Comment from Dan Diego

Excellent

Nicely done. Beginning, middle, and end in 100 words. That's hard to do. I didn't see anything to fix in there. Good luck. I think the judges will like this.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks, Dan

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the '100 Word Flash Fiction' writing prompt.
Well written with a bit of a weird story and twist.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks, Sharon

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

I didn't actually count the words, but the length looks right. Yep, a wannabe tough guy would be into posturing and playing with his pistol, with predictable results. Excellent.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks, LIJ

Comment from damommy

Excellent

What an idiot. He should have practice his tough guy routine with a water pistol. lol

Great flash fiction. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thank you, da, for the kind review. Bill

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

OMG, Bill, although that was an awful thing to have happened, I couldn't help it, I choked on my cup of coffee, laughing my head off! That really was funny! I think it's a wonderful contest entry, well done, my friend and good luck! xx Sandra

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks, Sandra, for the great review. Bill

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

This reminds me of a scene in Plan Nine from Outer Space (a classic bad movie) where someone does that with his gun. It doesn't go off, tho, so your story is more exciting. :)

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks, Phyllis, for the great review. Bill

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

Hi there Bill
A good flash fiction with a surprise ending. I enjoyed reading itand a good contender for the competition.
I wish you good luck. Best wishes Jen.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks, Jen, for the great review. Bill

Comment from James H. Oldfield

Excellent

Excellent, and a very good twist, at the end.

Nothing at all to fault, a very vivid scene packed into the much shorter form..

Great job, and best of luck in the contest.

Take care.

-James

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thank you, James, for the the stellar review. Bill

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a sad write, suicide I heard was on the increase as many can't cope with the face pace of society or they have troubled minds. Short, but resonating words, a self indulgent sacrifice, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thank you, Dolly. It was an accident, with the irony being in the last line.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Um. [pained laugh] OK. He's fulfilled his own prophecy, I guess. Was he rehearsing for a different encounter? Not sure if you wanted to have all the extra space in:
"mirror in front

of him."


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 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

I went back to the edit and it was spaced correctly, so -- yah. Thanks for giving this a peek.