Cornbread Without Butter
I sure made a mistake in your sister's Easy-Bake.71 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
This is a great country song. You have a strong beat and a steady rhythm that is smooth and I can hear music clearly when I read your poem. I love the analogy to cornbread without butter, so creative and unique and fits a country song.
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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This is a great country song. You have a strong beat and a steady rhythm that is smooth and I can hear music clearly when I read your poem. I love the analogy to cornbread without butter, so creative and unique and fits a country song.
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Yes, Mermaid, many reviewers remarked that they can hear the rhythm when they read my lyrics. Thank you for your review and compliments.
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Yes, Mermaids, when I perform my song, I can hear the music of my invisible band consisting of guitars, fiddle, piano, and drums. After my song won FanStory Poem of the Month, I rushed to memorize it to perform at the San Francisco Free Folk Festival two days later. Here is the video. Thank you for your support.
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You are amazing! Elaine
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Thank you, Elaine, you are, too!
Comment from Boogienights
This is a great song! I think I found the right melody and sang the whole thing! I agree cornbread is nothing without butter! What a great analogy, life without love-cornbread without butter. Sounds right to me! Couldn't have said it better myself!
Now I'm craving cornbread, thanks a lot. ;) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-May-2018
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This is a great song! I think I found the right melody and sang the whole thing! I agree cornbread is nothing without butter! What a great analogy, life without love-cornbread without butter. Sounds right to me! Couldn't have said it better myself!
Now I'm craving cornbread, thanks a lot. ;) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 10-May-2018
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Yes, Boogienights, many reviewers have craved cornbread and sang this melody after reading my song. Glad you loved the analogy. Thank you for your delicious six star review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Great lyric. Wish I could hear the melody and rhythm. Too bad you can't record it. I don't know how to do that, but Dean does. Maybe you could ask him?
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Great lyric. Wish I could hear the melody and rhythm. Too bad you can't record it. I don't know how to do that, but Dean does. Maybe you could ask him?
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, Phyllis, for your generous review. I am submitting these lyrics to a couple of songwriting contests where I could win studio time with a band to make a demo.
Comment from victor 66
Yes Andre, it is much like a country western song. Rhymes well and has the right motif. Your analogy is good too. But in your poem/song, why did this lady leave? I know this is a creative work, but you seem like such a nice guy, why would the lady leave? Best wishes.
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Yes Andre, it is much like a country western song. Rhymes well and has the right motif. Your analogy is good too. But in your poem/song, why did this lady leave? I know this is a creative work, but you seem like such a nice guy, why would the lady leave? Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Ha, Victor, the clue as to why the lady left is in the line "I sure made a mistake in your sis' Easy-Bake." The man had an affair with his wife's younger sister. The song is purely fictional. Thank you for your revieww.
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I was just curious. A story/poem/ song comes from somewhere. Infidelity isn't new, it's just most likely being stupid. Thank you responding and best wishes.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Andre, what wonderful song lyrics resulted from that conversation where you talked for cross purposes. I really liked it. Such great lyrics for a Country Western song. Have you got the music as well? All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Hi Andre, what wonderful song lyrics resulted from that conversation where you talked for cross purposes. I really liked it. Such great lyrics for a Country Western song. Have you got the music as well? All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, Ulla, for your glowing review. I'm glad that miscommunication resulted in this song. No, I don't have music yet, but I'm entering my song into two songwriting contest where I could win studio time and musicians to create a demo. Thanks.
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Wow, that is exciting. I hope you'll be among the winners. It really has great lyrics. Good luck. :)
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Ulla, I just bought my first guitar yesterday and signed up for lessons to help with my composing and to allow me to perform.
Andre
Comment from Ava Wilson
I love this and agree that it would make great lyrics for a song. In fact, I caught myself singing the words as I read the poem. I love the analogy between the cornbread and butter and the relationship. Very nicely done!
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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I love this and agree that it would make great lyrics for a song. In fact, I caught myself singing the words as I read the poem. I love the analogy between the cornbread and butter and the relationship. Very nicely done!
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thank you, Ava, for your delicious review of my song analogy about relationships. Yes, I find myself singing this song all of the time myself. I kept it simple and most of it is "sung" with a talking voice instead of a singing voice. Thanks again.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute poem about the corn bread and butter. I love both of those things a lot. You used very good words and I love the art work. Made me hungry for corn bread and butter at 8 in the morning! Good job! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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This is a very cute poem about the corn bread and butter. I love both of those things a lot. You used very good words and I love the art work. Made me hungry for corn bread and butter at 8 in the morning! Good job! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Yes, Teri, I'm hungry, too. I'm glad you enjoyed my song. Thank you for your review and blessings.
Comment from dragonpoet
This could almost be a love song about a couple from the South. It uses cornbread and butter as a metaphor of how well they were together before he made the mistake that broke them up. It sounds as if he cheated on her with her sister.
How horrible.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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This could almost be a love song about a couple from the South. It uses cornbread and butter as a metaphor of how well they were together before he made the mistake that broke them up. It sounds as if he cheated on her with her sister.
How horrible.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Yes, Joan, it is horrible that he cheated on her with her sister. Thank you for your delicious review.
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No problem.
Joan
Comment from Harry Smith
The picture looks delicious by the way. The picture really complimented the poem that is exceptionally well written with lots and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed and read it twice.
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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The picture looks delicious by the way. The picture really complimented the poem that is exceptionally well written with lots and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed and read it twice.
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, Harry, for your delcious review. I wrote the song first in a day, and then I found a picture. I almost never base a song or poem on a picture unless I had photographed it myself. Thanks again.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Don't worry, Andre, my friend.
You'll get used to being alone after awhile.
In fact, you might even grow to like it, as I have.
I don't mind being alone, but I sure do hate being lonely.
Cute poem, very well penned.
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Don't worry, Andre, my friend.
You'll get used to being alone after awhile.
In fact, you might even grow to like it, as I have.
I don't mind being alone, but I sure do hate being lonely.
Cute poem, very well penned.
~Dean
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thank you, Dean, for your delicious, six star review about this lonely man. Good to see you back.
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I'll be in and out, Andre.
Kinda like a punch drunk boxer in a particularly nasty fight.
You're more than welcome.
~Dean
