Retribution
A Chant Royal - see note below38 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An unusual form and written as if in the 15th century when retribution took the most harsh and evil of action on those thought to be in need of punishment. A chilling write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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An unusual form and written as if in the 15th century when retribution took the most harsh and evil of action on those thought to be in need of punishment. A chilling write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Dolly. Appreciated! As you say, retribution was sometimes swift and extremely harsh in the days of old! Some of the instruments of torture in European museums have to be seen to be believed. They make the blood run cold.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
What an adorable profile picture you have :)
I like the flow, rhyme scheme, and topic of your chant.
It's a well constructed Chant Royale. The poem flows so lovely and though it describes the bitter end of the main character.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend
What an adorable profile picture you have :)
I like the flow, rhyme scheme, and topic of your chant.
It's a well constructed Chant Royale. The poem flows so lovely and though it describes the bitter end of the main character.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Gypsy. Appreciated! Tony
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
A complex poem that needed to read a couple of times to appreciate the excellent rhyming scheme Tony, really enjoyed it and appreciate the effort you have put into writing such a fantastic piece.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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A complex poem that needed to read a couple of times to appreciate the excellent rhyming scheme Tony, really enjoyed it and appreciate the effort you have put into writing such a fantastic piece.
Mitchell
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Mitchell. Appreciated! Tony
Comment from Curly Girly
This poem was not easy to understand. Thankfully, there were author notes that help the reader understand.
This part jumped out to me:
How judge you now this recompense?
The tyrant thought all others dense,
And took his place, with pride, alone,
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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This poem was not easy to understand. Thankfully, there were author notes that help the reader understand.
This part jumped out to me:
How judge you now this recompense?
The tyrant thought all others dense,
And took his place, with pride, alone,
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Nicole. Appreciated! Tony
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very complex form, which you have done so well at mastering, my friend. I don't know how you found this form, but I really like it and you have created such a meaningful poem with it, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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A very complex form, which you have done so well at mastering, my friend. I don't know how you found this form, but I really like it and you have created such a meaningful poem with it, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Debbie. Appreciated! Tony
Comment from damommy
Where to start? Each line was a beauty of its own.
I followed the story in the poem with great ease and enjoyed the old world feel of the words. The line "walls of Jericho" was very good. He thought he was untouchable but his walls were soon to be blown down. "They opened up a chasm wide" is a nice way to say they hanged him.
This has sort of a "let them eat cake" feel, too.
This is quite a feat, to write something like this. Bravo!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Where to start? Each line was a beauty of its own.
I followed the story in the poem with great ease and enjoyed the old world feel of the words. The line "walls of Jericho" was very good. He thought he was untouchable but his walls were soon to be blown down. "They opened up a chasm wide" is a nice way to say they hanged him.
This has sort of a "let them eat cake" feel, too.
This is quite a feat, to write something like this. Bravo!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, kind words and sixer, Yvonne. Appreciated! Tony
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Tony,
I enjoyed reading this complex style of poetry that you chose to describe this one person. I had someone in mind from the beginning, but as I read further, I changed my mind. This seems to be about DTrump. This verse gave me the idea that it was POTUS
Upon this night the Fates decide
His doom. Their cunning thrusts deflate
His puffed up armament of pride.
There's nothing left to contemplate.
The verdict's read with solemn woe
Like sombre organ notes that blow
By blow, condemn his dissidence.
He takes the stand, the air grows tense
The judge decrees his life on loan
And strips away the last pretence
Of one who thought The Path his own.
He does seem to be on his own path with little regard to what others say or do.
Your lines read superbly--this sounded great read aloud.
Great work, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Tony,
I enjoyed reading this complex style of poetry that you chose to describe this one person. I had someone in mind from the beginning, but as I read further, I changed my mind. This seems to be about DTrump. This verse gave me the idea that it was POTUS
Upon this night the Fates decide
His doom. Their cunning thrusts deflate
His puffed up armament of pride.
There's nothing left to contemplate.
The verdict's read with solemn woe
Like sombre organ notes that blow
By blow, condemn his dissidence.
He takes the stand, the air grows tense
The judge decrees his life on loan
And strips away the last pretence
Of one who thought The Path his own.
He does seem to be on his own path with little regard to what others say or do.
Your lines read superbly--this sounded great read aloud.
Great work, Jan
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, kind words and sixer, Jan. Appreciated! The poem wasn't intended to be about any particular character, although a few people have found a few interesting parallels with DT! Tony
Comment from Taffspride
I thank you for the author notes since this is a form I am not familiar with, (or at least it's name)
You have penned it so well, and is a joy to read aloud.
I found these lines to be so powerful, with such meaning.
How judge you now this recompense?
The tyrant thought all others dense,
And took his place, with pride, alone,
And was condemned. Fair consequence
For one who thought The Path his own?
Great job. thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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I thank you for the author notes since this is a form I am not familiar with, (or at least it's name)
You have penned it so well, and is a joy to read aloud.
I found these lines to be so powerful, with such meaning.
How judge you now this recompense?
The tyrant thought all others dense,
And took his place, with pride, alone,
And was condemned. Fair consequence
For one who thought The Path his own?
Great job. thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review and kind words, Ann. Appreciated! Tony
Comment from Dean Kuch
What an interesting form of poetic expressionism I found this Chant Royal to be, Tony.
The rhyming and flow is amazing...
That's etched with retribution's glow,
Decreeing that he must forego
This life on earth, as they dispense
The punishment for his offence,
The stench of which, this tale has shown,
Still rises like the foul incense
Of one who thought The Path his own. ... Fabulous work.
Thanks for introducing us all to this unique form and style of poetry.
~Dean
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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What an interesting form of poetic expressionism I found this Chant Royal to be, Tony.
The rhyming and flow is amazing...
That's etched with retribution's glow,
Decreeing that he must forego
This life on earth, as they dispense
The punishment for his offence,
The stench of which, this tale has shown,
Still rises like the foul incense
Of one who thought The Path his own. ... Fabulous work.
Thanks for introducing us all to this unique form and style of poetry.
~Dean
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, kind words and sixer, Dean. Appreciated! Tony
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My pleasure, Tony. :)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your story/poem. It flowed smoothly and told a complete tale. Thank you for the author's notes. Since I am not a poet, I need all the help with form I can get.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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I enjoyed reading your story/poem. It flowed smoothly and told a complete tale. Thank you for the author's notes. Since I am not a poet, I need all the help with form I can get.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review and kind words, Barbara. Appreciated! Tony