I'm Not a Rock. I'm But an Island.
Do rocks feel pain?49 total reviews
Comment from Poetofheart2013
What a really good job at redo that song. I think you made even better.
I can tell you worked really hard on it
Great Job
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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What a really good job at redo that song. I think you made even better.
I can tell you worked really hard on it
Great Job
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Naw, I did not make it better. Who can top Simon and Garfunkel? I only personalized their song. Thank you for your review and compliments.
Comment from Irish Rain
I absolutely love this song!!! Your remake of it is superb, I actually FELT your words!! A most wonderful entry for this contest!!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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I absolutely love this song!!! Your remake of it is superb, I actually FELT your words!! A most wonderful entry for this contest!!! Blessings...
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Irish Rain, for your review and contest well wishes of my remake. I am glad you for my words as I felt them.
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You'e most welcome!!
Comment from Pullmanspb
What a lovely, loving, and interesting take on the original. You kept the metre, the rhythms, and I could hear the song as I read it.
Great job.
Steven
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What a lovely, loving, and interesting take on the original. You kept the metre, the rhythms, and I could hear the song as I read it.
Great job.
Steven
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Steven, for your generous, six star review. I am glad I brought these lyrics rewrite and my video performance out of the dark and into the light.
Comment from Oatmeal
Sis Cat,
Your arrangement looks very nice. Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. The flow is smooth. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible.
There was nothing wrong that I could tell.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Sis Cat,
Your arrangement looks very nice. Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. The flow is smooth. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible.
There was nothing wrong that I could tell.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Oatmeal, for your encouraging, supportive review. I appreciate it.
Comment from write hand blue
I've always liked Simon and Garfunkel, especially this song. You paint a rather sad scene with this character that calls himself an island. All alone he hides behind his description. The tale weaved around the song lyrics is clever and makes for a good read. Good luck in the contest...
~Mel~
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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I've always liked Simon and Garfunkel, especially this song. You paint a rather sad scene with this character that calls himself an island. All alone he hides behind his description. The tale weaved around the song lyrics is clever and makes for a good read. Good luck in the contest...
~Mel~
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Mel, for your heartfelt, supportive review of my rewrite. I appreciate it.
Comment from Analie Shepherd
This is fun! One of my favorite songs actually.
I have an observation. At times you seemed to let yourself go into something slightly painful and sad ... but then you would be flippant again. Are you an island? Are you shielded in your thin fragile armor, trying to pretend you feel no pain?
Thanks for sharing this ... as I said, it was fun.
Blessings, Analie
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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This is fun! One of my favorite songs actually.
I have an observation. At times you seemed to let yourself go into something slightly painful and sad ... but then you would be flippant again. Are you an island? Are you shielded in your thin fragile armor, trying to pretend you feel no pain?
Thanks for sharing this ... as I said, it was fun.
Blessings, Analie
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Analie, for your observant review. The flippancy is a ruse to hide pain and loneliness like that "Tears of a Clown" song. Thanks again.
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Well, I read your lyrics and watched your video ... I am here to tell you that I think you are a pretty special guy! Reach out, trust others to see what I see .. in the few short moments of knowing you. Share your pain. Others will share theirs with you .. and voila! Friendship and connection!
Blessings, Analie
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Thank you, Analie. I had kept my rewrite hidden in my diary for thirty-five years and I have never performed it before an audience. It's just too painful, although I try to laugh through it. The lyrics resonated with many people. Thanks again.
Comment from Mark Valentine
I think that parodies have to depart from the original in some way. Yours does that, it seems to me, in a subtle, but important way. The original seems to equate rock and island "I am a Rock. I am an island." They are both isolated and alone.
Yours takes s different POV - a rock, but NOT an island. The difference being, )I think) that an island is isolated by definition, and not by choice. Maybe the island would love to have company and hates being alone. Not sure if that's what you had in mind, but that's how I interpreted it.
In any case, you chose a great song as a template, and your new lyrics fit it beautifully.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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I think that parodies have to depart from the original in some way. Yours does that, it seems to me, in a subtle, but important way. The original seems to equate rock and island "I am a Rock. I am an island." They are both isolated and alone.
Yours takes s different POV - a rock, but NOT an island. The difference being, )I think) that an island is isolated by definition, and not by choice. Maybe the island would love to have company and hates being alone. Not sure if that's what you had in mind, but that's how I interpreted it.
In any case, you chose a great song as a template, and your new lyrics fit it beautifully.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Mark, for your observant review. Yes, my departure from the original is subtle and your interpretation is as correct as anyone's. Thanks again.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Great modification You know I accepted the face that as much as I want to love to be around other people, in some essential way, I am something of a loner. Thanks for sharing this piece. Hope all is well with you.
Bill~
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Great modification You know I accepted the face that as much as I want to love to be around other people, in some essential way, I am something of a loner. Thanks for sharing this piece. Hope all is well with you.
Bill~
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Bill, for your review. Yes, sometimes I want to be alone just to write. Thanks. Things are well with me.
Comment from estory
It's a great poem of loneliness, of isolation. you paint a vivid picture of someone up in their room, watching the activity and the relationships outside of the window, listening to music, unable to open the door, to risk the pain, and kind of being stuck in place. I like the ending. You open up that rock, and that island, into the realm of feelings in those last two lines. I think the short lines offer good tension for this, the repetitions hammer home the feeling of not being able to escape from the isolation estory
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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It's a great poem of loneliness, of isolation. you paint a vivid picture of someone up in their room, watching the activity and the relationships outside of the window, listening to music, unable to open the door, to risk the pain, and kind of being stuck in place. I like the ending. You open up that rock, and that island, into the realm of feelings in those last two lines. I think the short lines offer good tension for this, the repetitions hammer home the feeling of not being able to escape from the isolation estory
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Yes, estory, that was me back then. Good analysis of my rewrite of Simon and Garfunkel's song. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Andre,
I am not a rock, I am an island.....powerful words. I love the song.....Good choice for the contest. Your performance was outstanding and funny sometimes.... :) I loved it. Good job sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Hello, Andre,
I am not a rock, I am an island.....powerful words. I love the song.....Good choice for the contest. Your performance was outstanding and funny sometimes.... :) I loved it. Good job sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Gypsy, for your review and encouragement. My rewrite has been sitting around in my diary for thirty-five years. I won't win, but it is better to share my rewrite than keep it hidden.
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Yes, you are right :) it's better to share it.
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Yes, Gypsy, I have tons of poems and stories sitting in files for decades. It is better to share than to keep them hidden.
