Ashes in the Wind
Short poem contest entry51 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
You always finish with a soft touch, a touch of delicacy, and that keeps all things optimistic.
Bravo.
Lovely write.
Have a beautiful day.
RG
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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You always finish with a soft touch, a touch of delicacy, and that keeps all things optimistic.
Bravo.
Lovely write.
Have a beautiful day.
RG
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend!
So pleased you enjoy my offering.
Thank you ever so much for your thoughtful and perceptive review.
And for that optimistic trait...guilty! :)
diane
Comment from zanya
Oh yes how very true - our time and our life span on our life journey are so short 'How precarious'-well portrayed here within the strict confines of the Short poem
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Oh yes how very true - our time and our life span on our life journey are so short 'How precarious'-well portrayed here within the strict confines of the Short poem
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello zanya,
Thank you for your positive and complimentary review!
So pleased you enjoyed!
diane
Comment from doggymad
Excellent message portrayed in such few words. It is so true that we are all but precarious collections of dust as will return to that state.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Excellent message portrayed in such few words. It is so true that we are all but precarious collections of dust as will return to that state.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Freda,
So pleased that you enjoyed!
Thank you for your thoughtful and positive review~
diane
Comment from Zue65
I like short poems and I marvel at how authors can pack in so much message in so few words which you have done in this write. Thanks for sharing such an amazing piece. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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I like short poems and I marvel at how authors can pack in so much message in so few words which you have done in this write. Thanks for sharing such an amazing piece. Keep writing.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
The short poems are, indeed, challenging!
Thank you for your thoughtful and positive review!
diane
Comment from Rubylou
Hello,
Your short poem made me feel the potential a person has well as the frailty of the human being.
Each day is such a gift. Yet we , at times, take such an experience for granted.
Your last line. "Ashes in the wind..." really impacted me. In my mind I envisioned an urn being emptied of its ashes, perhaps on a beach or off the bow of a ship just being carried off by the breeze 'in the wind...'
Really powerful words and strong message as well.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello,
Your short poem made me feel the potential a person has well as the frailty of the human being.
Each day is such a gift. Yet we , at times, take such an experience for granted.
Your last line. "Ashes in the wind..." really impacted me. In my mind I envisioned an urn being emptied of its ashes, perhaps on a beach or off the bow of a ship just being carried off by the breeze 'in the wind...'
Really powerful words and strong message as well.
Rubylou
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Rubylou!
So pleased you enjoyed by poetic offering.
Thank you for your thoughtful review.
diane
Comment from N. Rabwar
I love how you say so much with so few words. The line "Ashes in the wind is beautiful. I enjoyed the allusion to the fragility of life and the intranscience of everything.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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I love how you say so much with so few words. The line "Ashes in the wind is beautiful. I enjoyed the allusion to the fragility of life and the intranscience of everything.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello N.Rabwar,
I find these short poems to be so challenging to pen!
Thank you for your thoughtful and positive review...
diane
Comment from RodG
I really like this four line poem which is a sage aphorism, too.
Clever use of two similar-sounding words--"precious" and "precarious."
A strong entry in this contest. Good luck! Rod
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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I really like this four line poem which is a sage aphorism, too.
Clever use of two similar-sounding words--"precious" and "precarious."
A strong entry in this contest. Good luck! Rod
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Rod,
So pleased you enjoyed.
I find these short poems to be really challenging to pen!
Thank you!
diane
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My pleasure. Rod
Comment from Joy Graham
The picture is so sad. Makes me wonder how the birdie got speared like that? The way the little legs just hang down like that makes me feel like crying. You have exactly twenty syllables there when I count them on my fingers. I remember my grade one teacher forbid us to use our fingers for math, so I think of her when I'm being a rule breaker and counting with my fingers :) I like your first two lines the best. Best wishes to you in this contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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The picture is so sad. Makes me wonder how the birdie got speared like that? The way the little legs just hang down like that makes me feel like crying. You have exactly twenty syllables there when I count them on my fingers. I remember my grade one teacher forbid us to use our fingers for math, so I think of her when I'm being a rule breaker and counting with my fingers :) I like your first two lines the best. Best wishes to you in this contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Joy!
The artwork is really disturbing!
And these short poems are so challenging for me to pen!
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from June Sargent
So true - we are but dust blown away by the next strong wind. If we do manage to make an impression, let's hope it's a good one that will last the test of time. Very nice entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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So true - we are but dust blown away by the next strong wind. If we do manage to make an impression, let's hope it's a good one that will last the test of time. Very nice entry for the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello June!
So pleased you enjoyed my poem.
Thank you so much!
diane
Comment from The kurlman
Mrs. KT, you hit the 20 syllables perfect and just like the Wizard of Oz, your words made us think. Good job once again. I won't embarrass you with 6 stars only 5. The kurlman
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Mrs. KT, you hit the 20 syllables perfect and just like the Wizard of Oz, your words made us think. Good job once again. I won't embarrass you with 6 stars only 5. The kurlman
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Oh my goodness!
I am just so pleased that you enjoy my verse!
Thank you for your thoughtful verse!
diane
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You are welcome, The kurlman