Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Well now, I have never seen apoem like this on Fanstory either. Wow! Jeni, you are some sort of scholar at poetry aren't you? I liked the theme of this poem but did not understand these words and their relevence. Sorry:

"That season is when mothers are wary...
children take chances down at the fairground."

Another fine gem, my friend. Blessings, Bob

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016

Hi, Bob,


First, thank you for your review, my friend.

Is like this... And maybe my point is too obscure and I should have put something else there, but.. The poem is obviously about losing teeth.

During her meditation she found that she would be completely overwhelmed and exhausted during the summer months. .

The mothers' being wary about the fairgrounds was because the children would be taking risks - - And possibly losing a tooth!

I was trying to wrap it all up... I obviously missed my mark. I am sorry that the poem became muddy for you at the end. I can't stand to try to read something and I don't get the point!

All my best, Bob.

Jeni *smile*

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello my friend

My deepest sympathy for your loss. I can't think of anything worse than to lose a child.

I love your well written Rondeau. It's a beautiful poem and tribute to your precious son.

I think you are doing the best thing you can. I'm 100% certain that art heals the soul.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

Comment from hammy45

Good

I've never tried this type of poem before and you've done a good job with the Rondeau. Lovely theme using the tooth fairy as well and I love the description of the fairy.

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 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Okay now this is not the way the tooth fairy worked when I was a child.lol
Oh so cute and wouldn't it be mesmerizing to see this actually come to life?
Very nicely done

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

Comment from winnona

Excellent

A well-written Rondeau poem. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your well chosen artwork and background color completed the piece well.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

An excellent example of another style of poetry that I didn't know existed. Poetry requires a lot more knowledge of rules than prose.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

Comment from sandy montgomery

Excellent

This was good. I think you did well with your chosen form. It's not one I am well aqainted with but you seem to have fufilled the requirements of the form. Thank you for sharing your work.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work.

luna

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Nice photo of a lovely little girl that changes her teeth. Then Tooth Fairy comes and takes it. A very strong repeating line: Tonight young girl's spellbound. What a nice Rondeau. A second one dedicated to Mickey.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work.

luna

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Nicely done on the rondeau, good rhyme, meter like the refrain. well done. it amazes me how many lies and fairy tales we fill our kids heads with. have a wonderful day

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work.

luna

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

Losing our baby teeth are a part of life -- a symbol of growing up, and it is the tooth-fairy that makes this otherwise painful process an exciting one -- something to look forward to. Thanks for this interesting poem.
Bill

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work.

luna