Comment from apky

Excellent

Well done, Michael, with no spags, but a lot to mull over.
I'd advise the poor fellow to keep a clear head next time around.
Or at least he should if he wants to live up to the expectations he has presumable set for himself.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017

Okay ... I'm just afraid that I imagined the whole scenario and Rosie Perez didn't even show up. LOL!!!!

Thanks so much. mike

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Poor, poor deranged man. Blackouts/dreams do have a way of tending to be so real. It is rare to remember what happens in a blackout, though. All of these wondrous images will be gone.

Well penned and thought-provoking without any SPAGS.

Thank you for sharing,

~patty~

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017

HA! Thanks, Patty. It's either deranged or live the ACTUAL life I have before me. LOL
Thanks so much, mike :))

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

Heh, heh, you're dreaming, lol. Nice work on this piece, Mikey. My only suggestion would be to try to find a way to incorporate her voice into the piece. It's so distinct and I didn't quite feel it.

Nice work,
Russell

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017

AHHH! Great tip. I tried to do that a tad now. Totally, must have the voice, yes! LOL Thanks a million. :)) mike

reply by F. Wehr3 on 24-Sep-2017

Just checked up on what you changed. I think you got it!