Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "The Best I Could Do"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from Allison78
This is simply beautiful! I enjoyed reading this so much, the meter is wonderful not because I'm doing so well with meter myself but because you can hear it as you read. You've done a wonderful job with this!
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This is simply beautiful! I enjoyed reading this so much, the meter is wonderful not because I'm doing so well with meter myself but because you can hear it as you read. You've done a wonderful job with this!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
Comment from nordicgirl
I just love these challenges. They bring out pieces U would never imagine you writing. This has a certain thoughtfulness to it. I feel good though after reading it. Hopeful. Lots to consider. NG
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I just love these challenges. They bring out pieces U would never imagine you writing. This has a certain thoughtfulness to it. I feel good though after reading it. Hopeful. Lots to consider. NG
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
Comment from damommy
Oh, I love it! Of course, you always have great rhyme and rhythm.
But I loved the approach you took to the challenge. You actually grew your own apple trees?
There's not much for me to say except this is very good. 8-)
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Oh, I love it! Of course, you always have great rhyme and rhythm.
But I loved the approach you took to the challenge. You actually grew your own apple trees?
There's not much for me to say except this is very good. 8-)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
Comment from patcelaw
Michael, for being the best you could do, you have painted a lovely story of baking an apple pie. Send me some pie along with a large scoop of vanilla ice cream. Patricia
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Michael, for being the best you could do, you have painted a lovely story of baking an apple pie. Send me some pie along with a large scoop of vanilla ice cream. Patricia
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
Comment from krys123
Hello Mikey;
-very good rhythm in writing in this poem and I really like the concept of you planting the apple seeds and then enjoying the pie after leaving off to wherever which I think you suggested war and then coming back and enjoying this piece of pie. Interesting the process and that's why I like it.
-Take care my friend and have a good one.
Alex
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Hello Mikey;
-very good rhythm in writing in this poem and I really like the concept of you planting the apple seeds and then enjoying the pie after leaving off to wherever which I think you suggested war and then coming back and enjoying this piece of pie. Interesting the process and that's why I like it.
-Take care my friend and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
Comment from Pantygynt
Home is the mighty warrior returned to his apple pie. You deserved that. I think it must have been the thirty years war you went off to. They take along time to get to fruit bearing stage from a pip.Lol. Nice sonnet though.
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Home is the mighty warrior returned to his apple pie. You deserved that. I think it must have been the thirty years war you went off to. They take along time to get to fruit bearing stage from a pip.Lol. Nice sonnet though.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
Comment from jlsavell
Good afternoon Mr. Cahill,
You always accomplish a challenge. I appreciate always that you put yourself out there and give100 percent. I cannot critique on meter and form, but I can critique on other forms of poetic devices employed in a great work. You are a great writer. I hope beyond hope and all understanding, that all of our comrades may come home to enjoy apple pie. Much respect to you.
Jimu
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Good afternoon Mr. Cahill,
You always accomplish a challenge. I appreciate always that you put yourself out there and give100 percent. I cannot critique on meter and form, but I can critique on other forms of poetic devices employed in a great work. You are a great writer. I hope beyond hope and all understanding, that all of our comrades may come home to enjoy apple pie. Much respect to you.
Jimu
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Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
Comment from Gloria ....
Wow, Mav, this is a deep sonnet, and yes uplifting, but also one to think about. I love the philosophical bent you're brought to the task.
And of course your signature exceptional meter and rhyme and an absolute delight of a poem.
Excellent potlatch offering.
Gloria
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Wow, Mav, this is a deep sonnet, and yes uplifting, but also one to think about. I love the philosophical bent you're brought to the task.
And of course your signature exceptional meter and rhyme and an absolute delight of a poem.
Excellent potlatch offering.
Gloria
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Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
