2017 JAPANESE POETRY
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Comment from oliver818
I like this powerful little haiku. I can just imagine this poor little tree choking on fumes. I especially like the choice of word asphyxiated Thanks for sharing and have a great day
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I like this powerful little haiku. I can just imagine this poor little tree choking on fumes. I especially like the choice of word asphyxiated Thanks for sharing and have a great day
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Thank you for the review, my friend :) I appreciate it very much!
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Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, yep I like this haiku, Gypsy. Excellent concrete imagery and yes indeed that poor tree will look like a ghost after inhaling all those exhaust fumes.
Really enjoy this one.
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Ha, yep I like this haiku, Gypsy. Excellent concrete imagery and yes indeed that poor tree will look like a ghost after inhaling all those exhaust fumes.
Really enjoy this one.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Thank you for the review, my friend :) I appreciate it very much!
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Comment from Nikki-Nicole
This is a nice Haiku.
It consists of three lines.
The lines contain a syllable count: 5-7-5
Total syllable count: 17
The image shown fits the poem perfectly.
--It has to be summertime. I'm from Mississippi, and the weather is scorching hot in the summer, especially in July. Imagine being pregnant in June and July- I had to stay inside. I gave birth in August.
Thanks for sharing.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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This is a nice Haiku.
It consists of three lines.
The lines contain a syllable count: 5-7-5
Total syllable count: 17
The image shown fits the poem perfectly.
--It has to be summertime. I'm from Mississippi, and the weather is scorching hot in the summer, especially in July. Imagine being pregnant in June and July- I had to stay inside. I gave birth in August.
Thanks for sharing.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Thank you for the review, my friend :) I appreciate it very much!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very astute observation. You wonder how trees survive next to a highway. Somehow they do. They just redid the roads near my home and they planted lots and lots of trees.
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A very astute observation. You wonder how trees survive next to a highway. Somehow they do. They just redid the roads near my home and they planted lots and lots of trees.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
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Thank you for the review, my friend :) I appreciate it very much!
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Comment from DR DIP
Are those trees dying Gypsy or is it just winter? I could imagine car fumes and industry emission suffocating foliage. A haiku with an environmental message. Thanks for sharing
dip
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Are those trees dying Gypsy or is it just winter? I could imagine car fumes and industry emission suffocating foliage. A haiku with an environmental message. Thanks for sharing
dip
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Comment Written 03-May-2017
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Thank you for the review, my friend :) I appreciate it very much! it's summer
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Comment from Teri7
It seemed to have 17 syllables, very good presentation. It made me think of walking down the street in the nice warm sunshine. Not sure about the season. I would say spring or summer. Very good job my friend. Blessings, Teri
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It seemed to have 17 syllables, very good presentation. It made me think of walking down the street in the nice warm sunshine. Not sure about the season. I would say spring or summer. Very good job my friend. Blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 03-May-2017
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Thank you for the review, my friend :) I appreciate it very much! it is Summer
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