Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Merlin v. Dream Master"a place to gather my poetic forms
55 total reviews
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Does your poem say that dreams is what Luna wants, not magic? Your form is perfect and very impressive. The illustration you chose is excellent. Please forgive me if I didn't fully understand your poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Does your poem say that dreams is what Luna wants, not magic? Your form is perfect and very impressive. The illustration you chose is excellent. Please forgive me if I didn't fully understand your poem. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Dear nancyrabbrose,
Actually luna IS magic, nancy, and she helps other people to have adventures in their dreams. Thank you for your kind review. No worries, please let me know if I helped you understand or if I confused you further. We'll get this.
Yours,
jeni
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Luna: it is a new month! I have time to review! I like your poem
and the green theme. Oh, no? What shall i do? Get the wand...
Yes, you started a great poem and now I want to know more.
Maybe, keep it going in more poems? I like the photo and your
rhymes. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Luna: it is a new month! I have time to review! I like your poem
and the green theme. Oh, no? What shall i do? Get the wand...
Yes, you started a great poem and now I want to know more.
Maybe, keep it going in more poems? I like the photo and your
rhymes. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Dear flylikeaneagle,
And reviewing you are, my friend. Keep an eye out on my port, Luna, the Dream Master and Merlin have long been and will continue to be recurring characters in my work, even when I was active on the site years ago prior to Mickey's death.
Perhaps I will write a sequel...let me think on this.
Yours,
jeni
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, now THIS is impressive rhyming - how DID you manage to make a double etheree WITH RHYME flow so smoothly?!! Oh, I know - 'cause you're so talented, that's why! (I do love Merlin...sigh...*grin*...please don't send him to you-know-where...)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Wow, now THIS is impressive rhyming - how DID you manage to make a double etheree WITH RHYME flow so smoothly?!! Oh, I know - 'cause you're so talented, that's why! (I do love Merlin...sigh...*grin*...please don't send him to you-know-where...)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Dear Dawn, I'm blushing from your compliment, girl! I love Merlin too but for some reason Luna and the Dream Master always seem to outwit him in the end! Thanks for the support, sister.
love,
jeni
Comment from Cedar
This is an excellent poem. I especially liked the way you presented it, the colors really stand out. With the exception of your fifth line, the shape is nearly perfect. Very well done...Bill
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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This is an excellent poem. I especially liked the way you presented it, the colors really stand out. With the exception of your fifth line, the shape is nearly perfect. Very well done...Bill
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Hi, Cedar, and welcome back to my portfolio!
I'm happy that you thought this was an excellent poem. Thanks for your comments on the presentation. Yes, that irritating fifth line; I really should try and revise it.
Yours,
Jeni
Comment from padumachitta
hi
I did like it.
It is hard to write a cohesive poem within this structure. But you did it and I like the story and eiry quality of it
padumachitta
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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hi
I did like it.
It is hard to write a cohesive poem within this structure. But you did it and I like the story and eiry quality of it
padumachitta
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Dear padumachitta, welcome back to my portfolio!
I'm happy that you enjoyed this story and appreciate your continuing support.
All my best,
jeni
Comment from DR DIP
That is well done luna this style of poetry I can imagine isn't easy and you have done it so well with this one thanks for sharing with us.
dip
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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That is well done luna this style of poetry I can imagine isn't easy and you have done it so well with this one thanks for sharing with us.
dip
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Why, thank you, dip!
I'm glad you thought this poem was well done and that you enjoyed it. I'm glad you stopped by once again to support my poetic efforts.
Best,
jeni
Comment from sunnilicious
Enjoyable poem. I think the shape should look like a streamlined diamond. You'll have to doublecheck that rule. I was corrected once before...However, the poem is well thought out with great visual imagery. Nice work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Enjoyable poem. I think the shape should look like a streamlined diamond. You'll have to doublecheck that rule. I was corrected once before...However, the poem is well thought out with great visual imagery. Nice work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Hi, sunnilicious, as far as my sources (one of which includes Shadowpoetry.com,), there is no requirement for a shape, although the increasing number of syllables in each line often do make it look like a diamond. That would be an interesting challenge to undertake, however.
For your information, Shelley Kaye and myself have a book of poetry challenges that we have just begun (called "The Muse's Match-Up), and we are requesting challenges for poems from readers. That might be an interesting challenge for us.. Just an idea. Keep us in mind!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Of course, I like it! It's so cool. I felt like a took a peekaboo at the Majestic. A fantasy movie about Luna, Merlin, and the Dream Master. You have quite the imagination, Sister Luna. :)
Gypsy
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Of course, I like it! It's so cool. I felt like a took a peekaboo at the Majestic. A fantasy movie about Luna, Merlin, and the Dream Master. You have quite the imagination, Sister Luna. :)
Gypsy
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Bahahaha! Hi, Sister Gypsy!
I should have known this would have been right up your alley. Imagination - don't all we writers have to have that, and an active one additionally, to write quality work? You have quite an imagination as well, Sister.
Love,
Sister Luna
Comment from c_lucas
Merlin is not at fault when the screen's is out of focus. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Merlin is not at fault when the screen's is out of focus. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Charlie. I'm glad that you thought this was a good read, and I thank you for your support of my poetry efforts today.
Best,
luna
Comment from Thal1959
Very enjoyable, Luna. Often a double Etheree will take the form of two separate stanzas, but you have not merely pressed them together; the story told flows in one long 20 line poem.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Very enjoyable, Luna. Often a double Etheree will take the form of two separate stanzas, but you have not merely pressed them together; the story told flows in one long 20 line poem.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Hi, Thal, good to see you!
I'm happy that you thought this poem was enjoyable, and that I accomplished my goal of telling a story in it. Thanks for stopping by today. Happy Wednesday!
Best,
luna
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It was my pleasure, Luna.
