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Comment from mike1817
Iwas blessed to share this lovely lyric poem, about nothing critical need be said. The imagery, rhyme, and flow are those of the river, Brava. Mike1817
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Iwas blessed to share this lovely lyric poem, about nothing critical need be said. The imagery, rhyme, and flow are those of the river, Brava. Mike1817
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much Mike!! I really appreciate your kind words and review, and glad that you enjoyed my musings along the riverbank. It is indeed a fantastic place from which I have many memories! Carol
Comment from Domino 2
I read your definition notes (I never heard of any of them, Carol), but by the time I read the poem, I'd forgotten them all. D'OH!
Beautiful river artwork.
Wow - what a wonderful poem. I thought it far too long for my concentration levels, but I was holed from start to finish.
Brilliant imagery of the surroundings, and even the animals that weren't seen. :-)
Just a touch of highbrow, but not too much, and that gives it accomplished class.
Top metaphors and philosophy.
I wish I could write half this well.
Impeccable meter and rhymes.
You are a REAL poet, my friend.
A sixer without doubt!
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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I read your definition notes (I never heard of any of them, Carol), but by the time I read the poem, I'd forgotten them all. D'OH!
Beautiful river artwork.
Wow - what a wonderful poem. I thought it far too long for my concentration levels, but I was holed from start to finish.
Brilliant imagery of the surroundings, and even the animals that weren't seen. :-)
Just a touch of highbrow, but not too much, and that gives it accomplished class.
Top metaphors and philosophy.
I wish I could write half this well.
Impeccable meter and rhymes.
You are a REAL poet, my friend.
A sixer without doubt!
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Thanks so much, Ray! I'm glad I didn't overdo the highbrow feel, it's hard to resist sometimes (lol). Yes, it was very long, I wish I'd had more FS dollars to boost it up. Your praise (a real poet!) much appreciated!! xo, Carol
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
But, gather moments now, a strange bouquet
of all that's passed before and call it life.
that is the best part of the whole piece for me. It rings of life as does the whole piece. The phrases you used and word combinations are so descriptive.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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But, gather moments now, a strange bouquet
of all that's passed before and call it life.
that is the best part of the whole piece for me. It rings of life as does the whole piece. The phrases you used and word combinations are so descriptive.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Barb, I did want to move the poem beyond just being a nature poem (although nature in itself is magnificent). Carol
Comment from Treischel
This was beautifully moving, as it describes the beauty of the surroundings of that lovely valley where nature so lushly abounds. I loved the flow. I relished the rhymes. I adored the alliteration. It was a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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This was beautifully moving, as it describes the beauty of the surroundings of that lovely valley where nature so lushly abounds. I loved the flow. I relished the rhymes. I adored the alliteration. It was a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Thank you SO much, the river provided perfect inspiration and I followed its guide :))
Comment from frogbook
This was just beautiful and so peaceful and calming-you have no idea how I needed this little trip down the river this a.m. I seriously became involved in it and "got away" for a moment from some stress that I needed to escape. Great work.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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This was just beautiful and so peaceful and calming-you have no idea how I needed this little trip down the river this a.m. I seriously became involved in it and "got away" for a moment from some stress that I needed to escape. Great work.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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I'm glad you found a respite from this trip down the river - we all need that now and then! Some of us more than others. Thank you so much for this kind review :)) Carol
Comment from F. Wehr3
Absolutely loved this poem, Carol. Every moment sitting by the water side is vividly brought to life. I don't know what else to say but great work.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Absolutely loved this poem, Carol. Every moment sitting by the water side is vividly brought to life. I don't know what else to say but great work.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Thank you kindly, I'm glad you enjoyed it! :))
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a gorgeous piece of lyrical descriptive writing. The scene is painted as clear as any photograph. Even though the romantics are not my personal favourites it is easy to see that you have done something exceptional here that is definitely sixworthy but there has been a lot of good stuff presented both yesterday and today so I have nothing exceptional left to give.
The flow here is beautiful, completely unforced with no rhymes repeated. Nothing is overstated the whole scene is idyllic. There are numerous examples of alliteration but never more than two consecutively on the same letter. If asked to pick a favourite line I would choose "the shelter of a nodding, speckled shade." I love the gentle movement in there and my favourite stanza would be the last that more than hints at the wildness of the winter yet to come.
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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This is a gorgeous piece of lyrical descriptive writing. The scene is painted as clear as any photograph. Even though the romantics are not my personal favourites it is easy to see that you have done something exceptional here that is definitely sixworthy but there has been a lot of good stuff presented both yesterday and today so I have nothing exceptional left to give.
The flow here is beautiful, completely unforced with no rhymes repeated. Nothing is overstated the whole scene is idyllic. There are numerous examples of alliteration but never more than two consecutively on the same letter. If asked to pick a favourite line I would choose "the shelter of a nodding, speckled shade." I love the gentle movement in there and my favourite stanza would be the last that more than hints at the wildness of the winter yet to come.
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thank you for this wonderful review, which I should have responded to days ago. i was tempted to write this as an awdl gwydd, but settled on the ballad style instead- it's somewhat easier to use if you plan to go on and on - lol. The winters up here are fantastic, by the way...big storms, huge ocean, raging rivers. I love it!
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I agree the form should suit what you want to say and how you say it otherwise it would sound hopelessly contrived.
Comment from BeasPeas
This ballad is outstanding, Carol. So beautifully written and illustrated. Where did you get that amazing picture? It works so well with your piece. So much imagery here, lines flow perfectly together. Definitely deserves a six, but here it is Monday and I'm already out. Congratulations on a fabulous poem. Marilyn
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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This ballad is outstanding, Carol. So beautifully written and illustrated. Where did you get that amazing picture? It works so well with your piece. So much imagery here, lines flow perfectly together. Definitely deserves a six, but here it is Monday and I'm already out. Congratulations on a fabulous poem. Marilyn
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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I found the photo on Google, I should have taken one myself as we were sitting right there. Thanks so much for the kind review :))