Selections For Book Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "After Birth of a Nation"possible selections for inclusion in book project
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Comment from Fridayauthor
Certainly harsh and I'm sure not everyone will agree with some expressed opinions. However, I have to applaud the cleverness of the construction and the work it must have taken to create this satire.
This entry is definitely thought-provoking as well as written with obvious talent.
Thank you.
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Certainly harsh and I'm sure not everyone will agree with some expressed opinions. However, I have to applaud the cleverness of the construction and the work it must have taken to create this satire.
This entry is definitely thought-provoking as well as written with obvious talent.
Thank you.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
Comment from trimple
Dear, Michael
I have just finished a bonkers poem for this contest of yours, but after reading this most extraordinary piece of writing.. I wish I hadn't bothered. lol
Gutsy, honest, satirical and down right brilliant.
From the forefathers of America to the current; mind boggling Pratt that sits on the prezzy throne. The history of racial divide is ever apparent.
A winner for sure :)
You make me want to be a better writer.
Much love and kindest regards
tracey
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Dear, Michael
I have just finished a bonkers poem for this contest of yours, but after reading this most extraordinary piece of writing.. I wish I hadn't bothered. lol
Gutsy, honest, satirical and down right brilliant.
From the forefathers of America to the current; mind boggling Pratt that sits on the prezzy throne. The history of racial divide is ever apparent.
A winner for sure :)
You make me want to be a better writer.
Much love and kindest regards
tracey
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
Comment from hifein
it's very incisive and powerful and clever and poetic too. too bad the times necessitate a poem of this nature. i agree - one side only when bad intent is so clear!! best, hi
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it's very incisive and powerful and clever and poetic too. too bad the times necessitate a poem of this nature. i agree - one side only when bad intent is so clear!! best, hi
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
Comment from nbonner
Wow, is all I can really say. I'm not sure I really understand what it's trying to say (and I am an American). I decided not to take offense to this, so after all is said this was a well written poem. Thanks for sharing and best wishes on the contest
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Wow, is all I can really say. I'm not sure I really understand what it's trying to say (and I am an American). I decided not to take offense to this, so after all is said this was a well written poem. Thanks for sharing and best wishes on the contest
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Michael,
Even with satire, you make many valid points. I understood every thing in your poem as I was reading it. Our shared history with all people will never change. But it is up to the present ones to keep the fight for freedom for all in the forefront in the minds of those wishing for peaceful change.
I agree with you about the hate groups/thugs who want only to promote their hatred & keep the country, OUR COUNTRY, in turmoil.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
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Michael,
Even with satire, you make many valid points. I understood every thing in your poem as I was reading it. Our shared history with all people will never change. But it is up to the present ones to keep the fight for freedom for all in the forefront in the minds of those wishing for peaceful change.
I agree with you about the hate groups/thugs who want only to promote their hatred & keep the country, OUR COUNTRY, in turmoil.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
Comment from Bill Schott
Well, Michael, I just don't know how to review this. I see by your notes that this is a gathering of historic moments brought into this rambling accusation that white supremacy was the challenge to freedom along the road of the American legacy. Since I'm white (a one-size-fits-all description apparently), and I feel no need to excuse myself or justify anything that has happened along the way to the present, I find this poem offensive and patronizing at the same time. As I read it a second time, I discern either a piece written while imbibing on too much (or just enough) vino and Blue Dream, or a real desire to create an eclectic, yet themed poem, akin to T.S. Eliot's The Wasteland.
So, if the purpose of this work is to create interest and arouse the reader to connect or reject what is here, you have. That seems to be the goal of every writer, unless he/she just types things out in a chemically enhanced haze and presses send.
Happy day.
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Well, Michael, I just don't know how to review this. I see by your notes that this is a gathering of historic moments brought into this rambling accusation that white supremacy was the challenge to freedom along the road of the American legacy. Since I'm white (a one-size-fits-all description apparently), and I feel no need to excuse myself or justify anything that has happened along the way to the present, I find this poem offensive and patronizing at the same time. As I read it a second time, I discern either a piece written while imbibing on too much (or just enough) vino and Blue Dream, or a real desire to create an eclectic, yet themed poem, akin to T.S. Eliot's The Wasteland.
So, if the purpose of this work is to create interest and arouse the reader to connect or reject what is here, you have. That seems to be the goal of every writer, unless he/she just types things out in a chemically enhanced haze and presses send.
Happy day.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
Comment from gsuarez
This, in my opinion, is a brilliant piece of satirical writing. Each segment is well selected as it leads to our current day affairs. Word choice is superb: "What lives in the depths of souls does not die, it waits to be unleashed" ... Bravo !!!
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This, in my opinion, is a brilliant piece of satirical writing. Each segment is well selected as it leads to our current day affairs. Word choice is superb: "What lives in the depths of souls does not die, it waits to be unleashed" ... Bravo !!!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
Comment from robyn corum
Mikey,
As a Southerner and a proud citizen of the US, I have to admit I took a bit of offense to this write, satire or not. I'm afraid that too many people don't understand the true causes of the Civil War and simply blame it all on Slavery - which drives me crazy, actually. One of my favorite and most-petted pet peeves. This ideology seems to appeal to most Americans - especially those of the North -- and it's simply not true.
I do get the point of your post and I agree wholeheartedly with it, in basis. Just not the parts concerning the Civil War and Dixie -- where I proudly live -- and feel that I may have researched these things a bit more deeply, not just taking the common thread of thoughts for my own. Don't take this wrong, just my comments. Another opinion?
Hugs, anyway-- Still friends?
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Mikey,
As a Southerner and a proud citizen of the US, I have to admit I took a bit of offense to this write, satire or not. I'm afraid that too many people don't understand the true causes of the Civil War and simply blame it all on Slavery - which drives me crazy, actually. One of my favorite and most-petted pet peeves. This ideology seems to appeal to most Americans - especially those of the North -- and it's simply not true.
I do get the point of your post and I agree wholeheartedly with it, in basis. Just not the parts concerning the Civil War and Dixie -- where I proudly live -- and feel that I may have researched these things a bit more deeply, not just taking the common thread of thoughts for my own. Don't take this wrong, just my comments. Another opinion?
Hugs, anyway-- Still friends?
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
Comment from robina1978
Nice photo of a crowd that complements your poem very well. It is very long. I am pleased that you wrote it is satire. The tune in it is great. Best wishes for the contest.
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Nice photo of a crowd that complements your poem very well. It is very long. I am pleased that you wrote it is satire. The tune in it is great. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
Comment from apky
Although I agree that this is a wonderful satire, I'll never pretend to be able to grasp the American (USA) mentality. A nation so great (in size) and yet so fickle. I can even roar with laughter at the absurdity of their Think Tank capacity yet end up shaking my head at the o-called human condition that you point at in your sature.
And one up for you for saying it/writing it your way without any regard to any other opinion but your own. That's not just courageous in this day and age, but also honest.
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Although I agree that this is a wonderful satire, I'll never pretend to be able to grasp the American (USA) mentality. A nation so great (in size) and yet so fickle. I can even roar with laughter at the absurdity of their Think Tank capacity yet end up shaking my head at the o-called human condition that you point at in your sature.
And one up for you for saying it/writing it your way without any regard to any other opinion but your own. That's not just courageous in this day and age, but also honest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017