Mom's Vehicular Homicide Revisited
I received a phone call from my oldest brother last Saturday22 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What a nightmare you all lived through. So sad that your mom's life was cut short. Septic infection is far too common in hospitals! I hope they found the guy and he is in prison. Eager to see how this ends.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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What a nightmare you all lived through. So sad that your mom's life was cut short. Septic infection is far too common in hospitals! I hope they found the guy and he is in prison. Eager to see how this ends.
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much, Phyllis, for your RR&R. I appreciate lending an ear to my mother's story, as difficult as it was to read. I just posted part 2, if you are interested. So far no news from the police department linking the two incidents.
Have a wonderful evening.
Comment from Thal1959
A very good and sad read. Works that are based on personal experience fare better than pure fiction. I thought it interesting that you used the word "shatting," a humorous variant of "sh****ng," but then used "bitch," later. Why hold back on the first opportunity and go full out with the second/ It would have also been better if you had explained what Project Renesting is. Other than those two small observations, the work is very good.
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017
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A very good and sad read. Works that are based on personal experience fare better than pure fiction. I thought it interesting that you used the word "shatting," a humorous variant of "sh****ng," but then used "bitch," later. Why hold back on the first opportunity and go full out with the second/ It would have also been better if you had explained what Project Renesting is. Other than those two small observations, the work is very good.
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your fantastic review and suggestions. I will have to consider going back and changing that. Perhaps my hesitance was in writing of my mom with the shatting reference--she would have schooled me! The bitch reference could be attributed to female dogs, so she might have given me a pass on that one :D
The reference to renesting was my son being back in his childhood home with his own family, until they can move to their new home in a few weeks. I will add that to the note section now.
Thank you again for your thorough and well thought out RR&R. Much appreciated. Have a great week.
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Thanks for understanding.