Grammy's Memoirs 2018
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "A Valentine's Story"Bits and pieces of my life for my grandchildren
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Comment from MelB
This is a great Valentine's story, Patty. I was hoping it was non-fiction. I was going to ask if the guy ever found out it was you. I thoroughly enjoyed reading!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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This is a great Valentine's story, Patty. I was hoping it was non-fiction. I was going to ask if the guy ever found out it was you. I thoroughly enjoyed reading!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi there;
Eventually, we did meet, and we dated for quite some time. Knowing Patrick was one of the best and worst things in my life,
But for a few sweet weeks, it was the most lovely story...
~patty~
Comment from damommy
A beautiful story about a young girl's infatuation with a stranger. Happily, he went along with the scenario. I wonder if she ever met his face to face, or did she move on to others?
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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A beautiful story about a young girl's infatuation with a stranger. Happily, he went along with the scenario. I wonder if she ever met his face to face, or did she move on to others?
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi there;
Eventually, we did meet, and we dated for quite some time. Knowing Patrick was one of the best and worst things in my life,
But for a few sweet weeks, it was the most lovely story...
~patty~
Comment from Dean Kuch
Happy Sunday, Patty.
By the time Valentine's Day rolled around, I was quite smitten with this stranger. I had no idea how old he was. I just knew he wasn't one of the bothersome boys I went to school with. He was a man, and he thought I was beautiful.... Ya know, the way Pat acted towards the young gal on the ledge was a lot like serial killer Ted Bundy operated, Patty.
Charm 'em, get 'em to trust you, then do 'em in.
Good story, I noticed no errors.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Happy Sunday, Patty.
By the time Valentine's Day rolled around, I was quite smitten with this stranger. I had no idea how old he was. I just knew he wasn't one of the bothersome boys I went to school with. He was a man, and he thought I was beautiful.... Ya know, the way Pat acted towards the young gal on the ledge was a lot like serial killer Ted Bundy operated, Patty.
Charm 'em, get 'em to trust you, then do 'em in.
Good story, I noticed no errors.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi, Dean;
I never thought it about that way, but you are right. Patrick didn't turn out to be a serial killer, but he was a big part of the few years leading to my exodus from New Jersey.
Of course, then I ended up living right across the sound from where Bundy started his rampage.
~patty~
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See what I mean?
~Dean
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
How sweet. Why didn't you let him see you and thank you? Could you see better from down there? That must be it. Also, I got scared just reading this when you said you sat on a second story window ledge. I don't it could wide enough for me even to put my hand out the window and touch it! Yet you perched there! Wow. What did your mom and/or dad say? They didn't think it was dangerous?
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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How sweet. Why didn't you let him see you and thank you? Could you see better from down there? That must be it. Also, I got scared just reading this when you said you sat on a second story window ledge. I don't it could wide enough for me even to put my hand out the window and touch it! Yet you perched there! Wow. What did your mom and/or dad say? They didn't think it was dangerous?
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi there;
Eventually, we did meet, and we dated for quite some time. Knowing Patrick was one of the best and worst things in my life,
But for a few sweet weeks, it was the most lovely story...
~patty~
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He dated you? A fifteen-year-old? I guess rules are different in Spain.
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I wasn't in Spain. I was in New Jersey. He was only eighteen, and my mother wasn't the most watchful parent. She thought the whole thing was great.
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New Jersey? I'm keeping you in Spain. It's far more romantic. :)
Comment from Rasmine
Patty,
I thought this was a continuation of the story, oh well. This is a really nice surprise. I remember this guy in school taking my hand, I should write about it.
Hey, take care,
Nome
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Patty,
I thought this was a continuation of the story, oh well. This is a really nice surprise. I remember this guy in school taking my hand, I should write about it.
Hey, take care,
Nome
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi there;
Eventually, we did meet, and we dated for quite some time. Knowing Patrick was one of the best and worst things in my life,
But for a few sweet weeks, it was the most lovely story...
~patty~
Comment from Dan Diego
Awwww. You went for the heartstrings on this one, MP1029. I like how you twisted the end a little bit to throw off reader predictability. By making your MC fifteen years old, you add a touch of innocence to the story. And making your boy a little older does allow for us to see a hint of loneliness. I suppose the sequel will put her in college and him as a professor. I bet he keeps those valentines forever. Great little story here. No errors.
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Awwww. You went for the heartstrings on this one, MP1029. I like how you twisted the end a little bit to throw off reader predictability. By making your MC fifteen years old, you add a touch of innocence to the story. And making your boy a little older does allow for us to see a hint of loneliness. I suppose the sequel will put her in college and him as a professor. I bet he keeps those valentines forever. Great little story here. No errors.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi there;
Eventually, we did meet, and we dated for quite some time. Knowing Patrick was one of the best and worst things in my life,
But for a few sweet weeks, it was the most lovely story...
~patty~
Comment from apky
Congratulations for that impressive "trophy", Patty. I think you jolly well deserved it, having known how well you write for a full year now.
This story was equally brilliant and made me think of that age when a look from a young man who acted friendly planted a plethora of things inside our young hearts and body in general.
When we could dream and schme in all innocence.
I aalso love the artwork - nothing beats purple for love.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Congratulations for that impressive "trophy", Patty. I think you jolly well deserved it, having known how well you write for a full year now.
This story was equally brilliant and made me think of that age when a look from a young man who acted friendly planted a plethora of things inside our young hearts and body in general.
When we could dream and schme in all innocence.
I aalso love the artwork - nothing beats purple for love.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi there;
Eventually, we did meet, and we dated for quite some time. Knowing Patrick was one of the best and worst things in my life,
But for a few sweet weeks, it was the most lovely story...
~patty~
Comment from Bichon
A lovely story, Patty. Maybe he is even reading this right now, who knows? Still, it was good that Valentines was special for both of you. Your names even are similar, haha!
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A lovely story, Patty. Maybe he is even reading this right now, who knows? Still, it was good that Valentines was special for both of you. Your names even are similar, haha!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi there;
Eventually, we did meet, and we dated for quite some time. Knowing Patrick was one of the best and worst things in my life,
But for a few sweet weeks, it was the most lovely story...
~patty~
Comment from c_lucas
Young love is very inventive, but those days seldom lasts. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very romantic read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Young love is very inventive, but those days seldom lasts. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very romantic read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi there;
Eventually, we did meet, and we dated for quite some time. Knowing Patrick was one of the best and worst things in my life,
But for a few sweet weeks, it was the most lovely story...
~patty~
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Good for you.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The verbal structure of the story reminisces the nocturnal adventures of a fifteen year old girl, whose placement of valentine cards in a stranger's mail box eventually earned her the love of the latter.
The work highlights her sitting on the perch of their building: to stare at the stars in the dark of the night; and to spy on their neighbours; an act which culminated in her love affair with Pat.
Outstanding work! Keep the flag flying!
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The verbal structure of the story reminisces the nocturnal adventures of a fifteen year old girl, whose placement of valentine cards in a stranger's mail box eventually earned her the love of the latter.
The work highlights her sitting on the perch of their building: to stare at the stars in the dark of the night; and to spy on their neighbours; an act which culminated in her love affair with Pat.
Outstanding work! Keep the flag flying!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi there;
Eventually, we did meet, and we dated for quite some time. Knowing Patrick was one of the best and worst things in my life,
But for a few sweet weeks, it was the most lovely story...
~patty~
THANK YOU so much for the glittering sixth star!
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Remain Blessed!
