Perennials of War
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Comment from Curly Girly
They got the puzzle done and now they are going to make chocolate cookies. All this sounds like fun things to do while they wait.
One typo / punctuation / spacing issue:
piece.. "And this one goes here.
Nicole
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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They got the puzzle done and now they are going to make chocolate cookies. All this sounds like fun things to do while they wait.
One typo / punctuation / spacing issue:
piece.. "And this one goes here.
Nicole
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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I just really messed up that entire paragraph. Thank you for that catch. Others caught different mistakes.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You have Emily's character off to a 'T' Barbara, that is just how little ones act. I liked how you brought in the kosher food, too. Life isn't all excitement, sometimes the ordinary routine stuff has to happen to tie the story together, without it the plot would fail. Well done, my friend, I look forward to the next part. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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You have Emily's character off to a 'T' Barbara, that is just how little ones act. I liked how you brought in the kosher food, too. Life isn't all excitement, sometimes the ordinary routine stuff has to happen to tie the story together, without it the plot would fail. Well done, my friend, I look forward to the next part. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you for seeing the larger picture. Some reviewers don't.
Comment from Natali Holden
I love how you ended it, "With twinkling eyes and a smile, Emily said, 'I'm sure Daddy will say they're his favorite, because they're mine. Mommy says we're exactly alike.'" That is such and awesome sentence. It was a bit confusing picking up in the middle of the story. Maybe if you wrote a short summary of what's happened so far at the beginning along with the last post's ending it would be better.'"I bet we can arrange that. I'll talk with Helen." Jane added a piece. (")There are only two pieces left." She held them up. "Think you can put them in?"' I love the picture. I never would've thought to use the puzzle. Great job!
Natali ;)
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I love how you ended it, "With twinkling eyes and a smile, Emily said, 'I'm sure Daddy will say they're his favorite, because they're mine. Mommy says we're exactly alike.'" That is such and awesome sentence. It was a bit confusing picking up in the middle of the story. Maybe if you wrote a short summary of what's happened so far at the beginning along with the last post's ending it would be better.'"I bet we can arrange that. I'll talk with Helen." Jane added a piece. (")There are only two pieces left." She held them up. "Think you can put them in?"' I love the picture. I never would've thought to use the puzzle. Great job!
Natali ;)
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I have added the quotation mark.
Comment from royowen
I think that's so nice that Helen has said she going to honour Shana, her Jewish traditions and culture by serving kosher food, even though Shana hasn't. I like the five year old in the story, she resembles my 5 yr old granddaughter, well done. Barbara, excellent reading., blessings, Roy
Typo : until you finish (the) puxzzle
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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I think that's so nice that Helen has said she going to honour Shana, her Jewish traditions and culture by serving kosher food, even though Shana hasn't. I like the five year old in the story, she resembles my 5 yr old granddaughter, well done. Barbara, excellent reading., blessings, Roy
Typo : until you finish (the) puxzzle
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
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Thank you for the generous review.
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Emily gets to play the mama says game. Whatever mama says is the way everything is supposed to be. If she only knew, those kinds of mamas are the best hustlers in the world, until they run out of people to hustle. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Emily gets to play the mama says game. Whatever mama says is the way everything is supposed to be. If she only knew, those kinds of mamas are the best hustlers in the world, until they run out of people to hustle. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Emily will find out what a true mother-type is like. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
Entertaining young children
Isn't so rough
Almost every thing is fun for them
That's not so tough
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This very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Entertaining young children
Isn't so rough
Almost every thing is fun for them
That's not so tough
***
This very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the cute poem/review. I appreciate the review.
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My pleasure, Barbara. Charlie