2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "haibun (moving means)"A collection of Japanese poetry
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Comment from Mark Schardine
All our possessions seem to represent our entire lives. A few boxes of things we acquired summarize our lives, whether we like it or not.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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All our possessions seem to represent our entire lives. A few boxes of things we acquired summarize our lives, whether we like it or not.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for reading, have a great weekend,
Gypsy
Comment from cumulus365
Moving from a place where one feels "at home" then have to pluck up and go to another place to call "home" again is a tiring process. To me the tiring is have to pack and unpack. Your poem concentrates on the packing/unpacking. Things have their memories that is how they creep into your house. You got it there when the moment was savored. But as time passes by, you realize some still has its worth while others don't and that determination to keep or not to keep give a headache. My fear for me is, as it seems to happen several times now, when I throw it away, next month, there is something would happen that had me said to myself "man, I shouldn't have thrown it away". Your thought of "our love is in a box" or some of our love is in the box. Your haibun/haiku gives a melancholy feel about making a decision of what gets to keep and what gets to let go, that determination making is easy to say but is very hard to do and the feeling is very normal just another headache to have, to me. So I hate moving, it is a wearisome process. Best wishes for your entry.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Moving from a place where one feels "at home" then have to pluck up and go to another place to call "home" again is a tiring process. To me the tiring is have to pack and unpack. Your poem concentrates on the packing/unpacking. Things have their memories that is how they creep into your house. You got it there when the moment was savored. But as time passes by, you realize some still has its worth while others don't and that determination to keep or not to keep give a headache. My fear for me is, as it seems to happen several times now, when I throw it away, next month, there is something would happen that had me said to myself "man, I shouldn't have thrown it away". Your thought of "our love is in a box" or some of our love is in the box. Your haibun/haiku gives a melancholy feel about making a decision of what gets to keep and what gets to let go, that determination making is easy to say but is very hard to do and the feeling is very normal just another headache to have, to me. So I hate moving, it is a wearisome process. Best wishes for your entry.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for reading, have a great weekend,
Gypsy
Comment from kahpot
I just fell for Konmari the explanation alone would help millions, A very moving, (really) poem of the trials of letting go of the what was very well done****kahpot
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I just fell for Konmari the explanation alone would help millions, A very moving, (really) poem of the trials of letting go of the what was very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for reading, have a great weekend,
Gypsy
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
An excellent haibun according to the notes you graciously left for us to read and compare the rules to the piece. I can relate to the moving as I just have, and the lost box, maybe not for the same reason. The haiku was excellently done and I am assuming it is for romance purposes
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An excellent haibun according to the notes you graciously left for us to read and compare the rules to the piece. I can relate to the moving as I just have, and the lost box, maybe not for the same reason. The haiku was excellently done and I am assuming it is for romance purposes
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
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It's not about romance, it's about life. I was thinking about my ex-husband. It has been ten years since we separated and it was hard letting him go. We both moved on but every time I move, a bit of the grief shows his ugly head again. I packed and unpacked memories. Thank you very much for reading, have a great weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from Kerry Foley
That was a beautiful poem Gypsy "our love in a box" I love that, it is so true, That's an interesting term about letting go of it if it doesn't bring joy, I'll have to remember that, and try to rid my things with this method. I hope everythings going good in the new place, Hugs ~Kerry~
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That was a beautiful poem Gypsy "our love in a box" I love that, it is so true, That's an interesting term about letting go of it if it doesn't bring joy, I'll have to remember that, and try to rid my things with this method. I hope everythings going good in the new place, Hugs ~Kerry~
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for reading, have a great weekend,
Gypsy
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You too, Gypsy Hugs