To See Beauty in the Sunrise
A Tribute to Heroes entry: The Ultimate Sacrifice28 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
Your poem should be published for all to read. I was unaware of this unusual ship that held prisoners. My father served three years of combat in WWII and he did come home. I applaud you for writing about your uncle.
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Your poem should be published for all to read. I was unaware of this unusual ship that held prisoners. My father served three years of combat in WWII and he did come home. I applaud you for writing about your uncle.
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hello Friends,
I am very honored by your exceptional rating and review.
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, what a great poem you've written to remember your relative. I'm sorry for your loss. I think the poem has a great flow and I saw no errors. I notice it is for the competition so best of luck with your entry and thanks for sharing it, Ana.
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Hello, what a great poem you've written to remember your relative. I'm sorry for your loss. I think the poem has a great flow and I saw no errors. I notice it is for the competition so best of luck with your entry and thanks for sharing it, Ana.
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hello Ana!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
this was a great heartfelt emotional driven piece, it came from the authors heart and into the readers, it was real and very relatable to many, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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this was a great heartfelt emotional driven piece, it came from the authors heart and into the readers, it was real and very relatable to many, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hello Phillip,
So very pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written suite of 5-7-5 poems telling of this brave soldier and his ending. You used very good descriptive words and beautiful art work. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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This is a very well written suite of 5-7-5 poems telling of this brave soldier and his ending. You used very good descriptive words and beautiful art work. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hello Teri!
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Contestant;
-first thing I found when I read your authors notes, which I usually do every poem, I noticed You had the word were in this line and you can take it out and write it as such: "Author's Notes: Sgt. William A. Kenel, U. S. Army Air Corps, was among the 12,000 American soldiers who {xWEREx} surrendered" Omit the 'were'.
-Your poem is so touching in the author's notes just blew me away of their heroism of these these men and such a man was definitely beyond the call of duty.
-Your simple free verse piece of poetry is one where a person can follow the enjambment very well, which makes the reading easy and fluid and also, makes it really easy to read and understand.
-Thanks for sharing such great touching tribute, written with great intensity and fervor at humbly honoring these men who have sacrificed everything for everyone
at a time and place with time didn't stand still, but dragged on exponentially.
-Take care and have a good one and good luck in the contest.
Alex
Alex
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Cheers, Contestant;
-first thing I found when I read your authors notes, which I usually do every poem, I noticed You had the word were in this line and you can take it out and write it as such: "Author's Notes: Sgt. William A. Kenel, U. S. Army Air Corps, was among the 12,000 American soldiers who {xWEREx} surrendered" Omit the 'were'.
-Your poem is so touching in the author's notes just blew me away of their heroism of these these men and such a man was definitely beyond the call of duty.
-Your simple free verse piece of poetry is one where a person can follow the enjambment very well, which makes the reading easy and fluid and also, makes it really easy to read and understand.
-Thanks for sharing such great touching tribute, written with great intensity and fervor at humbly honoring these men who have sacrificed everything for everyone
at a time and place with time didn't stand still, but dragged on exponentially.
-Take care and have a good one and good luck in the contest.
Alex
Alex
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Hello Alex!
Thank you for your thoughtful review. In truth, the soldiers ?were? surrendered by the officers in charge to their Japanese captors; they did not surrender themselves. That is what makes this situation even more poignant. Additionally, the 1700 prisoners could have been rescued by the other Japanese destroyers in the convoy that day; they refused to do so...
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All I must have not Relayed my message clearly I knew that they had been captured I'm sorry if I said that they gave themselves up. In no way that I think of thought that. But thanks for questioning and it's good to communicate.
Great writing, overall. Take care and have a good one. The Japanese were not a compassionate people or leaves their warriors weren't.
Alex
Comment from royowen
Well done with this. It's most gratifying to know a man, though suffering can still retain his faith and see beauty in the sunset. You've done well, sticking to the strict regime of 5/7/5 stanzas, and achieving this msrvellous entry in this contest. Well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Well done with this. It's most gratifying to know a man, though suffering can still retain his faith and see beauty in the sunset. You've done well, sticking to the strict regime of 5/7/5 stanzas, and achieving this msrvellous entry in this contest. Well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hello Roy,
So very pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
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My pleasure
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about a tribute to the heroes, and about enjoying to see beauty in the sunrise, remembering and imagining the spirit of the soldiers alongwith; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks about a tribute to the heroes, and about enjoying to see beauty in the sunrise, remembering and imagining the spirit of the soldiers alongwith; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hello Friend,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
Comment from meeshu
this is a very emotional piece and an historical one as well. I salute all who have served and died and you for telling their story on this Memorial Day..
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reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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this is a very emotional piece and an historical one as well. I salute all who have served and died and you for telling their story on this Memorial Day..
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Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hello meeshu,
So very pleased my words resonated with you...
Thank you!
