2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "haiku (seagull cries at dawn)"A collection of Japanese poetry
33 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
You are so lucky to live close to an ocean. I long to hear the seagull cries.
I like the imagery in 'sip salty tears'.
Teresa
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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You are so lucky to live close to an ocean. I long to hear the seagull cries.
I like the imagery in 'sip salty tears'.
Teresa
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Hello, my friend, :) Thank you for reading me.
Buddha blessings,
Gypsy Blue Rose
Haiku instructor
Member of the Haiku Society of America
a new haiku class every month....
Do you haiku? Check out the haiku club. It's a place for fun and learning.
Comment from winnona
beautiul poem. Your well-chosen words convey the feel of the seashore ad also sadness of the coming day. The photo and seagulls with the surf completed the piece very well.
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beautiul poem. Your well-chosen words convey the feel of the seashore ad also sadness of the coming day. The photo and seagulls with the surf completed the piece very well.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Hello, my friend, :) Thank you for reading me.
Buddha blessings,
Gypsy Blue Rose
Haiku instructor
Member of the Haiku Society of America
a new haiku class every month....
Do you haiku? Check out the haiku club. It's a place for fun and learning.
Comment from ciliverde
Ah...I love the audio here!! Now you've made me want to drive to the beach this afternoon. This is a beautiful piece of work, taking in the sounds, the picture, and the poem itself. So simple, and yet truly evocative of feelings we often have at the ocean -affinity, yes, and also infinity...
Carol
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Ah...I love the audio here!! Now you've made me want to drive to the beach this afternoon. This is a beautiful piece of work, taking in the sounds, the picture, and the poem itself. So simple, and yet truly evocative of feelings we often have at the ocean -affinity, yes, and also infinity...
Carol
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Hello, my friend, :) Thank you for reading me.
Buddha blessings,
Gypsy Blue Rose
Haiku instructor
Member of the Haiku Society of America
a new haiku class every month....
Do you haiku? Check out the haiku club. It's a place for fun and learning.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
Finally I am back on here and looking forward to what everyone has written.
I loved the picture you used with your words. You have always been great
at writing things.
Kat
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Hi Gypsy,
Finally I am back on here and looking forward to what everyone has written.
I loved the picture you used with your words. You have always been great
at writing things.
Kat
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Hello, my friend, :) Thank you for reading me.
Buddha blessings,
Gypsy Blue Rose
Haiku instructor
Member of the Haiku Society of America
a new haiku class every month....
Do you haiku? Check out the haiku club. It's a place for fun and learning.
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You're very welcome, my friend. Kat
Comment from Mark Valentine
This one paints a picture (as an aside, how lucky are you to live where you can hear seagulls! In Chicago, we try to guess - "Were those firecrackers or gunshots?"). Back to your poem - the solitude and melancholy that one only feels in the dead of night- reach out of this one. The last line is perfect - reaching out across space and species to feel another's pain. Wonderful!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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This one paints a picture (as an aside, how lucky are you to live where you can hear seagulls! In Chicago, we try to guess - "Were those firecrackers or gunshots?"). Back to your poem - the solitude and melancholy that one only feels in the dead of night- reach out of this one. The last line is perfect - reaching out across space and species to feel another's pain. Wonderful!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Mark. You totally go it. That is exactly how I felt.
Gypsy
Comment from krys123
Marvelously written haiku, Gypsy;
-this is so beautiful and self-explanatory.
-The pictures so spot on and so relative to the conceptual theme.
-You have to seagulls crying and the person of sipping tea is also in tears.
-Grammatically connected lines that are very definitively expressive and superbly and demonstratively let alone vividly descriptive.
-A Centauri that offers a moment which enriches the quality of the haiku and subsequently summarizes the relativity of the conceptual theme(a person crying)
-thank you so much for sharing this wonderful haiku and take care and have a good one.
Alex
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Marvelously written haiku, Gypsy;
-this is so beautiful and self-explanatory.
-The pictures so spot on and so relative to the conceptual theme.
-You have to seagulls crying and the person of sipping tea is also in tears.
-Grammatically connected lines that are very definitively expressive and superbly and demonstratively let alone vividly descriptive.
-A Centauri that offers a moment which enriches the quality of the haiku and subsequently summarizes the relativity of the conceptual theme(a person crying)
-thank you so much for sharing this wonderful haiku and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Hello, my friend, :) Thank you for reading me.
Buddha blessings,
Gypsy Blue Rose
Haiku instructor
Member of the Haiku Society of America
a new haiku class every month....
Do you haiku? Check out the haiku club. It's a place for fun and learning.
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I really soberly love your picture that glistens so. And you are very welcome, Gypsy.
Alex
Comment from estory
It's a little out of the traditional form, but I liked the image in this piece. Here we have a contrast between the seagull and the sense of mourning, loss. The seagull seems to be life going on, the sea our feelings, rooting us to the spot. nice balance in it very sublime voice estory
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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It's a little out of the traditional form, but I liked the image in this piece. Here we have a contrast between the seagull and the sense of mourning, loss. The seagull seems to be life going on, the sea our feelings, rooting us to the spot. nice balance in it very sublime voice estory
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Hello, my friend, :) Thank you for reading me.
Buddha blessings,
Gypsy Blue Rose
Haiku instructor
Member of the Haiku Society of America
a new haiku class every month....
Do you haiku? Check out the haiku club. It's a place for fun and learning.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very calming poem and I like the picture at the start and the Budda at the end as well. The words and the pictures go together very well. Thank you for sharing. Well done.
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This is a very calming poem and I like the picture at the start and the Budda at the end as well. The words and the pictures go together very well. Thank you for sharing. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Hello, my friend, :) Thank you for reading me.
Buddha blessings,
Gypsy Blue Rose
Haiku instructor
Member of the Haiku Society of America
a new haiku class every month....
Do you haiku? Check out the haiku club. It's a place for fun and learning.
Comment from Grasshopper2
Lady Blue,
Confucious say Woman who cooks carrots and pees in same pot unsanitary. Has nothing to do with your haiku, I just always wanted to write that. I was disappointed because there was no audio and then discover my sound was muted. I switched on my audio and lo and behold a miracle- sounds! Your choice of colors and photo lends themselves to relaxation as does the sound of the ocean. Well done, Lady Blue.
Michael
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Lady Blue,
Confucious say Woman who cooks carrots and pees in same pot unsanitary. Has nothing to do with your haiku, I just always wanted to write that. I was disappointed because there was no audio and then discover my sound was muted. I switched on my audio and lo and behold a miracle- sounds! Your choice of colors and photo lends themselves to relaxation as does the sound of the ocean. Well done, Lady Blue.
Michael
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Lady Blue? I like it! Thank you, Sir Grasshopper. You da bomb!
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from royowen
A beautifully scribed and well presented haiku with that great connection of the haiku, but yet the exclamation of the haiku's "wake up" line, well done, Gypsy, good job, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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A beautifully scribed and well presented haiku with that great connection of the haiku, but yet the exclamation of the haiku's "wake up" line, well done, Gypsy, good job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words words. Blessings
Gypsy
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Most welcome