Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

reconciled,

This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. Your descriptive words were very good for explaining your ideas and your feelings. It made for an enjoyable read. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.

I saw no SPAG and no typos. It was very clean.

Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016

thank you...-smile- good to see you again.
you know I used to eat oatmeal...it was good for me...-smile-...love you too Michael

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

HI Michael,

life's search for more woman
forbidden fruit fullness
never knew color so in love

this is a man's world
and it wouldn't be nothing,
without a woman or a girl
God knew what was doing when He created perfection...woman...sigh...

this is one of your best...
every line written in your own unique style...
I also like...
taste hers better than believed before...
love you poem...and the picture is beautiful...
love your video....love you Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016

Hey....-smile-
how are ya rose in bloom....-headtilt-....you sure look pretty.
yes, yes this is a masterpiece....love you too Michael

reply by l.raven on 07-Nov-2016

thank you...and yes it is a masterpiece...I think one of your best...love xxoo

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

Man has really always lusted for the post that Satan himself sought. To be as high and as lifted up as God, but the goal has always been to be like God, good, kind, compassionate, putting others before self, this is the nature that God in Jesus is! Beautifully written Michael. There was a time I didn't appreciated your work, but now I do, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016

yes Sir...but no one is, or ever will be.
if proof is desired over faith or trust...the closest mirror will confirm every life less than.
but He created her for him. all knowing Omni. that she would compete with our utmost...our first fruit.and that is history.
Lucifer....wanted "all" life to pay homage....to recognize him supreme in rejecting God.
one woman...has -headshake- so much power...if harnessed and brought to bare ...um with precise and uncommon finesse...she is the wind beneath the wing of the eagle man...his everyday reason...his helpmate.
yes I know the nature of God and satan. I've lived them...and still struggle to. My poem was not an attempt to override His law, just the natural nature of it. anyway...thank you Sir. love Michael

reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016

a look at...just a look at the natural nature of it. is what I meant. thank you Roy....appreciate your respect. love-

reply by royowen on 07-Nov-2016

The imagery is in the soul of the reader, people read my work like that, and that's God at work, well done my friend, Roy

Comment from frierajac

Excellent

The famous #'s from Bach not Beethoven are the Brandenburg concertos, for about sex.
This is a nicer way of expression you have here.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016

well...I was ..well I was just trying to put into words the passion born form man and for woman forever after her first birth. its pretty much the same inspiration that killed every other poet that lived.
some think iron working is risky...-shouldershrug-...they just dont know, love Michael

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Excellent. I'm not sure I understand this poem at all, but it is very well written and therefore the five stars. I didn't spot any errors of any kind. good work.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016

since God created woman ...from man and Breath of Life.
she has been his every waking desire. to possess...to control...own as own..be God of her everything. wrong...? perhaps unleashed all at once...but it is at least honest....passion. it has also been his desire to comfort, care for...worship the ground she walks on..to love like no other but God. Tell me what other living thing...owns a man more...than woman. anyway...-smile-...love Michael

reply by prettybluebirds on 07-Nov-2016

Thanks for the explanation, Mike

reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016

yes Maam...-smile-

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, michael, you did an excellent job writing this tercet poem about the search for love that is found in the depths and heights of sensual pleasure. i enjoyed reading this one..............

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2016

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I always enjoyed your references and wordplay, and this free verse is full of them, from the living by "bread" alone, and the "tower" of Babylon, to "beg borrow and... steel"! Cheers and sweet dreams- Joan

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 Comment Written 07-Nov-2016