Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi there, it's a lovely poem and a lovely Kyrielle. Great for the contest. The font is extremely small and should be made bigger. Many more would enjoy your lovely poem. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Thank you for your very kind review.

I appreciate your kind attention to my work

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem for the contest. I love the art/image. It is a great choice.

Good job on the criteria of the kyrielle. The repeating lines work well in each verse.

Suggestion:

I have never see font this tiny--next to impossible to red. Please look at it & make the font larger.

Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Dear Jan, thank you for the review and suggestions. I think I've handled all the issues.

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 20-Nov-2016

much better Jan

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This is a very well written poem. I like the feel and rhythm of it. I would only suggest that you increase the font size, as it is, it is very hard to read.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Thank you for your very kind review.

I appreciate your kind attention to my work

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This is a fine kyrielle sonnet that meets all the requirements of the kyrielle sonnet form. I imagine that he only difference between this an a kyrielle is that a kyrielle may be longer. So all kyrielle sonnets are kyrielles but not all kyrielles are kyrielle sonnets.

Am I correct on that.

The font you have used here is tiny, something larger would i am sore be appreciated by many here.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

I'm in no way an expert, but both the Kyrielle and the Kyrielle Sonnet the number of stanzas are the writers choice. As you know what distinguishes the Kyrielle Sonnet from a Kyrielle is that the soonert has an ending coupler.

My best guess.

reply by Pantygynt on 21-Nov-2016

I think you will find that the kyrielle sonnet is restricted, like most sonnets to 14 lines.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This poem has great imagery and fantasy. It is rhythmical with well flowing words. The symbolism (fingers/ wind) is well done and the presentation is quite attractive.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Thank you for your very kind review.

I appreciate your kind attention to my work

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That was really nice, and I can see where you are coming from with your repeating line. Those do look like fingers connected to the wind as they blow like waves in the breezes. An excellent contest entry, its a lovely kyrielle. Good luck! xsx Sandra

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 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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Thank you for your very kind review.

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Comment from Writer51

Excellent

Very nice, Luna. I did have trouble reading some of the words, but your rhyme is in definite sync and the pace is even and well said. Thanks.

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 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Thanks Writer 51.I'm happy you liked it and am grateful for the review.