Silver Wings
A song brings back memories.28 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Oh, Jo!
I wasn't expecting THAT ending at all. Bless her sweet heart. And all the more so since you say this is based on real people. That is so tragic. And you've told it beautifully. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Oh, Jo!
I wasn't expecting THAT ending at all. Bless her sweet heart. And all the more so since you say this is based on real people. That is so tragic. And you've told it beautifully. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Yes, Robyn, this is a personal story of my husband and me. He is gone but every time I hear this song I think of this particular time in our lives when we danced to that song.
Comment from D. K. Mamula
Saying goodbye to the love of your life is so difficult and so many families, young and old, live these very moments every day. Your poem brought a tear to my eye. The significance of the song is obvious and marks a very poignant moment in the piece. Well-written and touching story of love never-ending. Thanks for sharing your work and good luck!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Saying goodbye to the love of your life is so difficult and so many families, young and old, live these very moments every day. Your poem brought a tear to my eye. The significance of the song is obvious and marks a very poignant moment in the piece. Well-written and touching story of love never-ending. Thanks for sharing your work and good luck!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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D.K, thank you for your kind comments and six stars, I think of the young families still giving up their young men and women to fight for our freedom. My husband is gone now but every time I hear this song I remember the night we danced after he had to fly back to base after we had been married only three days. He was my Jr. High thru Highschool sweetheart.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such heartbreak, but oh, so beautifully penned! May you always find sunlight in which to dance with silver wings!
Thank you for sharing your heart today and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Such heartbreak, but oh, so beautifully penned! May you always find sunlight in which to dance with silver wings!
Thank you for sharing your heart today and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Y.M Roger, thank you so much for your kind review of my very personal song and the good wishes for the contest.
Comment from bob cullen
Much too young to have that sort of grief piled upon you. And so long ago. Your ability to survive such heartbreak speaks volumes about you. And the memories, I'm sure will never leave, though you do move on.
Love the song. And I'm sure you've survived the years far better than old Merle did.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Much too young to have that sort of grief piled upon you. And so long ago. Your ability to survive such heartbreak speaks volumes about you. And the memories, I'm sure will never leave, though you do move on.
Love the song. And I'm sure you've survived the years far better than old Merle did.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Bob, I smiled when you spoke of "old Merle). He did live a rough and tumble kind of life but I think he is one of the greatest poets and songwriters of his time. He wrote for the common man/woman (not all flowery words ...kind of how I like to read and write my poems). :O) Yes, I did move on and re-marry.
Comment from Tootie
This is so beautiful and also sad. It brought tears to my eyes. Thank you so much for sharing this and I wish you the best in the contest. There is nothing I would suggest that needs changing. It flows perfectly. Blessings, Cathy
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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This is so beautiful and also sad. It brought tears to my eyes. Thank you so much for sharing this and I wish you the best in the contest. There is nothing I would suggest that needs changing. It flows perfectly. Blessings, Cathy
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Cathy, for your kind comments on my poem and good wishes for the contest.
Comment from Artasylum
So tragic and so poignant and so sorry for your loss,
I brought flowers and a fresh flag
Merle Haggard's voice from my phone sings
"Silver Wings". I hold myself and dance.
God Bless and Looking forward. yours, diana
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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So tragic and so poignant and so sorry for your loss,
I brought flowers and a fresh flag
Merle Haggard's voice from my phone sings
"Silver Wings". I hold myself and dance.
God Bless and Looking forward. yours, diana
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Diana, thank you, for reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from royowen
I don't know who these young folk were, and it doesn't state whether the young man returned or not, but poignantly, because danger possesses its own mystique, that of uncertainty, and when that love is barely consumated, even more so, well done a beautifully composed free verse and tribute to love's double circunpmstance. Well done Jo, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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I don't know who these young folk were, and it doesn't state whether the young man returned or not, but poignantly, because danger possesses its own mystique, that of uncertainty, and when that love is barely consumated, even more so, well done a beautifully composed free verse and tribute to love's double circunpmstance. Well done Jo, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Roy, for reviewing my story poem. It was written about my first husband. I still think of him every time I hear this song. No, he didn't die in Viet Nam ( a lot of my classmates did). He died of a sudden heart attack 5 years ago.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
So sad, so sweet, so romantic. You describe every intricate detail of your time together beautifully. This sounds like a love story and I enjoyed reading it. Well done Justjo66!
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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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So sad, so sweet, so romantic. You describe every intricate detail of your time together beautifully. This sounds like a love story and I enjoyed reading it. Well done Justjo66!
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Yes, Jeffrey, you are correct. It was written about my first husband. The event did happen. I still think of him every time I hear this song.