragged through our blackberry bush! 'Oow, cakes! Yes please. I'll have one, too.' Ann looked at me as she sidled up to Michael to create a united front. "

One thing: I have never heard the term "skewwhiff," Is that old fashioned in the UK?

By the way are you still a fan of mine? LOL ereason I say is for the last seven chapters of my new book, I have heard nothing from you. are you not being notified of my posts?

Good write, my friend. Bob

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Hi Bob, 'skewwiff' is still very much alive and kicking in the UK, lol, and needed many times too. It means it's lopsided, not straight. I just like the sound of it.

I've been off site for a while now with family illnesses, and trying to get my 2nd book sorted. It takes a long time, as you know. I've popped in now and again, but missed loads of my fans work. I'm trying to catch up, but it's hard going at the moment. My brother was seriously ill for a long time. With that and other pressures, I have only been reading a few short works, and not very often. I've really missed a lot. I'm afraid I'm way behind with BeesPeas and her robot book. I'm going to have to buy it when it's finished. But, I see you are not too far ahead, so I'll most likely be able to catch up with yours. :))

Thank you so much for the lovely review on mine, my friend. I do appreciate it. Big hugs Sandra xx

reply by Mastery on 12-Aug-2018

I understand. :) Bob

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

Well it looks as if she will have her hands full helping the suffragettes. Well done, I saw no errors. I try to remember that many use UK English and I have corrected others on here, then felt bad as I forget about our differences. An arrogant American thinking everyone should talk like me. =} So glad to see you back. Rox

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

LOL, Rox, I was always being picked up, so now I put a little note in my authors notes. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this first chapter in my new book, my friend. I do appreciate it. Big hugs. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Ben Colder

Exceptional

I had no problem following this story. When reading where the person returned from the dead and appeared to the love ones. I thought about when Christ appeared to His decuples. An interesting read. Best to you Sandy.

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you, Chuck, for the lovely 6 stars. I'm really pleased you liked this beginning. Now, Veronica and Mildred will set off for their final (?) adventure, this time they will be together. I hope you enjoy it. Big hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

Yahoo! Story's back. You threw me for a loop with the very first paragraph. I thought, 'did I miss something? Didn't Mildred die?" LOL
Found a few things you might want to look at. Just suggestions for the most part.
This first chapter was quite explanatory, filling in gaps, and preparing the reader for the next adventure. I love that Mildred will be joining her.

her eyes squinted (comma) and her tongue stuck out the side of her mouth in earnest concentration.

Poor James, he was the one who'd had the biggest shock. (I think there should be a period after James, and a capital H for he as the start of a new sentence.)

wouldn't entertain having a dishwasher because she called them useless contraptions! (calling them useless isn't why she wouldn't have one...but because she CONSIDERED them useless)

my help, I was even worse. (as I was even worse)

enrol (enroll)

school-friend once, after (comma not needed)
'So long as your friends (comma) the 'powers that be' (comma) let me keep those memories, who cares about the rest?'

her dedication, music was her passion, (I would end sentence with dedication and start new sentence with music)

The hospital had new management (comma) and it had

He chuckled (comma) and then our lips met.

while sat (sitting) in our cottage garden in 1996.

boot laces up, (period, new sentence) and with that, she pushed the pole into my hands.


At the same time the woman knelt down, my jaw dropped open as I gaped at a road chock-a-block with women all dressed in long skirts or dresses. (awkward. I would rephrase this sentence)

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you soooooo much, Diane, for this very helpful review. I really appreciate the time you must have taken. I'm also delighted you are pleased they are back together. :)) Thanks, my friend. :)) xxx

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Did you know that woman received the right to vote in my state of South
Australia In 1894, and throughout Australia by 1902, I think the first in the world. I'm quite proud of that. Anyway I loved this imaginative episode With Mildred returning being Veronica's junior, only 28, then thrown back to 1896, 22 years before womens' vote, well done, blessings, Roy

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

No, I didn't know that, Roy, and I can quite understand how you would be proud. Researching this has been quite an eye-opener, I don't think women of today realise just how much we owe those brave women and just how much they went through to get us the right to vote. Thank you so much, my friend, for your lovely review and sharing a bit more information on this subject. I might use that. :)) Big hugs! Sandra xxx

reply by royowen on 12-Aug-2018

And apparently, you'd know of course, that even men who weren't land owners couldn't vote, , I think that in first election, there was a 3% active participation in Britain. And in 1918, women had to 30, and landowners as welI think, how ridiculous! Australian aboriginals weren't even considered...people until 1968, never mind the vote. Some writing fodder there Sandra, I'm digusted at myself for not knowing, How unjust are all these things! How can God possibly love us? But He does, that's unconditional, how good is that? Love Roy

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

Oh my! Now both women are joining in with time travel, but who's taking care of the children. I'm a little worried about that. LOL I can't wait for more.

How about we both enrol for a course on computing at the local college. (enroll??)

'I said, will you help me with this while I tie my boot laces up, and with that, she pushed the pole into my hands. (Missing ending quotation)

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you so much, Barbara, for the lovely six stars, and also for pointing out those errors. All corrected now. The children will be fine. It will be as it was in the last story, they will arrive back at the same time they left. It is so much more convenient! lol. Just think if we could actually do that, how much money we would have saved on child minders! :) LOL. Big hugs my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from alexisleech

Exceptional

What a great start to your next book. It hasn't been the same without at least one of your chapters to read every week! So, Mildred and Veronica are going to give us some insight as to what it was like before women got the vote - I can't wait to read on!
Alexis xxx

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you so very much, Alexis, for the shiny stars, and for the compliment! You missed me!! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this first part. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx