The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "More on Trips etc"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Goeff
= Nice to see another accounting of your many trips.
= Always like the pictures.
= Here's some homework for you. (*<*)
<> Need comma.
= This meant driving 40 miles each way(,) 2 times,
= We initially stayed at 'Nolan's On The Barwon'(,) a kind of holiday
= Firstly(,) the battery had worn down in
= The Host of this place was an arrogant old man(,) and there
--- Also, delete extra period.
= next night's money(,) and us checked out for the following morning.[.]
--- Add word.
= would be the first (and last(,) as it turned out) time (for) meeting my Nephew's wife, Kate.
= all the way up to Rockhampton(,) then out to Longreach(,) and Winton(,) where
= and Moruya in the South(,) about 5 hours from home.
= By now(,) the readers know this would have been an impossibility.
= we all knew that my sister was a 'control freak'(,)
= Earlier in 2013(,) after Louise got 'up to her neck'
= As it turned out(,) my favorite Aunty was having a 90th birthday
= My Uncle Jim(,) (Aunty's husband)(,) had died a year or so before,
= Cost us a fortune(,) of course.
= with Margaret(,) (her cousin)(,) and Michael(,) whom we had not seen for
= and the boys were glad to meet us(,) too.
=Unfortunately, Louise's Great Great Grandfather's grave site had been ripped out by Clem Jones(,) (a Brisbane Mayor) in the seventies(,) who cleaned out hundreds == All in all(,) a bit of a disappointing trip(,) but there were some highlights and great reunions with some of the alive family members.
<> Delete comma.
= I took my wife with me[,] to go down to the office
= who treated us like we had the plague[,] or something.
= All this, in front of my wife[,] in her wheel chair.
= Mother in a hospital[,] later in her life.
= stopping more often, overnight[,] at more motels.
<> Add/delete commas.
As mentioned[,] elsewhere(,) we could not do any night driving, due to my eyes(,)
<> Missing a word.
= The owner abused (the) hell out of me for going in the wrong
<> Need a space ABOVE this line.
= We arose very early next morning
<> Need hyphens & comma.
= My sister(-)in(-)law, my other brother's wife(,) was so insistent that her daughter(-)in(-)law from Queensland was really keen to meet us.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Hi, Goeff
= Nice to see another accounting of your many trips.
= Always like the pictures.
= Here's some homework for you. (*<*)
<> Need comma.
= This meant driving 40 miles each way(,) 2 times,
= We initially stayed at 'Nolan's On The Barwon'(,) a kind of holiday
= Firstly(,) the battery had worn down in
= The Host of this place was an arrogant old man(,) and there
--- Also, delete extra period.
= next night's money(,) and us checked out for the following morning.[.]
--- Add word.
= would be the first (and last(,) as it turned out) time (for) meeting my Nephew's wife, Kate.
= all the way up to Rockhampton(,) then out to Longreach(,) and Winton(,) where
= and Moruya in the South(,) about 5 hours from home.
= By now(,) the readers know this would have been an impossibility.
= we all knew that my sister was a 'control freak'(,)
= Earlier in 2013(,) after Louise got 'up to her neck'
= As it turned out(,) my favorite Aunty was having a 90th birthday
= My Uncle Jim(,) (Aunty's husband)(,) had died a year or so before,
= Cost us a fortune(,) of course.
= with Margaret(,) (her cousin)(,) and Michael(,) whom we had not seen for
= and the boys were glad to meet us(,) too.
=Unfortunately, Louise's Great Great Grandfather's grave site had been ripped out by Clem Jones(,) (a Brisbane Mayor) in the seventies(,) who cleaned out hundreds == All in all(,) a bit of a disappointing trip(,) but there were some highlights and great reunions with some of the alive family members.
<> Delete comma.
= I took my wife with me[,] to go down to the office
= who treated us like we had the plague[,] or something.
= All this, in front of my wife[,] in her wheel chair.
= Mother in a hospital[,] later in her life.
= stopping more often, overnight[,] at more motels.
<> Add/delete commas.
As mentioned[,] elsewhere(,) we could not do any night driving, due to my eyes(,)
<> Missing a word.
= The owner abused (the) hell out of me for going in the wrong
<> Need a space ABOVE this line.
= We arose very early next morning
<> Need hyphens & comma.
= My sister(-)in(-)law, my other brother's wife(,) was so insistent that her daughter(-)in(-)law from Queensland was really keen to meet us.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thanks mate, I have a real bad problem with commas. Are you aware there are some in FS who hate more comma's? maybe you have not come across that? Meant to have a book balloon on this as I wanted newer fans to be able to go through the entire book. Somehow it stuffed up and Ionly got the three day certificate! Grrrr! Tom has given me a refund fortunately. Let you know when I get the corrections done.
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Thanks mate appreciate all your hard work. Seems I just left out a whole bunch of comma's especially, sorry.
Comment from AnnieDawn
Well written and sounds like a wonderful trip. Isn't it against the law to disturb grave sites unless the bodies or caskets are relocated?. He had a lot of nerve doing that.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Well written and sounds like a wonderful trip. Isn't it against the law to disturb grave sites unless the bodies or caskets are relocated?. He had a lot of nerve doing that.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Hi Sis, the graves were not disturbed just the headstones and what was left of them after someone had messed them up. this was meant to have a book balloon on the entire book. I wanted newer Fans to get the opportunity to go through the whole thing. This was an additional chapter. Instead, I got the three-day certificate. Fortunately, Tom has given me a refund. Thanks for coming through. Jax Franklin has given me a heap of correction work, hehe.
Comment from c_lucas
Some family members are not worth a trip across the street to meet. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Thee is very good imager.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Some family members are not worth a trip across the street to meet. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Thee is very good imager.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thanks Bro much appreciated. yes we have been cut off from a lot of my family and Louise's family are heading in the same direction. All because we are Saints mate! Meant this to be a Book Baloon still waiting to hear from Tom as to what happened.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Always enjoyable reflecting back on good times shared with those closest to us as this well written story depicts.
Sure writing this brought back fond memories of days gone by for you.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Always enjoyable reflecting back on good times shared with those closest to us as this well written story depicts.
Sure writing this brought back fond memories of days gone by for you.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thanks, mate appreciate you coming by. We are cut off from most of our families on both sides, these days. hard to know why sometimes.
Meant this to be a Book Baloon still waiting to hear from Tom as to what happened.
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Hey did you see Tootsie55 account is open again trying to do reviews over there to build up some funny money. Cost me a lot in Aus$ to get the account up for an other year over there.
Comment from royowen
I've always been a fan of your travels, Geoff, I've been to Barwon heads, although that's in Victoria not in NSW or Queensland. But I've also been to Walgett, I rather like NSW, we toured there in the early nineties with our gospel group. I remember airfares back then were prohitively expensive. Well done, Geoff, it's good to line up with our travels, well done, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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I've always been a fan of your travels, Geoff, I've been to Barwon heads, although that's in Victoria not in NSW or Queensland. But I've also been to Walgett, I rather like NSW, we toured there in the early nineties with our gospel group. I remember airfares back then were prohitively expensive. Well done, Geoff, it's good to line up with our travels, well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thanks Bro was supposed to be a Book balloon on this and the other old chapters but of course you have seen all the others this was a last addition. Thanks again.
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Well done Geoff
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story about your travels, it is not easy travelling to far places when in a wheelchair, the owners if sleep over facilities often have no idea what the needs of someone in a wheelchair is with their wheelchair facilities not even suitable to get to the toilet with a wheelchair.
One typo found. Par 3
I think we decided to go there again as we foiund(found) it ok the first time.
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A very well-written story about your travels, it is not easy travelling to far places when in a wheelchair, the owners if sleep over facilities often have no idea what the needs of someone in a wheelchair is with their wheelchair facilities not even suitable to get to the toilet with a wheelchair.
One typo found. Par 3
I think we decided to go there again as we foiund(found) it ok the first time.
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thanks, SIs I tried to put a book balloon on the entire book starting with this new chapter. The book has been around for a long time but I realised I need to add another chapter. Appreciate you coming by will go and correct that error.