And Once Upon A Journey Made
A seaman looks back on memories.36 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
Sounds like your heart was at peace and you claimed your rightful place upon the sea. I am not a sailor but I found so much peace as I watch and listen to the ocean waves. Aging can't take the memory away.
Smiles, Carol
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Sounds like your heart was at peace and you claimed your rightful place upon the sea. I am not a sailor but I found so much peace as I watch and listen to the ocean waves. Aging can't take the memory away.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 14-May-2024
Comment from Enrico Langfordino
Wonderful repetition Easy. Just so beautifully balanced. You sure have other shores to find. 'I feel the surge of heat within'. Returning to find your wonderful verse u changed.
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Wonderful repetition Easy. Just so beautifully balanced. You sure have other shores to find. 'I feel the surge of heat within'. Returning to find your wonderful verse u changed.
Comment Written 14-May-2024
Comment from Wendy G
Reflections about age and ageing, and life's experiences and love, and the end of the life journey. I like the parallel with a sailing experience and imagery from the sea. Well written.
Wendy
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Reflections about age and ageing, and life's experiences and love, and the end of the life journey. I like the parallel with a sailing experience and imagery from the sea. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-May-2024
Comment from Esther Brown
Sounds like you are a man of the sea. Sailboat? Where did you travel? Made me think random thoughts of the "glory days". Meaning when I was young, skinnier, blonde and I took life lightly. I love riding the Harley with my hubby. The wind in my face, thoughts wandering, the joy of feeling free and without worry. Lovely poem. Thanks for sharing. Esther
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Sounds like you are a man of the sea. Sailboat? Where did you travel? Made me think random thoughts of the "glory days". Meaning when I was young, skinnier, blonde and I took life lightly. I love riding the Harley with my hubby. The wind in my face, thoughts wandering, the joy of feeling free and without worry. Lovely poem. Thanks for sharing. Esther
Comment Written 14-May-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your rhyme and rhythm were excellent in this poem, as they normally are, but I think I noticed it more this time, for some reason. Thank you for reposting it. I enjoyed reading.
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Your rhyme and rhythm were excellent in this poem, as they normally are, but I think I noticed it more this time, for some reason. Thank you for reposting it. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 13-May-2024
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent exciting quatrains with perfect rhyme and rhythm....nice flow about memories of the past. Good use of poetic devices.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
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Excellent exciting quatrains with perfect rhyme and rhythm....nice flow about memories of the past. Good use of poetic devices.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
Comment Written 13-May-2024
Comment from ameen786
A beautifully crafted poem reflecting life's memories sailing through different stages in rich wordings and phrasings; excellent rhyming with superb flow.
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A beautifully crafted poem reflecting life's memories sailing through different stages in rich wordings and phrasings; excellent rhyming with superb flow.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
Comment from Pantygynt
You have it seem to have a natural affinity with rhyme and metre that so many on this site struggle to achieve and frequently fail. As a teacher in this subject I struggle sometimes to see why they cannot "feel" the rhythm of what they write. The rhyme they generally find quite easy, but an established metre often falls from grace in the second or third stanza and they don't seem to be aware of that.
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You have it seem to have a natural affinity with rhyme and metre that so many on this site struggle to achieve and frequently fail. As a teacher in this subject I struggle sometimes to see why they cannot "feel" the rhythm of what they write. The rhyme they generally find quite easy, but an established metre often falls from grace in the second or third stanza and they don't seem to be aware of that.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
Comment from Debbie Pope
I have read your first two lines over and over--such a poignant image. I gave you six stars, because those beautiful words made my heart ache. I appreciate the cleverness and beauty in poetry, but your words made me feel something. Oh I wish that I could do that with my words. Thanks for repeating those lines at the end. So appropriate.
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I have read your first two lines over and over--such a poignant image. I gave you six stars, because those beautiful words made my heart ache. I appreciate the cleverness and beauty in poetry, but your words made me feel something. Oh I wish that I could do that with my words. Thanks for repeating those lines at the end. So appropriate.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
Comment from His Grayness
I found this to be a very delightful and uplifting work of great rhythm and perfect rhyme, so there is nothing I can offer to make this work any better in any way. My thanks to this author for a really enjoyable work. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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I found this to be a very delightful and uplifting work of great rhythm and perfect rhyme, so there is nothing I can offer to make this work any better in any way. My thanks to this author for a really enjoyable work. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018